Reviews for Motivation
Kind Fearless Leader chapter 1 . 2/18/2011
I accept blame.

I have altered your choice of story to write.

Pray that I do not alter it further.

Team Assassin-o shall prevail!
Hero Slayer chapter 1 . 2/18/2011
Interesting.

I mean, so many things can go wrong with that first day so it's not that surprising to see changes in that, but there is the point. If Kage Bunshins send their memories back, why the hell did Naruto not notice it right away.

I mean, I can understand if he's dim, that's fine. Give is a while, but he's been using that technique, creating what has to be hundreds of thousands if not millions of clones before the time skip. You're telling me he doesn't notice that he's suddenly gaining that much freaking experience.

Yeah, that kinda bothered me after I got past the original, oh cool that's an awesome technique stage, when it was explained.

Ah Shikamaru, I can mentally hear the repetition of 'Mendoukusei' along with the mental thoughts. As he's mentally complaning about all of this he's probably already managed weight the pros and cons of everything and the probabilities of all the choices and decided the best.

Shino, Shino when he's not played for last is pretty awesome. I mean, who would think the bug on your back that's slightly annoying would be the thing that's tracking you. So much potential there.

Can't see the rest of this.
RandomFanDude chapter 1 . 2/18/2011
Very nice; I like it. Naruto with smart people giving him advice... scary thought.

I'm looking forward to seeing more, but I'm also glad you're focusing on finishing other works first. Your writing is good, and I want to see your stories finished.
Wonderbee31 chapter 1 . 2/18/2011
Neat to see this new fic here, and a great start to say the least, hoping to see more of this new trio start out here and make a name for themselves, as well as see what goes on with Anko and Kakashi, and how Kaka might be able to get past that horrible first mistake with Naruto there.
DisMinded chapter 1 . 2/18/2011
Killing off Iruka in the first chapter? That is refreshingly bold. And I haven't read many Naruto fics that focus to any real extent on Shikamaru, so that's interesting as well. I look forward to reading more of this.

(Yeah, it's well written and well plotted, but that almost goes without saying for your writing at this point).
TheDarkFreak chapter 1 . 2/18/2011
My thoughts while going over this:

Heh, so Kakashi just shuts up to avoid dealing with people.

Wow, Anko can be forceful. I think I like that...

Huh, I guess this is taking place at the beginning of the series.

WHOA. HOLY SHIT. Did NOT see that coming.

"Dobe"? Do you mean "Dope"?

Damn, dick move, Sasuke.

Wow, this is looking like it's going to be much darker than the real series. Quite like it

I'd like to see more of Shino, too. I really think I'm going to like this fic :D

Ok, Shino's both badass and hilarious with the desk thing. REALLY liking this XD

Hmm, while it's fairly easy to notice POV changes, I think I'd still like breaks in-between, like in K:BDH.

"Soft-cover missile of hardcore death" HAHAHAHAHAHAH

Well, all in all, I am still not disappointed in subscribing to you as an author. A very good story, well written. You take the Naruto characters and make them your own, while still making them believeable. You have a real talent when it comes to characterization. Do not stop writing!
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