Reviews for keep on searching for your fairytale
I Am Me And I Can Fly chapter 1 . 2/24/2011
For some reason I've always been a Lily/Loecan person, but it was a nice pairing in the end.
Fiori Omega chapter 1 . 2/24/2011
I really liked how you gave a little explanation for why he dated each girl. Also, how you incorperated the quote and prompt into the story was really clever, and I feel like it fits well. However, I think the story could use some better transitions, and to me the girls didn't seem to be extremely developed.

Creativity: 4/5

Using of character, genre, quote/prompt/song: 5/5

Grammar: 5/5

In-character: 5/5

Flow: 3/5

Total: 22/25
homeathogwarts chapter 1 . 2/23/2011
This is so cute! The storyline kept me entralled, and I enjoyed it all the way through. Each of the characters mentioned was developed in a surprisingly well-done way considered how they came and went. I'm impressed. :)

Creativity: 4.5/5

Using of character, genre, quote/prompt/song: 5/5

Grammar: 5/5

In-character: 5/5

Flow: 4/5

Total: 23.5/25
A Bullfrog's Worst Nightmare chapter 1 . 2/22/2011
Great job! You were able to keep my interest throughout the story. I loved the character you gave Lorcan and the relationship he has with his brother. Loved the idea you were about to get from the prompt, too! It seemed a little choppy when you moved from scene to scene. It still read fine to me and I was able to understand it, it was just I didn't like the sudden scene changes. :/

Overally you did really well with this challenge! Here's my score for you:

Creativity: 5/5

Using of character, genre, quote/prompt: 5/5

Grammar: 4/5

In-character: 5/5

Flow: 3/5

Total: 22/25

motherpucker chapter 1 . 2/20/2011
LUCYLORCAN FTW - but, oh, I'll always love DomLorcan!

Ahh, Mad, this was so much *fun* to read because you've got such a *brilliant* writing style and this was something *unique* and *memorable*.

I *loved* your Lorcan! He's fantastic!

~ Ella xXx
kingslayers chapter 1 . 2/16/2011
I'm a LilyLorcan, but I do like this one :)
Rising From The Flames chapter 1 . 2/16/2011
Great job! I really liked it. I love how you had many different Lorcan pairings so no matter who you preferred him with, he would be with her at some point. I think it's creative too, you've taken a common story line and given it your own twist. I love your use of the prompt and you worked the quote in very cleverly (is that even a word :P) The grammar was good, there were no mistakes that took away from the story. Seeing as we never really meet any of these characters other than Lily, and we don't even really get to know her, you had a lot of freedom with the characters and they felt real. The only problem I had was that with the multiple breaks, it felt very choppy. None of the pieces between the breaks flowed into each other. Other than that, it was really good! Here's your score! :D

Creativity: 5

Using of Character, genre, quote/prompt:5

Grammar: 5

In-Character: 5

Flow: 2

Total: 22
BlueEyes444 chapter 1 . 2/16/2011
One of my favorite pairings and this is my favorite story about them, there's no doubt. Wonderful job. :D
RoseScor90 chapter 1 . 2/16/2011
Do I even have to say I loved the LucyLorcan?

It was really cute, though I did get angry with Lorcan for breaking so many hearts!

Lucy was so sweet and adorable!

I loved how their believes came together to create a fairytale!

Well done!