|Reviews for A Small Piece of Potter|
| Gravity's Child chapter 23 . 2/4
Aww. *coos happily* I can't wait for all of that damn Goat's ideas to fall apart. To read him watching his stupid ideas as they crumble into pieces in front of his face. It will be... wonderful. *purrs*
| Sailor GaOn Donut chapter 24 . 12/24/2013
i like it
| SlutPuppy chapter 24 . 12/9/2013
Right... I'm generally not one to criticize and leave long comments about how you should 'fix' your story.
(But, yeah; I'm doing that now; mostly because I have some time to actually sit here and write all it out. :))
I'm not going to go into plot/story lines (regardless of how cliched it is to have a SuperPowerful! Creature! HorriblyAbused! Harry (but-renamed-something-else-because-he's-really-not-James-and-Lily's-kid) thing going on) because I personally don't dig when people try to write my story for me. So I won't be doing that... Instead:
1) I would strongly recommend you consider getting a Beta. And I mean someone who can actually help with grammar, punctuation, story flow and maybe offer some ideas. There is a section on here just for Betas, so you can easily find one that's interested in working in your fandom/pairing/rating. (Also, asking for 'help' from readers is tacky and frankly reeks of desperation. [Plus, it might be considered a 'write your own story' sorta thing which is against the rules.]) If you're stuck, re-read the chapters and see what ideas come to you. Yeah, it's nice to see readers get into a story and offer ideas; but *you're* the author, it's *your* story.
2) Take the time to edit your chapters. Seriously. (You can copy and paste from the 'preview' screen and fix whatever needs it). They look sloppy riddled with errors; acknowledging that doesn't make it any better. It just looks lazy and like you don't give a damn.
(Also, it's really odd and confusing to have NOT A SLASH STORY in some of the earlier chapter notes and have it suddenly become a slash fic (not sure if you meant *at all* or it just wasn't going to be a Snarry story; either way, specify which so there isn't confusion because I noticed I'm not the only one that was confused by the conflicting notes). Mpreg should be mentioned in the first chapter (and maybe the summary as well) so people will know *before* they read your story and get involved; many people aren't into that sorta thing and won't appreciate the 'bait and switch'. Just sayin'.)
3) BE CONSISTENT- Make notes if you have to. It's confusing when the author can't keep track of things like character ages (Harry is 11, which would not make him an adolescent or a 'teenager' [I got confused when I saw that and wondered if maybe he was hit with an aging hex or something ;)]) or a character's NAME (if you're going to change the MAIN CHARACTER'S name, stick to it. It's confusing to be told his name is Adrian and then he's referred to as Harry for awhile and it flip flops around).
4) Try to keep your characters IN CHARACTER. Unless (like Harry/Adrian) there is a logical/legitimate reason given for the change, don't change them. (We like Snape snarky, dark, brooding and snarling. We like Tom/Voldemort evil, a shameless megalomaniac and a little crazy. etc. etc. etc.) Seriously. If you're really going to keep making Snape all mushy and Tom weeping with joy, maybe consider using an OC instead? It's just awkward reading characters that are so different from how they should be.
5) A/Ns in the middle of a chapter (or a sentence) is distracting and annoying. If you really really need to make a note mid-way through, use an asterisk (*) or some other small notation and add the A/N at the end.
6) Speaking of A/Ns, find a way to separate them from the story (there was a chapter or two where you did and it was sooo much better). It's annoying and sloppy to just run from the A/N right into the story. Some people want to skip the A/N (which is fine, especially when the author goes into commentary or gives out group shouts/thanks- I do it myself and I fully expect people to skip it but I can't seem to help myself LOL). Use bold, italics, the page break or a symbol of some sort -SOMETHING- to let the reader know where your notes end and the story starts.
7) Respect the people following (and the rules): don't post a chapter that's only an author's note. Whatever it is, it can wait until you can actually post a chapter. (Especially if it's just an apology for taking long to update/not updating. Seriously? That's the worst! Getting all excited to get that alert and it's just an A/N...)
I think that's about it... :/
It's hard to convey my helpful tone and I hope I didn't come off as bitchy or super-know-it-all ('cause I'm not; I'm learning as I go, too). I couldn't *not* comment but I totally get it if you ignore this or just think 'bitch' and go about your way as you were. All good. :) Happy writing!
| Kaya70 chapter 24 . 12/6/2013
Love it hope that you update soon cannot wait for your next chapter
| Gravity's Child chapter 24 . 11/18/2013
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
| Amanda Star chapter 24 . 9/27/2013
Man I hate Dumbledore because of pain that he had "cause" Harry and his family. That Headmaster needs to go like right now.
| Amanda Star chapter 19 . 9/27/2013
Dumbledore needs to go like right now.
| becky.wright.71868 chapter 24 . 9/22/2013
omg amasing storie hope yoy continue it. xx
| Amanda Star chapter 21 . 9/22/2013
Hurray For Harry.
| djaddict chapter 24 . 9/18/2013
Enjoying the story so far and eagerly anticipating more!
You might, however, want to change the author's note at the beginning of chapter ten where you state that the story will "not be slash ever" lol
| SAGGYHERMAN chapter 24 . 9/15/2013
Oh lovely chapter
| ShatteredDragon chapter 24 . 9/9/2013
I love this story please update soon
| Mashkai30 chapter 24 . 9/7/2013
Lovely story! I like it thus far and am looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing!
| jeanette9a chapter 24 . 9/6/2013
Awe sweet. XD
| geetac chapter 24 . 9/5/2013
I like the chapter