|Reviews for Harry amidst the Vaults of Stone|
| deitarionSSokolow chapter 10 . 5/18/2011
Excellent fic so far. You've really done well as far as your world-building goes.
I wish I could say more, but it's already quarter past midnight and I forgot to take notes as to the parts that especially tickled my fancy.
| bluezy261175 chapter 10 . 5/18/2011
I am in awe of your writing. It is well structured and just works. I will add this story to my C2, not because I find it is such a special story but because your writing style is just fantastic. Now don't misunderstand me, the story is well written and well thought out but your writing style is what makes me become a fan.
| noylj chapter 3 . 5/18/2011
You know, any time Bumbles or Molly comes on the scene, the story just sort of turns to molasses?
| noylj chapter 2 . 5/18/2011
There can never be equality if one group whines about he or she or brotherhood or sisterhood.
You can work to change a culture, but you can not whine or order it changed.
Also, like trifles to the goblins, there is no honor in getting upset over things that don't matter.
| noylj chapter 1 . 5/18/2011
Again, is Harry going to any adult that cares for him?
However, he will certainly be better off than with Vermin and Tunie.
Hope he isn't mistreated as a wizard by the goblins-talk about the equivalent of a mudblood...
| demonicnargles chapter 10 . 5/17/2011
Just found this story, and thought it was pretty awesome.
I don't so much like the Lucius Legilemency thing, but that's more a personal preference. Also, I think it was a plot hole by JKR. I mean, a silent, undetectable, and nearly-irresistible mind-reading spell that any trained person can use on anyone? JKR handwaves it as being rare, but any self-respecting magical politician would have perfect Legilemency and Occlumency if it really existed, which would make it common. Which would mean everyone and their dog would be learning Occlumency to counter it.
Anyway, looking forward to next time.
| Lansday-Larry chapter 10 . 5/17/2011
Excellent story, looking forward to the next chapters.
| sh777 chapter 10 . 5/17/2011
Thanks for the update.
| Guest chapter 10 . 5/17/2011
Is there any chance that between flitwick and the books in the black vault he's going to learn Occlumency before he meets Dumbledore?
Love this story - Pucks
| DarkRavie chapter 10 . 5/16/2011
I like your fic and look forward to reading what happens in your next chapter.
| Goldencoyote chapter 10 . 5/16/2011
I Like this, keep going
| Astarael's love chapter 10 . 5/16/2011
*Reviews for the sake of it*
I really like this story, it's intelectually stimulating without being overly informative; a tricky balance for any author, but something you've pulled off well. Harry seems a little too mature, perhaps, in earlier chapters, but that's overlookable.
Try to aoid making his speech too formal or wordy, it really irks me when there is no difference in tone between the author's and charachters' speech. You can make Harry as polite as you like, but he's still a human being and not a cardboard cut out in this story, and I worry that that could change.
*I'e read too many fics that could have been great but annoyed me away just because of this*
-Came off a bit ranty there, I do like your story, really!
| yuiop chapter 10 . 5/15/2011
| midnight98 chapter 10 . 5/15/2011
I like it so far. I can't wait for more!
| Blik chapter 10 . 5/15/2011
Real time reaction log.
One of the consistent joys I get from reading original stories is the unique idioms that authors come up with. Every culture has their own. I really love the expletive "Rocks fall!" and the accusation that Dumbledore is "rusting the Gobalin's doors" with misinformation.
... ... ...Dire naked mole rat? o.O
...and then there are times when idioms break down. Tusk-beast, indeed. On a related note, I wonder if anyone will be able to discern Harry's origins by analyzing his accent when he finally emerges Above Ground.
But apparently there won't be any need to divine something like that. Because Malfoy KNOWS.
I was wondering what was protecting Harry's mind from revealing his secrets to Malfoy. I'd forgotten about the Brotherhood Oaths. How convenient. It's really too bad they didn't keep the biggest bombs from dropping.
You really have an excellent story going here. Keep up the good work!