|Reviews for Gynocracy|
| rhinosgirl chapter 1 . 2/11/2015
Hi, Vici! Rhino here –hugs- I am completely fandom-blind for this story, so please forgive me any canon ignorance.
This is a very foreign concept for me to be reading and reviewing, and I’m going to give it a go for that very reason. Not knowing what I might find is scary, but could be exciting, too!
The beginning of this story definitely reminds me of what it is like coming out of an anaesthetic, which leads me to the conclusion that Lucas has been drugged and kidnapped. Poor man (boy? Not sure what his age is here. Hopefully, it is not important and he is of legal age for whatever the women are going to make him do), it is happening to him again!
I like the ordered messiness that followed his waking up. By this, I mean that his activities went something like this: trying to get away - exploring his surroundings - yelling - trying to remember how he got here - checking himself for injuries - reminiscing about his friendship with Ben - remembering parts of his evening before he was kidnapped - exploring his surroundings again – thinking about his friends again – yelling again. There were an awful lot of different things happening in a short amount of time, but they were all presented methodically and in an easily comprehended format. It was definitely a realistic interpretation of how a person’s mind can work in the minutes after they come out of a drugged state.
I wanted to pull Skinny Guy out of his situation the minute I met him. He has clearly had all the self-confidence and self-worth and hope taken from him. I’m in awe that he even had the presence of mind to compliment Lucas on his looks.
I hope Lucas can save them both!
| Salivour chapter 2 . 2/1/2015
I’m completely canon-blind here, and jumping into the middle of your series to boot. So I really am going to be completely at sea for this. It’s been nominated as the best M-Rated fic over at the Reviewer’s Lounge, Too – so that’s why I’m jumping in here :).
To start, I loved the way that is opened, drawing the reader in. Why had Lucas been taken prisoner? Where is he? And again? All wonderful questions to keep me reading to try and find more about this character’s situation. Also, you gave a great sense of Lucas slowly orientating himself to where he was, which I felt lent itself nicely to the reader also orientating themselves at a comfortable pace, discovering things as Lucas discovers them.
When Lucas starts thinking about different characters – Ben, Katie, Juliana – it feels slightly as though you’ve taken into account people who have not read the first part of the series, as it feels as though the talk of things that happened before and small insights to each of the characters such as Ben is now more mature, Katie is an intelligent engineer, things that a reader coming from the first series would presumably already know (though I haven’t read it, as I said, so this is guess-work.) I don’t know if that was intentional or not, but it did make me feel a lot more comfortable reading the fic and not as though I was floundering in the middle with no idea of what is what.
(…he’d fallen back on old habits to try to make Ben feel guilty…He’d been darned lucky they’d let him be involved at all.) Again, this seemed to be introducing the character rather than being the middle of a story. The image I got of Lucas from this was someone who is quite young, really and that Ben was once in the same group as him but has since matured beyond that. That Lucas is the rookie of the group, though this is all from his perspective so I do wonder if he really is that unwanted.
(…seriously malnourished, and he wasn’t wearing much…and he reeked…it smelled like when someone hadn’t bathed in weeks.) The introduction of someone who is presumably in a similar position to whoever capture Lucas wants him to be in, was a great little addition. Especially him cowering away from aggression as though he is used to being hit. It was a great insight into what could happen to Lucas if he doesn’t escape.
As I’ve said before, I’m completely unfamiliar with the canon of SeaQuest, but I did find it intriguing to find that the Colony is run by women with male slaves – especially with (…you got what the women like.) Which also begins to clue me into why this is M-rated, particularly coupled with your disclaimer of whips and chains. Although it does make for an interesting situation.
This was an enjoyable read, with subtle characterisation and some fantastic hints at a great plot to come.
| GeorgyannWayson chapter 1 . 1/26/2015
Vici! *waves* I don't think I've ever reviewed you before, but that shall change today! For reference, I'm a sQ baby in that I've only seen, like, the first three episodes of the show so I only know the very extreme basics. At any rate!
Uh-oh, this isn't a good start to things. I like how the opening kind of gives off the feel of waking up from a haze and that the rattling of the chain was what made Lucas basically snap back to full awareness. His gasp of [not again] kind of unnerved me; again?! Oh boy...
[6x4] I've never written measurements in narratives, so I'm wondering if this is actually how it's done. If it is *takes note for later*
At least Lucas can deduce quickly where he is. I like how the image of where he is builds from using his physical senses: of course observing where he is, touching the walls, feeling the vibrations on the boat/submarine. The clues work to quickly build a picture and boy, does it look grim *nods*
[...although he still appreciated pretty] I understand the gist of this phrase, but it does sound a little odd to my ear. I would've thought [beauty] would work better here instead of [pretty], but YMMV on that regard of course :)
[Hospitals didn't tend] I'll just tell ya I snorted at this line XD mostly because I work in a hospital, no other reason beyond that.
[You'd think] Love this slight break of the fourth wall, it really works to engage the reader further in the musing and make them go 'huh. You WOULD think'.
Wow, Vici, all of that musing that came from Lucas about his predicament was so...wow. What I loved about it was that you kept the information straight enough that I could easily follow it without getting lost/having to reread parts/etc. I could easily piece and keep information together with the way you organized it and that was wonderful. Thank you for that :)
[20, 21] I was told that numbers under 100 are usually written out, but I could be mistaken on that.
[Forget you ever met me] What a line to end on, Vici. Wonderful tease for the next chapter, I am so interested to see where exactly Lucas is because this doesn't sound like this is going to be fun for everyone. At all. I'm looking forward to seeing what comes next! See you later Vici!
| infiniteworld8 chapter 24 . 1/16/2015
Good ending. What is that old bunk that they're talking about?
They see like a good team together, odd but I liked it.
I still wish Gianna could have got the death penalty though!
| infiniteworld8 chapter 23 . 1/16/2015
I'm so happy Kyle was rescued. His predicament was even worse than Lucas. I guess it was best that Rita took the other slaves because at least she will treat them well.
I call for Gianna's head though to complete this fic!
| infiniteworld8 chapter 22 . 1/16/2015
Gianna killed the referee. Hang her I say!
And why did Katie seemed more concerned at one point about keeping her submarine than getting Lucas back?
| infiniteworld8 chapter 21 . 1/16/2015
I hope Katie gives Gianna what she deserves and then some. I am sad that there isn't much Lucas in this story. What can I say I always feel more close to characters that are close to my age and interests.
These women on Juno are some evil little witches (well at least most of them.) I must say I don't know how plausible it is for team splendor to beat as many as they did but hey it's fiction.
| infiniteworld8 chapter 20 . 1/16/2015
Well, I think #5 and #7 are sick SOBs to put it nicely. Who likes being owned? *Shakes head*
Also what does UEO stand for?
And what does it matter if you use a name twice in a fic? Names duplicate in real life so if they occasionally do in a fic I'm not opposed.
| infiniteworld8 chapter 19 . 1/16/2015
Well I'm thinking Helga wasn't being exactly truthful. It seems to me that most of these guys didn't choose to be on Juno...or at least a large portion of them didn't choose to be.
| infiniteworld8 chapter 18 . 1/16/2015
Just wanted to point out that four aspirin or four Tylenol is not a dosage that is medically endorsed. Standard Tylenol dosage is 650mg-325mg every 4-6hours as needed or 1000mg (Extra strength) every 4-6 hours as needed not to exceed 4000mg in one day. And aspirin max is 325mg for one dose. So unless it's baby aspirin which is 81mg then four pills would be incorrect.
Wow, I'm reading to deeply into this fic huh? Anyway, good chapter and fair made about not airing out the submarine in Juno's atmosphere. I bet they do have penalties for that sort of thing! Ben seems like he's hurting, actually I think Ibuprofen might be best since it has anti-inflammatory and analgesic properties unlike Tylenol. And aspirin tends to be a lot more mild than Motrin.
| infiniteworld8 chapter 15 . 1/15/2015
I have a question, why did the judge not think it strange that Ben would want somebody who's supposed to be as vicious as Scarlet to punish him? That should have made her suspicious of Scarlet or at least not believing Ben. BTW caning does not sound that bad, I've had corporal punishment and thirty licks in mild I think.
| infiniteworld8 chapter 14 . 1/15/2015
An abrupt change for scarlet from savior to sadist. wonder how she'll handle it.
| infiniteworld8 chapter 13 . 1/15/2015
So there are telepaths in regular society in the future? Interesting.
| infiniteworld8 chapter 12 . 1/15/2015
Gianna needs to be whipped herself and stunned with that nasty cattle probe of hers.
| infiniteworld8 chapter 10 . 1/15/2015
This whole situation is a weird dynamic, and yet it's very touching how far each of them is willing to go outside their comfort zone just to save their friend.
It's the Team as family trope and I love that trope to pieces. One of my favs, Firefly, ST 2009, ST VOY,etc. I love how it demonstrates that "family doesn't end with blood boy!" (SpN quote, I couldn't resist). But anyway, great story I'm really coming to see the chracters, though I have to say you're a little heavy on some aspects of detail for my tastes. I don't really care to have a blow by blow of what each is wearing, but I do see how for some people this could help with their head picture.
I care more about action and interplay of characters, detail just serves both those masters in my opinion. BTW kudos for using the smart aleck hacker character, I do so love them even though they are a bit clichéd and overused sometimes. You are quite a good writer Vici.
Whenever I read fanfiction that is well written I always compare it to the awful books I've read and wonder why can't fanfic authors be published?