|Reviews for Unlikely Dou|
| simeon234 chapter 2 . 1/5
| Nerf585 chapter 1 . 10/10/2014
dude finish the f**kin story it's goin good so far
| Torento chapter 1 . 1/31/2013
This was a decent story, not the best story I've ever read, but it was interesting and you said this wasn't your best story anyway so I understand. What really interested me was your description of yourself as a writer at the bottom. I also use Jo Carpenter as the character inspiration for many of my characters in different, original works. She's like an actress that I use because her name and appearance remain the same, but her character could be anything from a super weapon to a librarian from a cop to a little kid. The sleeping together thing was very cute, although I don't know how romantic that is if all they did was sleep. I'm glad you had them just sleep, though. Screwing around probably would've been to much. You really captured the idea of teenagers very well.
I'm guessing you're probably a teenager yourself. I noticed you didn't have any comments, but you made a damn good Burst Angel story and I thought you deserved at least one comment. I myself have not made much Fanfiction either. I have written around sixty stories in the last year ranging from 5 to 37 pages, from 1200 words to 14510 words after editing. I have made Super Smash Brothers, Aliens, Lord of the Rings and Burst Angel Fanfiction stories. I also have Full Metal Alchemist, Star Wars and James Bond stories planned to write later.
| Lowar chapter 2 . 11/20/2012
I love this fic! Please, I beg you to ignore the flames and keep writing(though perhaps with more cute romance like in the first chapter _)
| D.Serigale chapter 2 . 8/29/2012
Love it MUCH better than MegJo. ESP since Meg is such a XXXXX.
| that guy chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
great so far cant wait to see next chapter
| soulstar 1337 chapter 2 . 6/17/2012
i dont see why people would send you hate mail i think it totally rocks and i really want to see the next part really bad. p.s. dont listen to those people who are sending hate mail.
| XFallenAngelXxX chapter 2 . 6/15/2012
Hmm, personally, I really do like the pairing. I don't know why these people always put Meg with Jo. I mean, they're best friends, sure, but lovers? Isn't that a bit much? Anyway, I hope you keep writing for this. It's really good. Also, just ignore the hate mail. If they don't like it, they don't like it. Not like they have to keep on reading. I don't get why they keep on reading if they didn't like the first one. They don't have to, but they still read something they don't like. Oops, I think I ranted a bit. Sorry. Anyway, keep up the good work!
| kyohei x jo fan chapter 2 . 4/16/2012
i need more
| Mwu Kai chapter 2 . 3/20/2012
Honestly I like both stories. To hell with what everybody else wants, it's your show right? On a more serious strand I think the way you depicted Kyo in the first was pretty gutsy. Umm there was an episode where he had a childhood friend and that friend talked about how much balls Kyo had. I remember specifically that the guy said Kyo did something that the other trouble makers wouldn't do and he respected Kyo for that. The fact that your first story revolved around that gutsy part of Kyo gave him a fresh feel in my opinion. (Personally I think he's pretty cool for an average dude.)
As for the second story I am quite curious as to how things will turn out. I don't know if it was on purpose but the stories feel as though they loosely revolve around one another. The only thing is that it feels as though Jo and Kyo's relationship in the first escalated to a point but then 'reset' in the second story. (If that makes sense) My questions:
Are these two chapters progression in their relationship?
Will Jo keep Amy, Meg, and Sei out of the loop with what's going on in the next chapter?
Does Kyo get a gun or weapon? (That would be quite funny and fun at the same time)
Well, keep up the great work!
| Shinsou Kanashimi chapter 2 . 1/13/2012
Well really good set of one shots here.. But is this on hold? Anyways yeah I thought both were really good, may be a sequel for the first? Or a extended scene from the room? (No not lemon ok I'm a guy but I'm not someone who just here for lemons... Unless there are written well :D). So until next (maybe?).
| Just me and myself chapter 2 . 1/4/2012
These are really cool!
| Scorch009 chapter 2 . 11/15/2011
plz continue the story
| sadistic lunatic chapter 2 . 10/22/2011
You received a lot of hatemail for this? *raises a brow* didn't realize there were that many territorial hormonal Meg/Jo shippers. It's not like your portrayal of the cast is grossly out of character :/ heck, compared to some of the Jo/Meg I've read, your portrayal of Jo is relatively accurate ~_~
Anyways, to each their own. This is a really great fic that shows quite a lot of promise, nevermind the fact that Kyo/Jo is as rare as they come. Kyo manning up is something I've always wanted to see in the series (because having rewathed it now when I'm not a hormonal teen going gaga on not-so-subtle yuri between two scantily clad women), iv come to realize how much of a whiny damsel-in-distress Meg can be, and there actually was potential in Kyohei's character that the author seemed to disregard in favor of yuri. Not that I blame the author; it did make the fanbase somewhat popular. That said, chronicling Kyohei's path to gaining a spine, as you have done, is a refreshing breeze in this section.
As for Kyo and Jo not 'sharing any similarities', the same can almost be said about Meg and Jo. I say 'almost' because, well, they're both female. That aside, I wonder if whoever wrote you hatemail ever visited the Naruto/Harry Potter/Bleach sections of this site to see what pairings pop-up ~_~
Tl;dr you've got a great piece of work here and really, don't think about those haters. Take care!
| caboose chapter 2 . 8/19/2011
I just started reading this and i think its a interesting story and cant wait for chapter three.