|Reviews for The Boy Who Destroyed The World|
| Guest chapter 9 . 3/24/2013
Apparently, Ron mimics the sound harry made during the CoS book. Personally it sounds like an excuse from Rowling to pad that enormous Plot Hole.
| Schnuff chapter 12 . 11/22/2012
There is one good think about this story...that you didn't continue it.
Why? Because the whole *story* lacks is far too short. At every corner one would expect to read more about the why do they do that, what is happening now. But there is nothing. You only jump from one encounter to another. Not one of your characters is well written in fact most of them looks like comical persons.
| richardrobinsonjr chapter 12 . 8/12/2012
I liked this and look forward to the sequel.
| MythsterBlack chapter 9 . 8/3/2012
So far... well... while I enjoy reading any HP story I'm struck with the thought that this Author must be very young indeed or very, very inexperienced at anything in life, so far.
My best guess would be around 10 or 11 (if so) with rather, very good English writing skills but lacking in any experience. Meaning... the writing itself is very good in terms of spelling and grammar... for the most part anyway. But there is virtually no substance to whatever this plot line actually is. Mostly so far, it just rehashes JKRs first story with minor deviations.
There is almost no detail and I'm yet to understand the title, which seem at this point to have no baring whatsoever on this story. Perhaps it is miss titled?
Perhaps that title becomes clearer after several sequels?
The worst thing is the Author has no confidence in him/herself at all, by the Authors own notes after each chapter, basically putting him/herself down each time; which makes me want to stop reading this story while I cringe at the Authors lack of confidence in themselves, then telling all the readers that very lack of confidence in Author notes.
OK and to the Author... This is not meant to be a FLAME on your efforts but rather a bit of constructive criticism. STOP putting yourself down! One way to do that is STOP with the Author notes PERIOD.
Try a bit more character development i.e. depth of characters in your story. We all know these characters quite well so if they do things no in normal character you must explain why the charters are acting different. i.e. why is Snape so likeable, why is Dumblenutz CRAZY off his rocker and very, very out of normal character? If Fawkes is around why would he stay with Dumblenutz? Etc.
Well, that's all I have to say at this point except... Yes... I'm still reading so you still have my attention. *Grins*
(Professional Reviewer and Critic for 45 years, of all kinds of Fiction)
Experience is your best teacher... so... keep going.
| noreenklose chapter 12 . 6/22/2012
I enjoyed reading it.
Thanks for sharing.
Can't wait to read the sequel. Please make sure that Dumbles does hard time!
| Cringo chapter 6 . 5/29/2012
Why does Dumbledore want to kill Hermione? Which is probably answered in the next chapter. :)
My second question is why would you have Hermione sorted into Gryfindor? With the look of disappointment when the hat was lifted off, you just knew she was trying to get into the house of intelligence. Its been bugging me. LOL
| AmandaMau chapter 12 . 5/21/2012
Brilliant! Love this story and looking forward to part 2 :)
| guamja chapter 3 . 4/16/2012
I love Harry's response to Ron having to think about his family... Great work.
| WhiteElfElder chapter 12 . 3/28/2012
This was a decently short story. I like some of the changes to the plot and background to the story.
As for a love interest for Damien, I think Tonks has already started flirting for the position. Not to mention it makes more sense than Remus and Tonks together.
| bill560682 chapter 11 . 2/25/2012
as far as love interests for damien the head of the bones house could use a boyfriend to help bring up the houses numbers.
| bill560682 chapter 10 . 2/24/2012
now the only way i can figure sirius was thought to be the secret keeper was he would pull a piece of paper from his pocket and pretend to write on it the secret then pass it to the person then burn it. i do not think any of the few people he 'told' the secret would fall for something like that. an you need to remember everyone already thought there was a spy other then snape in the order so you would think dumbledore would read everyones minds to find out who it is. an have none of these people ever heard of secrecy oaths? deatheaters are able to rat each other out at the end of the war and peter is able to rat out the order.
| bill560682 chapter 6 . 2/24/2012
you could use harry's fight with the troll to get rid of his horclux? it seemed as thou he was nearly killed, but who is to say if he was not in fact killed in the fight.
| bill560682 chapter 5 . 2/24/2012
i think if damein wants something to do why not sue the makers of the harry potter childrens books as well as those selling things like harry potter dolls and action figures. this of course would end up leading back to dumbledore as the one to allow them as well as giving them the idea as to what harry looked like as he grew up. which would lead to dumbledore being found out about harry's living conditions and theft of harry's money since him saying i could not get into the potter vaults to leave it there could easily be proven wrong.
| bill560682 chapter 3 . 2/24/2012
personally i think harry would be very smart even if he does not always show it. the way i see it harry would likely go to the library at school instead of the the play ground to get beaten up by his cousin so that is just over 3 hours a week in the library. also he would likely be sent out to play on weekends when at home so no one begins to talk which means he would likely spend about 15 hours a weekend at the local library. so that is about 18 hours a week harry spends in the library not counting summer vacation. so that is 900 hours a year in a library now if you figure he likely spends a few hours a week here and there at the library on summer break as well you may as well round it up to an even 1,000. so if he started going to the library at say age 6 then that is 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 or 5 years of 1,000 hours a year at a library. an once he starts hogwarts he and his friends spend countless hours looks for different things in the library such as flummels name in year one and what is petrifying the students in year two and tri-wizard tournament in year four. you figure that has to be at least 1,000 hours a year. an to find what they are looking for they need to go threw tons and tons of books on spells, potions, magic animals and who knows what else. an since they need to read every page in every book they will most likely find lots of spells and potions that sound like they would be great to learn and thereby harry would start making a list of them and later learning them. an if you think about it hogwarts library is not as big as you would think. if it has 40,000 books in it that is really only 1,000 different books and they have 40 copies of each book so that everyone who comes to do their homework can have their own copy and does not have to fight over them. now with transfiguration, charms, defence and potions that would account for about 300 books of that 1,000 so even if harry only took one book a week out to study on his own time that is still 40 books a year likely 10 on each subject. so by the end of fouth year harry has read 40 books on each of the 4 subjects or 160 of the 300 books on those subjects. as far as harry spending time with his freinds harry has very few since first year everyone would be fawning over the great harry potter so he would likely go to the library to get away from that or to his dorm. second year everyone thought he was the one attacking the school so he would hide in the library or his dorm and fouth year everyone thought he put his name in the goblet of fire and hated him for stealing cedric's glory so he would also hide in the library or his dorm, thereby giving him lots of time to study on his own. an why harry would study potions would be to get snape of his back as well as to have something to use on his so-called family during the summers. an the potions that are to hard for harry to make he can have the weasley twins or oliver wood make and claim they are going to be used to prank his family during the summers. this would not be hard since in potions you set one dose to be graded by snape and the rest is done way with, now we bottle it instead of dumping it. an i am sure harry learns about owl ordering things so he can also buy finished potions if it something hogwarts students do not brew. an remember harry during third year was able to do a spell most grownups can not even do so his should learn spells very well so that as a first year he should be learning second and even third year spells on his own no problem, second year he should be up to fouth and fifth year spells an by third year he should be up to sixth and seventh year spells. so by the time fourth year is over harry should have moved on to subjects like runes and arithmancy and be threw at least first if not second year in those subjects on his own as well. you also can not forget harry spent time living at the inn conected to diagon alley during the summer before third year so he could have checked out any of the books at the book store there as well. so he could have snuck in there under his invisability cloak and spent 8 to 10 hours a day reading to his hearts content. if harry happens to be a speed reader so he can read a book in 30 minutes then that is 2 books an hours and 20 books a day which is 140 books a week and 520 books in one month. an even thou a book store may look as thou it has 40,000 books it is more like they have 1,000 books with 40 copies of each one, an if you leave out wizarding fiction books written for lonely housewives you can likely cut that number in half. an yes i know cannon harry was not allowed to be too smart otherwise granger would not have anything to do. also it would write ron out of the story do to him not being able to get harry to just slack off all the time.
| Assassin of Death chapter 1 . 1/23/2012
i've been looking for this fic for like 2 months after i first read it!