Reviews for The Maiden
Fran Masen chapter 13 . 2/11/2012
Sad, but beautiful chapter, I cried so much!
vampiregirl987 chapter 20 . 1/25/2012
Hi! Great story! You had me in tears in some chapters and laughing hard in others! It was one of the best stories I read so far on FF! Thanks for sharing!
story a day chapter 16 . 1/21/2012
Okay I loved your story. I have to ask though, this may be a result of it being 4 o'clock in the morning and insane tiredness or me being dense, but the last chapter's paragraph confused me beyond belief. Please explain, who's the kid? xxx
L09 chapter 20 . 1/15/2012
I feel bad only reviewing this chapter but I had to get through this story as quickly as possible - it was just so good. You've had me in tears so often throughout, but this chapter was the most heartbreaking thing I've ever read. It felt so real.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful story
captaincrandall chapter 20 . 1/12/2012
Four tissues, thank you.

I was 10 when my brother was born early and died. We lived in the San Diego area. Mom went into that dark tunnel with the light in the end and held him there, but when she tried to bring him to the family (dad and the four of us) he would disappear. After a repeat of this process, she understood that she could go on with him or stay with us. She stayed. Grandpa came to get him. Grandpa had died four years earlier. Grandma woke in the middle of the night in Salt Lake City, Utah, and saw him at the foot of the bed. She knew that he was there to take a family member "home", although she didn't know who it could be. She had to lay there for the rest of the night until dad called her early the next morning. Short version.

Darn! Make that five tissues.
captaincrandall chapter 10 . 1/12/2012
I am loving this story! My heart goes out to the characters, you have written them so well that they feel real. You wrote a story about polygamy and Mormons? I would love to read it. Where can I find it? I don't see it listed, so maybe it isn't Twilight related. I still would love to read it. I am LDS (Mormon) and some of my ancestors did, indeed, live that life.
GinnyW 31 chapter 20 . 1/9/2012
I was fine and coping until the dream. That dream at the end brought on the tears. Years ago I was an L&D nurse and the most vivid memories I have are stillbirths or the deliveries of non-viable fetuses.
GinnyW 31 chapter 16 . 1/9/2012
I just finished this story and I have to say that I absolutely LOVE it. I can see that it's one that I will be rereading time and time again.
sparkledamnu chapter 16 . 1/7/2012
I just finished reading the Epi. I was waylaid before I could finish. I was a little upset to say the least.

Your story was brilliant. I loved the way you brought all of the characters full circle in the epi. Even Esme and Carlisle having Emmett. Perfect.

In my mind's eye I could see the epi unfold very visually. The children were beautiful, their names, the e different colored rose bushes, the dream Bells had of Kate coming to her with a baby girl, Rose. But to witness the love that you wrote about between Edward and Bells came to life in the barn. Sad Charlie cut things a little short for them. But I could see him, with the sun highlighting his hair, right before he jumped out at Bella. Perhaps you could lend your writing abilities to Madeline Stowe as she rewords "Unbound Captives."

You are an awesome author. I look forward to reading other stories you have gifted our fandom. Perhaps even chatting on twitter and FaceBook from time-to-time. Thank you for all that you write and bring to us.

Elaine - sparkledamnu on twitter Sparkle Damnu on FaceBook
sparkledamnu chapter 13 . 1/6/2012
I wish you could hear me sniffling. I am so caught up in this story. The heartfelt strength that you have given Kate is something that we should all strive for in our lives. Understanding and love can go a long way in life. The way you told of her arrival in Heaven is exactly as I would like for mine to be. I have family and friends that I hope I am worthy enough to see there. You are awesome.

And Edward. Yes he is just an ordinary man. I too have dealt with the smaller part of man. You are right. These are mortal men you speak about. Not that they don't love, they simply have shortcomings. But we love them for themselves.

Your A/N at the end of each chapter is highly anticipated. I can feel the depth of love you have for these characters and your story.

Now that I seem to have my feelings a little more under control I must move on to the next chapter.

Thank you for writing this beautiful story.

Elaine - sparkledamn on twitter Sparkle Damnu on FaceBook
sparkledamnu chapter 9 . 1/6/2012
Wow. That was quite the conversation between Kate and Bella. You chose Kate's words very well. Told with just enough angst to not be a heart breaker. I know that is coming though.

I also feel Little Wolf will make an appearance soon. Can't wait to read so on to next chapter.

Elaine - sparkledamnu on twitter Sparkle Damnu on FaceBook
sparkledamnu chapter 8 . 1/5/2012
Hey - thought I would stop and review finally. I really am enjoying your story.

I love this Edward - thinking things he shouldn't but not giving in. Can't say I know too many men today that would do that.

And Bella/Pale Swan - her stilted speech is quite effective here.

Can't wait to see what Kate has up her sleeve and how she plans to tell both of them and then make her plan happen.

Thank you for writing for our fandom. On to next chapter - :D

Elaine - sparkledamnu on twitter Sparkle Damnu on FaceBook
katt-ryn chapter 1 . 1/4/2012
I'm such a sucker for historic fics and am really looking forward to reading your piece. Thanks for putting it out there! I can really see whats going on, great imagery.
Seekingbecca chapter 16 . 1/3/2012
loved it!
Seekingbecca chapter 13 . 1/2/2012
I could barely breathe reading this chapter, thought I had to be hospitalize at ...2:30am.
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