Reviews for All the Pieces Lie Where they Fell
meiloorun-notthe-fruit chapter 2 . 1/7
AXELLLLL
i have to say, he's become my favorite charcter, second to only roxas (sorry sora). Ater everythingm i hope he remembers he's lea
Chocobochocolate chapter 13 . 4/12/2016
...Ok...

The pairings are Sora x Kairi, Sora's Nobody-with-some-Ven-mixed-in x Kairi's Pseudo-Nobody, and Riku x Sora's imperfect Nobody-clone-of-his-memories-of-Kairi.

I believe I have found the first Penrose Love-Tribar...
Lyrista chapter 97 . 9/20/2015
I spent the day reading through this story from start to finish. It was a great ride and I enjoyed it very much. Kudos for this great work and for managing to finish it all the way to the end.
Ariastella chapter 82 . 8/19/2015
Does this mean that Sora & Roxas can't Dual Wield anymore? Also, can Sora still use Wing Blade & Final Form, 'cause that was flippin' epic & I'd absolutely hate to them go.
Spyrkle10 chapter 17 . 4/30/2015
!l
Agent Duck O'Rico chapter 28 . 11/17/2014
It looks like Saïx is literally the only one who actually wants to follow Xehanort and its fuckin amazing
89niners-best-team-ever chapter 52 . 6/20/2014
After reading this so far, i'am very disappointed in your Sora. He's always getting beaten up, roxas always have to save him, everyone makes fun of him, he's useless so far in this story while everyone is better. I want to in game sora. Not this whimp here.
Ai Mamoru chapter 96 . 4/15/2014
Okay, I need some time to gather my thoughts.

At first, I guess a "wow!" or "superb!" is in order. That was terrific. The first long KH fanfiction I've read from cover to cover. I've desperately searched for a fic with a KHIII setting, after watching all the cutscenes of the games I couldn't play, but I finding one was SO hard. I didn't imagine it such a tricky task, either the the plot was rubbish and I didn't give the story a chance, the writing was sooooo bad, that I couldn't stand keep reading, even though the plot was good, or the characters were so out of order and awkward I wasn't able to continue.

I didn't had problems like that with your story. Your writing style is really enjoyable, your plot was interesting, good and reasonable and your characters in character most of the time (at least in my opinion). I think you've done a particularly good job on Sora, even though I can't imagine Sora kissing somebody, BUT I'm really happy he did regardless and I hope to see it on screen someday ;)
Your story felt really Kingdom Heart-ish and gamelike, you did a really good job on keeping the original atmosphere.
The fiction as a whole was really great. Though there are a few things I didn't like:

Firstly I had quite the problem to stomach the paring Riku x Namine and Roxas x Xion (but I was totally with you on Sora x Kairi :) ). I guess the reason is, that I didn't feel any romantic vibes between those characters in the games. It might be that I missed them, because I only saw the cutscenes (except for KHI and KHII), but aren't those the most important scenes and wouldn't there be hints in them? So to me these pairings were totally random and I like fanfictions as much canon as possible. After seeing KH:DDD I really am with you that Riku reeeally should get a significant other, because he's just too awesome to be left alone, but randomly setting him up with a character in the Kingdom Hearts universe, isn't gonna work. At least I couldn't name any character who has a romantic connection with Riku not in the slightest. You should have given this part to an OC in my opinion ;)

Secondly, the twist with giving Roxas, Namine and Xion their own bodies, does clash heavily with my beliefs. Mentioned characters are a part of Sora or Kairi, splitting those from the original can't be a good thing. It means losing a part of themselves. Although you made up a very convincing solution to that problem with filling these holes with data, I really don't like the idea of Sora and Kairi not being "real" for 100%. Like I've said, it's only a matter of beliefs or taste. But in the end the result is the same: It doesn't sit well with me. I was convinced by the game, that there wasn't another option, and the "disappearance" was for the best. It wasn't even that tragic, because everyone got to the place where they belonged. Though your idea was implemented very good. What I really like about your decision to have this in your story, is the from me assumed intention behind it, namely make everyone happy. Don't leave anyone behind. Love, peace and harmony! I really like this mindset! ;)

Thirdly, I wouldn't assume, that the friends would meddle with the love lifes of the other. Even if they would, I don't like such behaviour. Everybody should walk their own pace without pressure, friendly or not.

Lastly I'd like to point out a few tiny things especially:

I really liked it that you let travel Cloud and Tifa together. I'm a huge Cloti fan and even though you didn't include any romantic action between those two, I enjoyed seeing them together very much. It's such an improvement to Cloud hiding from Tifa :D

I also enjoyed seeing that you included Rinoa. The Squall x Rinoa couple is very close to my heart, so of course I was really happy, that you gave Rinoa a tiny little part in this story as well. Nice to see you don't see her dead or lost in th KH-universe :)

Could it be, that you have a thing for Namine? She got quite a big role and powers in this story. Not that I've got a problem with this. Just wondering ;)

Okay, that's quite the review. But I'm coming to the end.
If you still want to make money with your writing, good luck with that. I think, you have what it takes to do so :)

Thanks a lot for writing and sharing! :)
StarTrail chapter 97 . 12/17/2013
One of-scratch that-THE best Kingdom Hearts ff i've ever read!
Hawkwing-Mistkit chapter 32 . 9/21/2013
Lol. i can imagine Demyx going to his room late, while everyone's sleeping and then singing loudly and waking everyone up and them being really mad at him.
... It was funnier in my head.
Hawkwing-Mistkit chapter 6 . 9/21/2013
"Riku shook his head in almost-disbelief. 'You have a lot going on in there,' he said, pointing to Sora's heart."

Riku has no idea... lol.
redeyes chapter 62 . 6/17/2013
a good story so far but it would have been more nice though if you have used the original names of the organization 13 members since they already regained their hearts and what not. (Dilan, Aeleus, Ienzo, Even, Isa, Lea) just saying haha
SatoshiKyu chapter 18 . 3/10/2013
Shit. Poor Zexion. Why the hell would Lexaeus just abandon him like that? They were damn near inseparable back when they didn't have emotions, so you'd think they'd be an even tighter knit unit now when they can actually feel.
SatoshiKyu chapter 14 . 3/10/2013
Clearly Xehanort and Marluxia at the end, there.

Here's hoping Zexion and Lexaeus manage to avoid becoming one of Xehanort's lackeys again.
SatoshiKyu chapter 6 . 3/10/2013
... kind of anticlimactic for the Mark of Mastery exam, that.
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