|Reviews for Smiles, Laughs, and Homosexuality?|
| chineschopsticks chapter 6 . 10/24/2011
Like for rizzles you should update. It's been over a month or imma deport you to africa. Yea I went there
| huan05 chapter 1 . 10/24/2011
I'm reading the first chapter as I have limited time to read lots of story in one go. Your story brings me back memories of Bleach first arc when Ichigo and his friends were doing crappy things in school. Haha! Keep on writing(though Fullbringers are boring lol)!
Anyway, I am Hui Qing/Sophia(if you prefer calling me this name)! Got to sleep soon or else I will be falling asleep in tomorrow work! (I feel so old suddenly...)
| chineschopsticks chapter 9 . 9/28/2011
| chineschopsticks chapter 5 . 9/28/2011
Like seriously, UPDATE!
| Troglodytarum chapter 11 . 9/22/2011
Im awsome and I appove this story. Haha just kidding but I really liked this story but it seems rukia was a bit too emotional. But I guess you know what you are doing and from what I can see a great job at it so keep it up and I can't wait for the next chapter. :)
| Pippenpaddleopsikopolis chapter 11 . 9/11/2011
I'M SORRY FOR BEING MEAN LAST CHAPTER AND I LOVE YOU AND YOU HAVE SUCH BETTER GRAMMAR AND SPELLING THAN MOST PEOPLE YOUR AGE IT'S NOT EVEN FUNNY AND I LOVE YOU AND UM YEAH I LOVE YOU AND YOU'RE AMAZING.
All right. On to reviewing.
Stylistically I never alter your writing, I merely change the grammar and spelling, but that could use a bit of work. I feel like your style is...undecided. It's like your style is at the crossroads between descriptive and hard-boiled, both of which have perks and downsides. In good writing though, they should be alternated - but in my opinion, not mixed.
I like pomo.
Did you read that wrong the first time? Be honest! XDD!
*blows kiss* Nice job. (;
| chineschopsticks chapter 11 . 9/11/2011
OH MY GOD YOU FINALLY PUT ICHIRUKI IN THERE! God Ichigo's so dumb, great job in getting them in character loved it a lot update soon!
| I am myself chapter 11 . 9/10/2011
Usual clueless Ichigo. You got his character soooo perfect!
| chineschopsticks chapter 10 . 9/10/2011
ohhh animeasianmusicobseeor you best be putting ichiruki in the next chapter! come on man we are dying for some action! You know how many fanfics i have read, and this by far has the characters actually in character according to the anime. so update faster nextime!
| Aizawa Li Syaoran Vessalius chapter 10 . 8/17/2011
aw aw aw...i don't know a baboon can be smart Lol
rukia's blushing! cute! come on ichigo! make a move!
do your best db
| Pippenpaddleopsikopolis chapter 10 . 8/17/2011
Rukia got up an began searching around the room. "Anyone wanna help me with this?" She yelled. (She should be lower-cased.)
"What's wrong, Ichigo? Did someone poop in your oatmeal?"
"What the hell is that suppose to mean?"(Suppose should be supposed.)
"Yeah." Kage frowned. " I'm sorry I didn't mention it before Inoue." (There shouldn't be a space when you start the dialogue.)
"W-What." Rukia's cheeks became redder. (Shouldn't that be a question mark?)
She punched him in the arm, and not in a play-full way either. (Playful is a word, Yasmine.)
"Do you know why she fainted." (Again, question mark?...)
"Ichigo, you have a crush on him don't you." (AGAIN, question mark, and maybe not a comma separating Ichigo's name. Makes it look like someone's asking Ichigo if he has a crush on a guy.)
"I act that way around guys I'm use to." (USED to.)
"It took you like four years to get use to me." (...Again. Used.)
The door slammed open with Ichigo as Irritated as ever. (How do you slam a door open? And irritated should not be capitalized.)
"Fucking Kage..." He muttered. (He should be lower-cased h. And try to stick to three dots at the most.)
"He doesn't even care If Inoue's hurt." (If should not be capitalized.)
"That fucking Idiot." He muttered. (Should be "That fucking idiot," he muttered.)
When he approached the nurses office (Nurse's office*. It is the nurse's office, possessive not plural.)
"Hmp. This should be good. He thought. (I... I really don't know how to fix that completely botched sentence.)
He can practically feel the scowl on Rukia's face. (Confusion of tense. You were writing in past-tense, so to stay consistent it would be: He could* practically feel the scowl on Rukia's face.)
"You're awfully quiet." He said trying to break the silence. (Should be: "You're awfully quiet," he said, trying to break the silence.)
Enjoy the long review. -_-
| chineschopsticks chapter 1 . 8/17/2011
I love how ichigo is a k pop fan lol. Great work so far! WE NEED MORE ICHIRUKI!' so get working on the next chapter!
| Pippenpaddleopsikopolis chapter 9 . 8/1/2011
...*hangs head in shame*
ONE - that chapter was AMAZING as far as grammar and spelling go.
TWO - though the entire thing was hilarious I giggled the most when Ichigo said, "I-I'm coming!"
...XD teehee. Coming. Teeeeeheee.
If you still don't get what I'm going for then maybe you should go watch the SNL Jizz in My Pants video. Cx
So anyway, you wrote this chapter LIKE A BOSS - filler or not. XDD
Update soon! *glomps*
| I am myself chapter 9 . 7/28/2011
Haha! Those get funnier every time! Crap I'm out of things to say...PANIC! PANIC! YOGURT!...I mean PANIC
| Hater1 chapter 8 . 7/15/2011
YOUR STORY SUCKED! OH MY FUCKING GOD I JUST SHIT MY PANTS FROM THE HORROR.