Reviews for Midnight Sun
The.Ocean.Shadow chapter 16 . 3/30/2013
update this.
The.Ocean.Shadow chapter 1 . 3/30/2013
intriguing.
ProngsandI chapter 16 . 12/14/2012
It's very good. I'm not actually a Twilight fan, I have to say that before continuing. I don't have any major objections to the story plot, it's just that there are many grammatical errors and the books should have been in editing for a few more years. The major problem I have with Twilight fanfictions is that they are usually hastily thought out, contain no substance and are rife with errors, both in terms of spelling and grammar. Therefore, when I say this it is the highest praise I can give you. You write very well. You do need to go back and carefully read each chapter because there are a few errors, but they are minimal in numbers. In addition, it would be beneficial for you to take out the author notes that you've inserted, instead of actual chapters. I think you should in fact continue this story. Also, I have a small request. y'all is not in fact an English word. I'm going to assume you're from the U.S.A, but I'm from Canada and y'all is like nails on a chalkboard for me. If it's not in dialogue, you should drop use of it in writing. If you're considering becoming a writer, you'll need to get into that habit now. Thank you for the (so far) interesting story.
Guest chapter 13 . 9/10/2012
dont forget to do a chapter on the port angeles chapter.
Guest chapter 16 . 8/14/2012
I love this story. I hope you will keep writing it 3
Louisvuittonfreak chapter 16 . 8/3/2012
Great job...
Louisvuittonfreak chapter 14 . 8/2/2012
You should be very proud...you are very talented.
CJluvzdecullens chapter 16 . 6/22/2012
I love this story its really good

Please update soon

Cjluvzdecullens
Christina96 chapter 16 . 6/21/2012
PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE ... WRITE MORE NOW ... I LOVE THIS STORY CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE ... PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE... (If i didn't say it enough already) PLEASE DON'T DROP THIS STORY...

OK I THINK I AM GOOD ...

I'll LET U WRITE NOW D
sunshine lili chapter 15 . 2/28/2012
thank you wonderful
Demon'sGrace chapter 15 . 1/22/2012
Just a couple remarks, not bad but the charactes change their moods way to fast, one moment Rose is spitting poison and the next she's heeling like a puppy, normally people can keep their mind set for a little longer(such as they admit defeat but are bitter about it) unless they have a good reason to change so drasticly. Other then that I suggest that you change up your wording or sentence structure every once in a while, when every third word is the same the paragragh becomes awkward and the reader ends up getting distracted(like a teacher who says "um" every time they take a breath, you end up caring less about the subject matter and more about how often they can say "um" in fourty-five minutes.)
ILoveCherryLimeade chapter 15 . 12/31/2011
Please continue writing it. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
supernaturalobsessionfemale chapter 15 . 12/30/2011
i love your story sooo much and im sooo glad that you updated i am soooo looking forward to chapter 16!
Vampire-Girl1992 chapter 15 . 12/28/2011
I'm so glad you decided to continue with this story, I really love it :) keep up the great writing!
NeverEndingImagination1210 chapter 15 . 12/27/2011
I can't stop smiling. my cheeks writing
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