|Reviews for More To Love Than This|
| R.S chapter 54 . 9/27
this story that you have written really touched me, and many others. There is so much to compliment about this story, yet there is only so much I can say. The feeling of this story were so intense, and I could feel the emotions which each character in this story felt. This story was very moving and powerful, and the way you wrote each character and their thoughts and feelings, I felt as if I were in the place where every event occurred. I really want you to know, Maxi, that this story really touched my heart, compared to other fan fiction stories which I have read. My words cannot express the emotions I felt while reading this story, as there is so little I can say. Thank You so much for sharing this wonderful story with all of us, and allowing us all a glimpse into your heart as well as your thoughts.
Cyber hugs and lots of love,
| PAT2024 chapter 54 . 8/14
Wow. That was an intense story. The fact that most of it is your real story is all at once heartbreaking and also full of hope : for people who could be in an abuse themselves, hope that everyone has a chance and a right to be happy and respected and loved.. I guess your husband is as good as your Edward... I really liked the fact that you took your time to make her heal and didn't rush things.
I love your writing skills, you are really talented. I hope life is treating you well now. All the best and thank you so much for sharing.
| EdwardsGuardianAngel chapter 7 . 6/20
I really really really hope there is excruciating payback in store for the bastard. Just going to jail is not enough.
| Guest chapter 43 . 4/17
Bella is always SO eager to tell herself and everyone else, including Edward himself that he's NOT Elizabeth's father, as if he didn't know. He's been nothing but good to them both and tries so hard, but she has no problem using his money to support herself & Elizabeth. Imho, she's a despicable POS who does not deserve Edward.
And getting married as soon as her divorce is final?! WTF! What parents in their right minds would encourage their young, successful son to take on someone with so much baggage, mental & physical issues, and a kid?! NONE that I know of!
| Guest chapter 41 . 4/17
It's amazing how Bella can feel such anger towards the Cullen's, but never for Jake or Charlie, the people who truly deserve her anger. It makes her seem extremely ungrateful & unlikable. The Cullen's have went out of their way to help her and pay for her & her child, but she screams at them, screams in their faces, locks them out, tells them she hates them, etc. . This is not the behavior of a woman who has supposedly been abused and controlled all of her life, even one who's lashing out. Someone like that would be far more docile & non-confrontational.
All the Cullen's get is having to always walk on eggshells around an obviously unstable woman, take care of her kid, put up with the hassle, worry, stress, and harassment from Charlie, and pay her & her child's huge medical, legal, & living expenses. Just look at how she threw a tantrum over a stupid house key that she had all along, yet she was out driving a new BMW, had cash on her, nice clothes, etc. , but claimed she had it no better than she did at Jake's. Seriously?!
And Jake finally admits that he knew that Elizabeth was probably Charlie's, yet punished Bella for it by raping & abusing her like Charlie did, & still paid Charlie $20,000, but now he's sorry all of the sudden?! Yeah...more like he's trying to save his own ass.
Imho, Bella is a very disturbed woman who needs to be in a facility where she can get the help she truly needs. That kind of severe abuse takes years to work through. She also doesn't need to be around her daughter right now either. She's too unpredictable. Look at how long/much she bathed her. Does she think Elizabeth is tainted & dirty too? And she's always thinking about taking Elizabeth and leaving, yet doesn't have any way to provide for her, & knows that Charlie or Jake could get a hold of her & her child again. How is that rational or sane? She's NOT in the right frame of mind to make any decisions about life, her child, and especially NOT another child. If Edward adopts that little boy, he needs to do it with the understanding that Bella isn't part of the equation now.
Edward is pretty pathetic really too. Even wanting a relationship with Bella, or wanting to bring another innocent child into it (the little boy) at this point is so very wrong on his part. She was raped and abused most of her life until a few weeks ago, so she's in NO position to even be thinking about a relationship, no matter how her & Edward feel. Edward seems like such a spineless worm and incompetent doctor. He's not very likable or appealing.
And your British terminology makes it difficult to read in some areas like when you say "pusher" - it's STROLLER!
Overall, the story just drags and drags, and is not very believable. Why is Charlie still on the force? WHY isn't he being investigated or held? He should be put on leave without pay. Same for Jake, why hasn't he been in trouble yet? Along with all of those spineless rez people who witnessed abuse & murder, but never said anything? They are ALL just as guilty!
| GorGirl chapter 54 . 4/14
Thanks so much for your story!
| GorGirl chapter 53 . 4/14
I hope that Charlie spends the rest of his miserable life in agony!
| GorGirl chapter 52 . 4/14
What did Leah walk in on?
| GorGirl chapter 47 . 4/14
So happy that Josh is home!
| Guest chapter 45 . 4/14
Hmm. Will Harry walk her down the aisle?
| GorGirl chapter 43 . 4/12
Oh man! Charlie?!
| GorGirl chapter 42 . 4/12
Phew! One big hurdle behind them!
| GorGirl chapter 40 . 4/11
Jake and Charlie both need jail time. They're both abusing rapists!
| GorGirl chapter 37 . 4/11
Send him some poison ivy!
| GorGirl chapter 28 . 4/9
Wow! Charlie knows how to intimidate everyone!