Reviews for Motivation
dragonfilia chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
Wow I really like this story. The premise is really good. I hope you keep at this one.

Also, I couldn't help but notice that when he remembered his library kage bunshin. One of them had memories reading of yesterday. This could be because they all stem from and return to the same source I suppose. However, it was written highly personally (/I/ did this..ect) Is this a facet of kage bunshin you intend to play with. The creation of hold-over mental construct creation or something similar?

I have seen that once in my reading of Naruto fanfiction, but I cannot remember the story. I thought the premise was very interesting, though.
Uldihaa chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
I was a bit hesitant with this story, mainly because too many fanfic authors forget that the canon teams are about the best balanced you can get with those characters; at least at the beginning. When you shuffle them around too much, the resulting teams become dreadfully unbalanced to the point that some might actually be virtually worthless outside of extremely narrow roles. As you've pointed out in this fic.

I do like the rotation through multiple sensei idea, though. Paired with the shifting teams, you'll get ninja that are used to working with a broad spectrum of people and abilities. It'll also help with giving them experience in lots of different roles. Though you might want to address the problem that the bonds between them would take longer to form and deepen than if it would using the canon set-up.

I really like the way Hinata justified what she was doing. 'Oh, I really want to see him, so I'll just make him breakfast as an apology for coming over so early!' and 'Oh, he might still be asleep! He needs his rest, so I'll just let myself in so that I don't wake him. I'll just pick this lock and...' Comedy gold. Please continue having justifying!-Hinata regularly interacting with Naruto.
Ralob chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
Great story! I find your genin training to be absolutely fascinating. I eagerly await future updates.
InARealPickle chapter 1 . 2/24/2011
Naruto may get a harem... or Naruto Will get a harem?

Which is it? Please let me know, because I'm not wasting time reading the first 3 chapters if you are going to spring that crap on us later.

Nice sized chapters by the way. Also a catchy story summary.
Das Leech chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
Thank you for another great chapter. I find your Stalker-Hinata rather creepy. All in all the dynamics feel right, even with the slight changes .. couldn't imagine Shino threatening someone in his team of nine though .. that one was a little odd. What I think the story would benefit from would be a little more insight into the teachers thoughts, especially Kakashi, at this point. They get their little scenes but the hows and whys are still rather vague. Of course, I'm fairly sure that's on purpose and will eventually be adressed in future chapters.

DL
kidneysrgood chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
I really like the pace of the story, and I enjoyed listening to Monk!Asuma. Nice job man.
In Like Vin chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
Very nice. I do appreciate the note at the bottom of chapter 1 where you mention that you may have overdone it a little with Sasuke, as I was a little concerned as well. But besides that, I'm really impressed by the story as a whole.

I LOVED the scene where the feedback from the bunshin knocks Naruto out. Not only did the two perspectives - Naruto and Hinata - make it hilarious, but the way you played with their perception of time was really quite awesome. Looking forward to more.
firelordeg chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
thank you for sharing this fantastic chapter i love this story please continue a.s.a.l.a
kairai-kun chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
this is obviously a very well thought out, well planned fic
Darkemace chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
I just wanted to point out that while eastern philosophers see it as a point of deep contemplation, in the western world the sound of one hand clapping is known as a slap to the face.
the kwp chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
Shikamaru does an excellent job as Chibikage. I wonder how long it will take for them to realize that he has solid advice and ideas. Clearly, Naruto is already learning that - which will in the end make him a stronger leader. Naruto's ability to inspire combined with the ability to creatively improvise, and listen to good advice brings with it much promise.

I find that your portrayal of Kakashi to be very interesting. This is the first story to really take a stab at dealing with his sense of guilt, obligation, and twisted adaptation to life. I do not know if Anko is someone who can help him resolve these issues, but his willingness to think about trying might be enough to at least change the dynamic.

Good work with this story. With Chapter 2 when it became clear it wouldn't start with a team of Shino, Shikamaru and Naruto, I felt a little cheated and disappointed. Seeing how you are actually implementing it, and seeing that those three are working as a team regardless of their official assignment placing, I am becoming hooked on this story.

I am glad that you have positive changes in your life, though I am sorry that it means a reduction in your writing time. Thanks for contributing so much!
Juoppo chapter 1 . 2/24/2011
Well, this is interesting. Your prose is fairly good and all, but characterization could use some work. At first, Shikamaru's musing seems like the author is talking. Then, Sasuke bashing ruins that character fairly well; it's fine to not like some character, but twisting them into this creature that everyone would love to hate is just going to make your story worse.

Other than that, it's just Shikamaru and Shino explaining stuff to Naruto, which isn't all that interesting in itself. There's no emotion involved, either; you tell us about Naruto being amazed and floored by the positive attention, but I can't really feel anything from these events. It's rather boring, to tell you the truth.
Midoriryu chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
Well, so much to comment on it's hard to figure out where to start.

Asuma, I think you wrote him in his role beautifully. I think Naruto, and Sasuke have the greatest need and potential growth from his training. Hinata as well.

Bastard Sensei, I actually think the role Kakashi has is the absolute best one he could have had if he wants to make up with Naruto. It'll be interesting to see how it goes.

Kakashi and Anko, that is something that is going to be very interesting to watch as things go forward.

Naruto's realization that dispersing that many clones at one time, better to learn that now rather than later.

"they were trying to tear the underneath's head off to peer down its throat" Is Anko going to keep this observation to herself?

"Hinata is capable of hitting harder than Bastard-sensei has elected to strike me so far," Would I be wrong in thinking that Shikamaru will be keeping this in mind for the future?

I don't know if you plan a Naruto/Hinata ship or not, but but either way I really like how you're developing Hinata as a character and the interaction between the two.

As to your comment about marking this story as a favorite, you're already a favorite author of mine. :)
Akira Stridder chapter 3 . 2/24/2011
hmmmm.,..
Akira Stridder chapter 1 . 2/23/2011
not bad...
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