|Reviews for Notes|
| FluteHero14 chapter 1 . 7/8/2011
It's cute (and a bit awkward for Black)! A short but sweet fic. I haven't talked to you in a while, but hi. I'm not dead. And I... the first sentence in the A/N. Lol. That made my day. XD
| KeytoDestiny chapter 1 . 3/30/2011
TADAH! Here to review~! :'DD
I love your summary first off! I think the irony you meant to have was that White made an excuse to not see him, but wanted to see him anyways, right? When I first read it, I actually thought the irony was on how it's black and white... so Black comes, and illuminates...? XD
If you didn't intend that, then freakin cool, it's a double pun! XDDD
It was rather amusing to have Black chase after White in his PJ's - it made me smile imagining it. X3
Te end really was pretty abrupt, and didn't really seem to fit in with the theme of the story, but you're the writer, so anything goes~
I think the only grammar mistake you have is the dialogue. It's all correct, except when you have it like this...
"Thanks for letting me see you off," [h]e muttered...
when there's a comma before or following the dialogue, then you lowercase whatever's there unless it's a name. :'D
Eh don't worry. I don't even LIKE the names Hilda and Hilbert - I'm stickin with Black and White. XDD
Really cute story~! It made me smile, heehee. X3
Oh, and following my message... you're 13 right? When I was 13, my writing was not even CLOSE to being this good. So really, it's pointless to compare my writing to yours. XDDD
| aestheticisms chapter 1 . 3/21/2011
*high fives* YAY! This was actually a really cute piece. Hee-hee~ I think it was nice, nice, nice.
| Waterpawn chapter 1 . 3/11/2011
Nice opening chapter. They're real cute together!
And I like them being called Black and White, the English names are horrid.
I'll be looking forward to reading future chapters