Reviews for The Queen's Shield
Gunlord500 chapter 1 . 2/20/2011
Hey, AdamLL! An Isadora fic? Cool I liked it, but there are some things you could work on, mainly in terms of style. Firstly, more comma placement would be nice; for instance, "Will do milady." might be better as "Will do, milady." Also, in general, the fic has sort of a...stunted, feel to it, I guess? Like, every paragraph is just a line long. In some cases, especially the battle scenes, this gives the reader-well, this reader, at least-kind of a disjointed feel. Still, not bad. Keep improving, my friend! :D