|Reviews for Dust|
| Tomoe Kitsune chapter 3 . 1/25
awww so sad :(
i want an alternate ending to be written :)
| Yuki-hime chapter 3 . 10/11/2013
I felt really bad for Joshua.. Neku was too blind and stupid not to notice about his love and the cremation thing.. Ugh! Then that kiss.. too cruel! I guess I'll just imagine now before going to sleep an alternate universe where they end up together happily so my depression will ease up a bit..
(PS. This is my first time to read all the reviews for a story and to leave one myself. This just prove that I was deeply moved by your work. Good job author-sama!)
| flairina chapter 3 . 9/23/2013
I hope you ignored the idiot who reviewed back in April and apparently did not understand the meaning of the "Drama/Horror" tag. To me, these were excellent alternative character interpretations, though that was indeed a very, VERY depressing ending. Yeesh, was not expecting a "I have no mouth and I must scream" end even if I had guessed the cremation bit. How may souls are just floating around tied to objects they can no longer leave? How does a "scattered" soul like Shiki's even work? Doubtless they've all gone insane by now. And it's ETERNAL... ick. Maybe if the object is destroyed somehow the soul can escape? What would it take to sever the tie? It's an even more terrible fate if the planes indicate something after death anyways. Something tells me that if the world is run entirely by beings like Joshua we may be in for an apocalypse regardless sometime soon...
Extremely well done horror, if not what I expected. I'm not usually one for tragedy and the tale leaves me with a sour taste in my mouth, but it's a chilling piece of literature and alternate takes on a world are interesting even if they are terrifying in their implications. Well done.
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| EmiTheImmortalVampire chapter 3 . 4/14/2013
I can honestly say i hate this story with a passion. And i am guessing i am not the only one due to the reviews i have just read. I honestly think this is majorly screwed up. I have read murder reports less messed up than this!
First, You made Joshua seem like such a spoiled brat. Even if he was a spoiled brat, you seem to forget he probably never talked to anyone but his conductors before he met Neku. The only person remotely likes is neku and Mr. H because of their personalities. And because of the face that everyone treated him like a god he never had any friends. That would change anyone's personality.
Second, Neku's personality is not like how you made it out to be. He would probably go with Joshua if it meant his friends (shiki, rhyme, and beat) Would be restored completely because he cares about them more than anything.
Third, REALLY! You made Neku freaking beg! REALLY?! REALLY?! This is NEKU we are talking about. He would not beg for himself. His pride is too stubborn for that.
Forth, You made it sound so damn horrible Neku wanted to choose life over joshua. I think if anyone was dragged away from their parents and then they got the choice to go back, they would pick to go back to their loved ones.
Fifth, i actually wanted Neku to comfort joshua (if you didn't make him out to be such an ass hole) Or maybe worked out a compromise. If possible. YOU DID NOT HAVE TO KILL EVERYONE OFF! This is the most HORRIBLE thing i have ever read. I am also a fanfic writer and i try to think about my readers when i write stuff. I put their thoughts in to every word. Since i have gotten QUITE a bit of reviews i am more than qualified to say this.
I think you don't give a damn about your fans if you have any at this point.
I hope this story gets banned but that probably won't happen. So bye bye and you have my worst regards.
| konamona chapter 3 . 11/10/2012
I am completly speechless from this...It was sheer amazement. The characters we pretty well in character,and It gave a thought to the series that not many people really thought about. I say Well done
| animefreakanime chapter 3 . 9/9/2012
Oh man. I never thought it was going to e so depressing OTL... But it was really good. It.. I don't really know how to describe it. But man. This is reality... Sighs. Wished neku had accepted though D:
| roxxihearts chapter 3 . 8/31/2012
This was a horrifying story! Y_Y If I'd have known it would have such a bad ending I never would have read it in the first place. I had honestly guessed by the second time Neku was in the "dark place" that he had been cremated but for such a horrible...*shakes head in horror and despair*
I am sorry but I cannot say I liked this story. I do however applaud your writing style and characterization, they're really good. For a person that likes tragedies, this would be an awesome story. Unfortunately, I like happy endings so this is a true anathema to me.
| TheUnforgiven137 chapter 3 . 8/30/2012
I have to say, that story was amazing. I read it several weeks ago, and the dark feeling I got from it still passes over me constantly. It was so dark, and it left me with a feeling of inevitability, sadness, and straight up fear. That's why I decided I had to come back and write a review for you.
I do want to comment on the story's contents a little bit though. Something of a critique. As I said, I absolutely adore this story (I'd go so far as to say it's my favorite TWEWY fanfic over every other one I've ever read), however, a lot of it was kinda implausible. For example, the fact that Neku went back the first time within seconds of arriving. I feel like he would have been a lot more cautious, and would have taken his time to examine things and try to discover what was going on. Also, I'm surprised he didn't think that he might have been cremated. I mean, there's only so many ways a corpse can be laid to rest, so you think he would have considered that.
I was/am willing to overlook those things though, because the idea of the story was so damn amazing, right down to Neku's inability to give up his life that was cruelly cut short, and Joshua's heartlessness at Neku's choice. Bravo; your story has made a ripple in my life, and I don't think I'll ever forget it!
| brumal chapter 3 . 8/15/2012
Hi. Wow. It's been a long while since you posted this story, but I had just the luck to have stumbled upon it. I'm really glad I did too. This was a truly stupendous read. Since I was referred here by another website, I didn't really see the genre you had put this under. I honestly had no idea what I was in for until the second chapter or so. But dramatic and horrific indeed! This has to be one of the most thrilling fanfictions I've read yet!
The moment I realized that Neku was in an urn, I've had this terrible, heavy feeling in my chest. It didn't occur to me that he had been cremated until he tumbled down. Then it struck me how appropriate the title of this story was. Everything suddenly made sense and WOW, how simply awful. In a good way, don't worry. It was awful in a really good... heart-wrenching and chilling way...
I was hoping, too, until the very last minute, that Joshua might reconsider. I guess not. I don't know if that's pettiness at having been rejected, righteous anger, or true sorrow that made him do that, but... it fit. Tragically so.
I'm not sure what else to say. This was a beautiful piece of writing, and you did a great job on it. I must say, also, that your vocabulary is quite impressive! At first, it was rather like being hit by an eighteen-wheeler full of thesauruses, but I got used to it after a while. Somehow, Joshua's elevated way of speaking was rather appropriate when he was in his true form. Not so much when he was in his regular kid guise though... But I digress.
I want to thank you for sharing such a stunning story with us. You really did a marvelous job. Thank you.
| Sunshine Depression chapter 3 . 8/11/2012
This was one of the most truly horrifying things that I've read in a long time. In all seriousness, I had trouble getting to sleep last night after reading it. You really have a knack for the horror genre. You didn't just produce a piece that was frightening because of shock value; this was bone-deep terror. Your characterization of Joshua, in particular, was absolutely spectacular. It was deep, and dark, and definitely a version of him that I enjoyed reading. Your story portrayed his human side in a way that only made him more frightening and destructive. There were a couple of spelling or grammatical errors here and there, but nothing that detracted from the story. The plot more than made up for them and kept me totally involved. Great job, and thanks for an amazing story!
| Viviane Renard chapter 3 . 7/27/2012
Awesomely depressing and tragic! As soon as Joshua said, "…I'm a gambling man, so let's make this interesting for me. A little game," I knew this was going to be a fascinating read. And it was a thrill indeed, from Neku's internal conflicts to Joshua's capricious moods.
From your great suggestions throughout the chapters, I figured Neku's body was ashes in an urn, but it sure felt right to read the final chapter and know my guess was right. What a morbid ending for Neku! You got the final conversation between him and Joshua down perfectly- Neku's anger, then his desperate attempt to wheedle himself a better deal (who wouldn't, faced with that terrible non-life?), and then his final return to anger and despair. You really captured the darker side of human emotion.
| CrossXsivleR chapter 3 . 5/17/2012
ok i swear i fell in luv w/ this but the end toooooooootally pissed me off...rollsly and forever . i cried i was so frustrated with it
| Empty Silver Lining chapter 3 . 4/4/2012
Wow, I... I don't know what to say. It truly was a powerful fiction, and it does belong in the horror category, even without the elements we're used to see. I cannot shake off the feeling of dread that I got at the end of the story. You're a great writer for making something as good and unsettling!
| Into-The-Dark-rutu14 chapter 3 . 3/17/2012
This is one of the better fanfiction I've ever read. I loved the part when Joshua was talking to Neku's mom, I've always liked points in books or movies. I believe that this is rightly in the horror section. I wish that more horror movies could be just plain creepy like this, but a lot of them seem to be mostly blood and gore. I also think that you captured the character's personalities perfeectly and they don't seem the least OOC. I loved this.