Reviews for There Was a Girl
LMK trooper chapter 6 . 3/25/2013
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Slicerness chapter 12 . 3/24/2013
Alternatively you could set up a challenge based around the premise of this fic. So everyone could try it. Granted you might get alot of junk, but there could be a few gems, instead of just a single potential gem. Don't put all your eggs in one basket, that kinda thing.
becuzitswrong chapter 10 . 3/20/2013
Love this story. Great chapter of their first morning.
Hermionie G chapter 2 . 3/20/2013
This is lovely
InsideTheCover chapter 9 . 3/20/2013
I'm liking this fic a lot, please update soo. I was a little confused, chapter one is a different story to chapter two? how did it change?
The One Who Wrote The Story chapter 11 . 3/20/2013
Awww plz continue this story!
Swiftlet in the Cloud chapter 10 . 3/19/2013
I hope you will update this story again and have not abandoned it.
Runecutter chapter 10 . 2/6/2013
Oh but i think they share a class at least with every other house... except you're a friend of the theory that Dumbledore consciously has partnered Gryffindor and Slytherin in as many subjects as possible to "get them to end their feud" or some similar inane reason ;) It would be fairer if they had the same number of classes with each of the other houses and would enable them to get to know ALL their classmates in their year... something the school SHOULD be interested into ;)

Nice start into a story with an iron cast tag-team Harry and Hermione from day one on. Interesting concept and Ravenclaw is a good house for Harry, no slacking off and therefore not so much dependence on others who know what they're doing ;)
I'm pretty fond of your dynamic for the friendship between harry and Hermione and Neville also had a good start. I'm just not sure if an average chapter size of under 2000 words really makes a good story, nothing has much place to grow and develop before the cliff looms again to hang over and starve in between chapters... Of course "size" is not everything, but it helps the narration if you don't hasten and shorten yourself into such a tiny edge...
Runecutter chapter 7 . 2/6/2013
Hehe, the anxiety is outright infectious... and yeah, the mood has definitely lightened right in time to enjoy the chapters instead of searching for a knife to cut open your veins... *shudder*
Runecutter chapter 6 . 2/6/2013
poisonous and venomous are NOT interchangeable... some snakes and spiders are venomous because they have glands to produce venom and teeth to inject it into their victims. No Snakes (at least as far as i know) are poisonous that is something like arrowpoison frogs whose skin is saturated with lethal substances or the famous Fugu fish whose innards partially contain such substances so eating them is a bad idea...

Cool experiment with the Speaking. And poor Hermione is afraid of Snakes... why do it have to be Snakes? :D
Runecutter chapter 5 . 2/6/2013
Awww the hair story is SO sweet and does explain a lot _
Those two together are really adorable.
Runecutter chapter 2 . 2/6/2013
Ehhh that doesn't completely match your first chapter, does it? ;)

and up til now it's pretty depressing and mood-downing what with all the friendlessness and the "fight" about Hermione going away and leaving Harry alone... i hope it will gain a more positive atmosphere over the other chapters and soon...
GarnetMonsoon chapter 10 . 1/2/2013
This is really good!
I like how it's kind of slow. A build-up really creates a solid foundation, and a better-developed story.
I hope that if they aren't friends with Ron, he doesn't like, go evil or something. I've seen that type of thing in so many Harmony fics, and to be honest, I think it's just outrageous. I know Ron can be a prat, but he isn't a bad person.

Anyway, I really like how Harry and Hermione got to know each other more before Hogwarts. I can't wait to see how this will turn out. Harry and Hermione are always so cute, holding eachothers' hands and such. And I'm curious as to how Severus will act. He can't pin the "Gryffindor Prince" title on Harry now. And I like how he's in Ravenclaw. I always thought he was sharp, and given the exposure to Hermione, it's understandable that she would influence him. And I like how nice the twins are.

I hope I haven't rambled too much. Great work!
Hogwarts Alum 53 chapter 10 . 10/17/2012
I must say you have a wonderful sense of the characters especially at such a young age! I hope you will write more soon.
Sherwood374 chapter 7 . 8/30/2012
'The next month almost too quickly for Harry.'

'The next month passed almost too quickly for Harry.'
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