|Reviews for GreenEyed Demon|
| iceclawtwc chapter 39 . 7/5/2012
Someone always has to die in a good story. x( I wish that Hanyuu could have done something to restore the villager's belief in her, because maybe it would have given her some more power. But I guess it was for the best, seeing as Rika can now be more independent. :) This was an extremely awesome story as well. I can't wait to see your newest Higurashi work when you start it 3
| beaniek4 chapter 39 . 3/10/2012
I really loved this chapter (except for the fact that u forgot Satoko!), and how Rika became independent and all that (poor Hanyu(u)!) :D
I wonder where u came up with the names... :)
Now, I'm going to read some of ur other stories, cuz u rock XD
| beaniek4 chapter 38 . 3/10/2012
Fave character-structure: Rena & Mion (although Satoko & Rika r my favorite characters (not structure))
Least fave character-structure: Ooishi(?)
Fave OC-structure: Etsuko & Hisao/Ryota
Least fave OC-structure: IDK
Fave part: The bloody scenes & the happy ending
Least fave part: IDK
Overall: Perfect XD
| beaniek4 chapter 35 . 3/8/2012
This chapter was great! But I did feel bad for both Mion & the guy she killed ;)
| beaniek4 chapter 30 . 3/1/2012
1) You forgot to let Satoko play the shooting gallery :(
2) I really loved this chapter :D
3) The chapter where Mion killed Etsuko was better the 2nd time XD
I can't wait to read the next one ;)
... I wonder when Rika will figure everything out... :)
| beaniek4 chapter 25 . 2/23/2012
I really liked everything in this chapter, especially tge part with Hisao standing up for himself. I was thinking she was going to kill him, but she didn't, and I'm very happy about that! :D
| beaniek4 chapter 17 . 2/19/2012
I really liked this chapter &, after this review, I'm going to read the next one
The main thing that annoys me in this story is that you keep saying stuff like "(color)-haired boy/girl"
Do u think we're going to forget the character's hair color 5 minutes after it's mentioned? XD
| beaniek4 chapter 14 . 2/18/2012
I liked this chapter & I'm going to read the next one after this review ;)
The only thing I didn't like was how u were mean to Satoko, even though she has had a hard past; saying she has a bratty mind... Making her act like a brat towards Akasaka's son (?), even though that's not how she'd act... Grr... She and Rika r my fave characters...
Anyway... I'll review again later
| beaniek4 chapter 9 . 2/10/2012
I really like this story so far. Although, I already know that Etsuko and some Hajime guy dies because I read the chapters, "Confrontation" and "Here, Kitty Kitty", but I'm still going to read the whole thing XD
| beaniek4 chapter 4 . 2/8/2012
I really like your story so far! XD
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/9/2011
One if the best stories I ever read keep up the good work ! Excellent! :-)!
| MrRaccoon chapter 35 . 9/9/2011
Did I seriously read 35 pages of this nonsensical crap? Feels like some lame teenage fan fiction...ah...nevermind.
The words to describe the story." Lame cockteaseness with n00b OC characters, and stupid fillers" and "bs epilogue" .
| Guest chapter 39 . 8/14/2011
I love your story that made it made me think about the good times in my life and the good ones in the future. I may not know you but u sound like a really good person and I would like to be your friend (P.S the story made me cry at parts :-)
| Internet Person chapter 39 . 8/5/2011
Ok, to sum up my feelings in only a few words, THAT WAS FREAKING AWESOME!
However, that isn't much of a review, so I shall go deeper (Inception).
I really loved the concept and how the whole story tied together (Seriously for each twist or plot point I predicted there were at least two more that caught me off guard), it's clear you put a lot of effort into it.
It's nice to see a fic that shows how close the twins are without diving into twincest and I did overall enjoy this story very much.
Now, onto some of the *other* things...(Keep in mind these are mostly nitpicks)
Firstly, I'd like to point out some of your choices of words. Now, this may just be from my POV, but I found some things in the fic kind of inappropriate. For example (I can't remember which chapters these were) where Mion was threatening to eat Rena up for dinner or the use of the word 'gosh'.
I just think that a seventeen year-old, insane and very pissed off girl would make more vile threats and insults. Also, some of the words used to describe things ('Gobble' comes to mind) kind of detracts from the 'horror' atmosphere (for me at least).
Some of the dialogue seemed a bit unnatural in places (Again I think a seventeen year old would say more curse-word-filled things; this is based on personal experiance).
Now, this last point is probably just me but...I think I would've prefered it if Mion had just died- DON'T SHOOT ME, DON'T SHOOT ME!
Please understand that my mindset is very...well...it's not very nice. I felt that a sad ending would be fitting and, whilst I do like a happy ending, I just felt it seemed a bit like it 'had' to happen, rather than it being part of the natural flow of the story.
I also found it quite strange that Mion didn't seem to care that she killed three people (I guess she might consider it not to be her that killed them, but still).
And finally, with the most nitpicky of nitpicks since nits were ever picked...
How come Madoka was able to complete massacre large groups of well-trained soilders, and Mion (who I assuming is just as powerful) can't defeat a group of teenagers and children?
But, as I said, these are nitpicks, and I did really love the story.
A round of applause for you, my good lady. Now, if you'll excuse me, I have to call my seven butlers to fetch me a scone and some tea.
| Hotaru-Naichingeru chapter 39 . 8/3/2011
Okay, at the end, I had to pinch myself and say, "This was not Canon, stop tearing the Stores book shelves apart looking for the 10th year anniversary Higurashi Doujinshi version of this."
Thanks for the great read Crimso!
(At one point I actually forgot this was a fanfic.