|Reviews for Bleach: Naruto's Second Life|
| dfjkkydsetfaatghs66 chapter 5 . 11/28/2014
oohhh good you rewriting this.. but please listen to review, because its not just for show.. and please no dual zanpakuto, its lame.. too many entity inside ones mind will make anyone crazy.. one is enough, even ichigo only have one, just be creative about its abilities, no need for two zanpakutos..
just be creative..
| dani1361 chapter 5 . 8/23/2013
Sigue esta buena
| Dragunav chapter 1 . 1/19/2012
This got to be your first story. This lacks so much!
You forgot the prologue, If Chapter 1 is supposed to be a prologue then it sucks.
I do not feel the want nor need to continue reading this. You rushed through everything O.o
| omally-dood chapter 5 . 7/21/2011
that is a good choice also i think u got the time line wrong yoruichi left the same time urahara and the vizards left and aizen became the capitan because they left and it was not till later that rukia and the rest went into the academy so naruto cant be in the sme class as rukia and the rest and still be piced by yoruichi
| ero-sennin56 chapter 3 . 5/3/2011
yoruichi left soul society 50 years before naruto and his friends in this even became academy students plus aizen was a was a vice captian when yoruichi was a captain. good idea but please know about bleach timeline before you write so everything makes sense please
| naruhina pwns chapter 5 . 4/30/2011
Look, just screw them! this is is an epic fic, so please update soon and don't listen to those idiots, this is your fic so write it how u want. Update ASAP!
| AshimaBlackRaven chapter 5 . 4/23/2011
dude this is a great story and those assholes need to shove it
| Menoduske chapter 3 . 4/4/2011
Has anyone ever thought of a Santoryu styled Zanpaktou?
| coldblue chapter 5 . 3/31/2011
| warrior of six blades chapter 4 . 3/31/2011
Nice job on this story so far.I look forward to seeing how things go in the next chapter and to seeing how the future battles play out.
| Jiraiya-San chapter 1 . 3/25/2011
Cliché emotional masks *sigh*
Story looks rushed *sigh*
Naruto thought about that as he sees a man in a black robe approach him. The man says, "You have been chosen to become a Shinigami because of your high spiritual pressure. My name is Kaien Shiba and I will escort you to the academy." Naruto looked at the man and said, " I will go to the academy to become the strongest Soul Reaper of all time and that is the promise of a lifetime." Kaien looked at this kid before him knowing that he would be a force to be reckoned with and never knowing that he would not be there to see Naruto grow.
Naruto says one sentence and then Kaien figures he'll be a force to be reckoned with?
| Phibriglex chapter 2 . 3/23/2011
When i read the first chapter, i thought i was something like a prologue, describing what happens and u start the story at chapter 2 as "chapter 1". But after reading this second chapter, i found that i was wrong. It felt like i was reading a synopsis.
Your ideas and plots have potential, but rushing through it and out of nowhere making the protagonist all powerful is destroying your story.
The usual rules.
Show, not tell.
Don't rush, take your time to develop ideas, plot and character. We don't want a static character, because that's boring.
Proper paragraphs/sentences. Sometimes your sentences are fragmented or just run-on sentences. Remember to always make a new paragraph when a new person is speaking!
That's all i could think of. Good Luck.
| DBZ Stargate Ninjawars chapter 1 . 3/23/2011
Makes no sense. Once the Juubi was formed it decided to do good and award Naruto? This does not bode well for the upcoming chapters. :/
| mfmxxx chapter 4 . 3/23/2011
Naruto working out Aizen is a fake is unrealistic.
Telling his secrets of his abilities to Yoruichi, - he's a ninja.
| narutogundam00 chapter 4 . 3/20/2011
good chapter update soon and when is naruto going to learn bankia