Reviews for Shadow Play
Bluemew22 chapter 17 . 1/22
Not gonna lie. I was expecting you to go with the story of Dark Dan, not FREderick issAcK SHOWenhower. well played, well played...
kyoanna chapter 19 . 10/19/2014
Some of the stuff u have explained is rather unnecessary in my opinion this is not a bad fanfic as the author of this fanfic u have artistic liscense and most other stuff like the amnesia plothole if readers were really bothered by it could think a lil and come up with that solution similar with dani using shy during stressful situations or why dani somewhat ignored typical conventions of parent/child interaction the bounty hunter things u mentioned are actually quite clear or obviously made to make you wonder the ice thing even for people who question her getting ice powers is one of ur decisions as a fanfic author to give her just like it was ur decision to write this and invent shy u don't have to necessarily make it what would have been had the series continued cuz its fanfic which part of its purpose is to come up with possibilties when questions weren't answered in the original similarly with vlad and while I loved here ur thought process in coming up with that it is completely unecsseary to beat urself up it is highly easy that after a moments thought think about exactly how plausible it is that vlad woultny just give up hell its been like 20 years and he still hasn't given up on maddie even all the failed schemes by someone clearly weaker and he still kept trying another thing with such a huge gamble as revealing his ghost half do u think he wouldn't have a backup plan? Anyway point being stop beating urself up this isn't a bad fic I love the char developement you did and I think not showing the parents much was a well worked decision that added rather than detracted from the storythe interactions between the various characters was amazing and until the last few chapters it seemed really well worked out especially knowing now that it was a as it comes to me fic a lot of the things u went on to explain could eaasily be deduced or their mystery added to the story the plotline flowed nicely and I think overall the reactions were very beleivable and it was actually a really good fic if anything at all detracted it was the self deprecationg in you an's that became increasingly obvious anyway I really liked it and good job
kyoanna chapter 8 . 10/19/2014
Actually I know several teachers used to that as well as random pencil fights mock punchng fight arguments over weird stuff (like what I would do with an army of clones, whether a hairspray grenade/flamethrower arsenal or nail canon woould be more effective in a zombie apocalypse, whether or not shed ever get proof that I'm sercretly girly (which she won't cuz I'm not *looks shiftily away) and what would everyone look like if they were the opposite gender/a vampire/ from a different universe/from a different time period/ from one of our many fandoms) also random staring contests elaborate drawings on tsts coffe stained homework assignments people acting like five years random spinning laughing for no apparemt reason inside jokes sudden deadpanning preying to the heavens and overall craziness (wow I just realized what a nightmare me and my bestfriend we're for teachers) anyway great so far I love that ur showing those little things like how they act and yet its not just a daily monoloogue in that u put int a little something that doesn't always happen and makes u react
kyoanna chapter 5 . 10/19/2014
Sad to say I had a substitute who could be this mans twin jassiem was a deaf kid in my class usually no problem except this one day we had a substitute almost just like that I don't remember his name but for reference I hereby dub him jeb he looked unbeleivably like ur decription anyway roll call started and he got to jasseim being deaf he didn't hear instead he was writing part of the essay we were assigned last class as per the instructions on the board trhoughout the year I had become his unofficial spokeperson so when he called for jassiem I said "he's here and ggestured to him jeb snapped about the student in question having to answer and proceeded to cut me off and preventing me from answering he proceeded to call for jasseim and when I attempted to get jassiems attention the sub snapped at me walked up to jassiem and proceeded to rant at jasseim for not paying attention mind u jassiem had no clue what he was saying and after the man then threaghtened in school suspension for the remainder of the day (it was last period but it would end up on his record as a full day) I got up and insulted the men in 3 languges including sign language whilst using an extremely high vocab and demeaning tone of voice I got said suspension but the teacher running the iss room was one of my teachers so I got to go back to class becaus e as I said I was his unnoficial spokeperson and usually his translator would be there but since our usual teacher for that particular class spoke sign langauge and I understood his speech and weird abbreviations quite well I did the translations between him and any other students anyway the iss teacher took over for the sub but apparently while I was gone jeb continued to be a jackass anyway on a lighter note I managed to teach a deaf guy how to say my name but not an english teacher -.- sad/funny right? Anyway back on topic again great story
kyoanna chapter 3 . 10/19/2014
*sigh* I don't get y since she was cloned preice poxers she wouldn't have them sure they probably would have developed later but what gave danny his? His ice core which is fundamentaly a part of him liekly a part of his ghostly dna she has his ghost dna so she probably would have developed them later danny didn't develope all his powers at once iand it stands to reason neither would she people seem to think that since he didn't know about them she coouldnt have gotten them but she wasn't programmed with only what was known about danny she was created with his dna which likely held more info than anyone knew think about it this way danny already had duplication(not that it functioned properly) and his ghostly wail both powers danny didn't get until he got much stronger same with his ice powers dani had yet to develope either duplication or the ghostly wail like danny it stands to reason that she would also develope powers as she got stronger potentially including those danny had gotten after her creation because agaian just because noone knew about them doesn't mean his dna which she had didn't have the blueprint for thos powers enuf of my rambling anyway great story so far
MushuFireLorde chapter 1 . 5/28/2013
My last name is Haynes like shyann. Anyway, I love ur imagination and creativity. Every sentence has enough details for me to clearly visualize every scene ;) I really like where it is going.
ChibiRanter chapter 1 . 5/28/2013
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SUMMER I AM 15 YEARS OLD i have BLONDE

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AM DEAD. IF U DONT COPY THIS JUST LIKE

FROM THE RING, COPY N POST THIS ON 5

MORE SITES.. OR.. I WILL APPEAR ONE

DARK QUIET NIGHT WHEN UR NOT ExPECTING

IT BY YOUR BED WITH A KNIFE AND KILL

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Guest chapter 18 . 5/15/2013
please make more stories about Shyann and Danielle, I can't wait any longer. is shyann ever going to be able to talk? your writing i REALLY good no random capitals good grammer, and exiting plots. I REALLY WANT YOU TO HURRY UP IN MAKING THE OTHER STORIES.
Guest chapter 18 . 5/11/2013
This is frecking amazing! One of the best phantom stories i've red!
Guest chapter 16 . 5/11/2013
Eeeee, i can't contain the exitment but is dani gonna play a bigger role?
Guest chapter 14 . 5/11/2013
The tension is KILLING me
Guest chapter 13 . 5/11/2013
KEEP ON WRITEING AND DON'T YOU DARE STOP!
Guest chapter 10 . 5/11/2013
You really know how to work someone up.
Guest chapter 8 . 5/11/2013
Filler or not you could make my chinese homework intresting!
Guest chapter 7 . 5/11/2013
Love it seriously consider being a author as a futur career
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