Reviews for Beneath the Surface
MEIPHANTOMHIVE chapter 1 . 1/25
Well Arthur, Merlin just has that charm.
MoonlightMystery13.3 chapter 1 . 1/12
So, uh, hi. The first paragraph inspired me to rewrite one of my childhood favorite poems into a Merlin poem, and I'm asking my favorite authors to preview it for me. Here you go, and I can't wait to hear you opinion. (This is from Arthur's POV, by the way.)
I Chased Some Bandits Through the Woods by MM13.3
Original by Jack Prelutsky
I chased some bandits through the woods, haranguing them all day.
"I'll catch you soon!" I taunted. "You can never get away.
There's no escaping me, my friends." I confidently cried.
"You might as well just stop running, there is nowhere you can hide."
"I think that I will simply lop your heads off with my sword."
The bandit leader stopped and whirled about, and ominously roared.
"You'd better think again," he shouted and glared into my eyes.
"In case you haven't noticed, my company's a dozen times your size.
It's evident that my men would prevail if we should ever fight, we're quite accomplished with our swords and would let our arrows take flight."
I thought about the bandits' words, and couldn't disagree-
I chased some bandits through the woods, and now they're chasing me.

What do you think? Is it good enough to bother publishing?
Can't wait to hear from you,
MM13.3
thebondgirl chapter 1 . 12/27/2014
Awesomeness personified. Seriously. :D
Guest chapter 1 . 12/24/2014
That last line though! So funny :) of all the things he could have chosen to say at that moment
Garland chapter 1 . 10/5/2014
Hahahaha That last statement though XD
guardianofdragonlore chapter 1 . 10/4/2014
Freya is so NOT out of his league. Really.
Irene Namikaze chapter 1 . 8/29/2014
really artie of all the things to say you chose "she's out of you league"
Guest chapter 1 . 8/25/2014
I started reading because the summary said 'and you've just shot her boyfriend with a crossbow.' I loved it. I'm taking it that Arthur doesn't know the full extent of Merlin's magic. Such as a certain episode involving the demise of a high priestess of the old religion (namely Nimueh). Thanks for writing/typing.
thingsthatmakeme chapter 1 . 8/21/2014
OMG I LOVE THIS :) I don't think there are enough Merlin/Freya stories - it's such a sensitive topic, one that should definitely be explored more! I would love to see more of this story!
satomika chapter 1 . 8/16/2014
Arthur's last comment is sarcastically funny, I love it!
Lunatris262 chapter 1 . 7/21/2014
That was great! Keep up the good writing! And write more Merlin!
whatswiththemustache chapter 1 . 6/26/2014
Oh my goodness, I freaking LOVED this :D:D:D
NX-Loveless-XN chapter 1 . 5/22/2014
Lol! Freya and Merlin love is so sweet.
93 Diagon Alley chapter 1 . 4/22/2014
Hahahahahaha OMG that last line...you win. :D
Convenient Alias chapter 1 . 4/4/2014
Haha, Arthur, but she is clearly not out of Merlin's league because she is that protective of him and he is Emrys and stuff!
(Just felt a need to defend Merlin for a moment.)
Anyways, good fic. Nice combination of funny and awesome. And of course any fic with a cool Freya is a good fic too.
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