|Reviews for A nightmare on elm street Dream daughter|
| Dylexa chapter 1 . 1/3/2012
Hello! Dylexa here!
First of all, I noticed you added me to your favorites list, so I felt the need to check out your stuff. I call it "Equivalent Exchange"! (If you've seen "Fullmetal Alchemist", you'll understand why I use that phrase.) Not bad, really! Chapter one was pretty interesting! I'll have to read the rest later! I enjoyed reading it!
I noticed though that you haven't really been writing anything in a while. (; Don't mean to sound like a hypocrite! I haven't published anything in months! I'm still writing a fanfic though. It's just not worthy enough to publish yet!) I also noticed the reviews you got, and that made me worried. If you're not writing anything because you're afraid of what people would say, then that really isn't good. If you really enjoyed writing this, and if you're planing on continuing writing, then I highly urge you to continue! Inspiration shouldn't really be smothered by grammar, at the least, not on the rough draft! If you really need help with your grammar, you should consider getting an editor! I edit for a couple of my friends here and in school!
If you are in need of help, you can contact me by email. Here's my email if you're interested:
DHalpern1901 gmail . com (I really hope this email shows up on the review.)
I urge you to keep writing, youngster! You've got quite a lot of potential, and literature is truly amazing!
| Jenova's son chapter 6 . 7/26/2011
| iheartslashers chapter 6 . 5/30/2011
Good, but you really must learn where to break off into another paragraph.
I'd harp about the grammar too, but thats just me.
Why did the main character go groom not wanting to kill anyone to suddenly wanting people to be killed?
Sometimes the story is in first person for a sentence or so, which makrs for congusing reading.
Can you be more descriptive please?
All in all, not a bad little story. :)
| mary-sues suck chapter 5 . 4/13/2011
Is that it. Thats your last chapter what a waste. BTW I'd leave the cross-overs for writers that are not lazy take advice know how to write good fanfiction and actually know alot more about the characters they are writing about then you.
| mary-sues suck chapter 4 . 4/13/2011
Well if your too lazy to rewrite a really bad story why should anyone bother reading or leaving any reviews to it when you shown no curtsy to the readers or to the people that have tryed to help you
| Sasuke The Run Away chapter 1 . 3/27/2011
Awesome, this actually rocks! Onto chapter 2! _
| BUFFY KRUEGER chapter 3 . 3/11/2011
Thanks for the shout out and I think you might have to re-write chapters 1 and 2 just to make chapter 3 more plausible because now all of a sudden Kathryn knows that the man of her dreams is her father even though the last two chapters she didn't. Also explain how everyone in school knows who Kathryn is also her parents because the orphanage wouldn't say because they are not permitted to disclose a child's real identity. Also try and paragraph abit more easier to read especially when characters are talking. Again Kathryn's turning into a Mary Sue if you want to know what a Mary Sue is check my story Once Upon A Nightmare it's a total piss take to what a Mary Sue is. This is a much better chapter just needs tweaking out abit. Keep going xo
| BUFFY KRUEGER chapter 2 . 2/25/2011
Why would anyone know who Kathryn really was if she don't know herself and obviously the people that adopted her wouldn't want a child of a serial killer if they knew and the orphanage wouldn't tell them. Also if she did know who she was then she know that the man in her dreams is her father cause in the first chapter he transform in front of her eyes. I can see what you trying to do again this story is OK but has to be more plausible and sorry Kathryn is turning into a Mary-Sue describe what she looks like now and give her more personalty or say what person she is now. Is she outgoing,sullen,friendly,a loner,brainy etc. Keep going it will all come together. Also I gotta say I did like the nightmare Kathryn had that was well written
| BUFFY KRUEGER chapter 1 . 2/25/2011
The idea that you have is a good one maybe if you paragraph the first chapter out a bit more it might be easier to read. Try and stick with the classic nightmare on elm street. Also make it more plausible and believable about Kathryn's adoption and upbringing try not to turn her into a Mary Sue. Maybe add a bit more about her adoptive family. Also maybe but some detail into why Kathryn has changed and don't member who she really is. Don't give up this is alright just needs tweaking out abit keep going
| hungar games123 chapter 1 . 2/25/2011
I found this short story to be quite interesting and has a charm about it that makes the reader want to come back for more. obviously the writer had put a great deal of thought into this story and has a unique feel for what entails a thriller. the use of kathryns name could be eliminated in a place or two but other than that I found it to be more than interesting and am looking forward to the next writing. keep up the good work your potiential for writing exceeds that of most. thank you hungar games 126 opps i mean 123
| Beastly1 chapter 1 . 2/24/2011
I really like this story plz put up chapter 3