hahaha absolutely brilliant and funny story! I liked how you showed both Sirius and Hermione struggling with their inner thoughts and trying to keep their feelings undercover. It really added tension to see how they each fought with themselves before finally giving up on suppressing it any longer. The ending where they got walked on by was also quite great.
Thanks :)

See? Told you I'd read it soon!

Very nice fic! :D You can definitely feel the sparks flying between them. Feels a bit rushed, but it *is* a one shot, so I think you did a great job. You should write more. Get your ankles wet this time. Go for a longer fic :D

I know you can give us readers something amazing!

Cheers!

C.

Never thought I'd ship it, but you made me rethink Sirius/Hermione. A job well done!(:

You should write more fanfiction, even though you think its crap. That's basically what everyone does on this site!
Loved this fic, wish you had other fics I could read.

Nicely done! I love their argument and different points of view!

wow i really love your writing style! this was great. if i had to comment on anything, it would just be the tense change and the fact that i wish it was longer (because i love what you did with the pairing and wanted to read more haha). but really, great job. hope you write more soon :) x

Loved it! I love Sirius/Hermione, and you made it even better!

-Dawn (DOASI)

Congratulations on your first Fan Fiction!

I was very impressed with your voice, the characters were immediately spunky and it made the fic very amusing.

I wish that you'd drawn it out a little more and let us get a feel for the situation before she went for him, just because after everything I'm still curious as to what they were fighting about. :)

The only thing that really threw me off was that you switched tense somewhere in there from past to present.

I loved that they got caught by Harry and Ron in the end, and thought of Harry when I read 'green eyed monster'.

Overall, very entertaining- thanks!

haha good story but awkward for Ron and Harry

that was very cute! good descriptors, I could see him sit back and just watch her after he riled her up. nice job!