relationship feels way to forced, ima stop here

This was a very soild story. I kind of feel like it lost a little steam near the middle but I’d say this story was overall pretty good.

Reread it after a long time. I don't think I liked it as much as I remembered liking it when I first read it so many years ago, but it was pretty compelling where it counted. I hope this doesn't offend you- I see a lot of reviews calling it "cringe" or whatnot- I think people should write what they like, and it's obvious you cared a lot about this when you wrote it. I'm glad you got to share such a piece with everyone. Even if you don't read this, or if you've abandoned the site- Fanfiction is good. Your writing is just right for what it wanted to be. To the thousands of "cringe" fics to follow this. Cheers!

This fic brings back so many memories of being a total ferriswheelshipping nerd in high school. Good times. I wasn’t aware this story was ever finished, and I’m glad to see it was. The ending was sweet though sad. Like it’s sad what led up to it.

Hoshi, NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO...why...why.

This was my first fic ever. Im 21 now but I read this at an age that wasn't appropriate. I don't regret it tho cuz reading it now feels nostalgic. The way you wrote N always felt perfect to me. His innocence, curiosity, ignorance. The ending always felt bittersweet to me too. I was sad that N had to live with these demons and struggled in the beginning to be a father. It fits though because the ending of BW and BW2 felt bittersweet too especially with N's fate. Not awful but just sad that he is alone at the end. I'm glad this story has a happy end for him even if it's a little sad. I hope you're doing well

This was the first fanfic I’ve ever read when I was younger, maybe early middle school? 5th grade? 6th grade? I’m not sure.

I didn’t really have access to Internet until around those grades as it’s really suspect to be reading this on the family computer legit EVERYONE used. I’m in college now, I’m older and I was being nostalgic and remembered how much I crushed on N from Pokémon. This was my first fic and I thought I’d give it a read on what got me so hooked on fanfictione, even now.

I gotta say man, I remember most things from this but some things I don’t remember is how pretty cringe some scenes were and the stereotypical “they have kids!” In the end. But lowkey I’m a sucker for those kinds of endings. Despite the cringe, I enjoyed reading it again, remembering child me being so hooked on this, kept in suspense and crushing on N. I was so silly and definitely at a 5th grade reading level thinking this is peak literature lmao. I’m 19, turning 20. You’re much older too, abandoned this account most likely, a lot of people don’t use fan anymore. AO3 and Wattpad are where it’s at now lol. But this? This was a nice trip down memory lane.

This was nice, hopefully your story telling skills are a bit better and less cringe. But I should thank you. In a way you influenced my childhood into reading fanfics. Thank you for starting something that even now influences me. I hope you’re doing well, I hope maybe you too look back on your work. I hope you see this and are happy on how much this influenced me, even if some parts made me cringe and die on why child me thought “wow Barnes and Nobles can’t compare to this!” How naive of me! But cute. Just thank you so much. Hope you’re doing okay, hope you’re vibing, hope you’re happy. I just wish you all the best, from the person whose life changed thanks to you. Maybe I’m reading too deep into things like “Kay cmon it’s a Pokemon fic, relax” but idk. Small things can change your life and just as Pokemon influxes my childhood and gave me a Pokemon phase, this gave me a fan fiction phase. Something I’m still going through lol.

Thanks for everything! Hope your writing has improved from this!

Me encanto puedes hacer una secuela

I read this ages ago, back when I was in high school. I finished it at a debate tournament that I'd entered. Now I'm nearly finished with college and - for some reason - I remembered it and thought to read it again.

It wasn't nearly as good as I remembered. I cringed at a lot of parts and wondered why I'd thought they were quality. A lot of it reminds me of why I've come to dislike most fanfiction. All in all, part of the read was just a sort of pain that I had to force myself through.

But I remembered some things that I liked, too. I remember good ol' Hoshi, and I can't deny that I was still fond of him. I remember the phone call with Green, Rozi's reunion with Daizy, and Seira's grief. I remembered (and cringed when anticipating) Cincinno's chat with N before nailing Darmanitan with Solarbeam. I remembered a lot before they even came to me know the reread.

That epilogue was absolutely not there when I read this story the first time, though. I'm guessing that it was put out long after I'd closed the book on Eden. While it was almost everything that I hate in a bog-standard "epilogue with kids", I can't deny that part of me was happy to see that a little more was added to the tale for me to come back to nearly a decade later.

I was a pretty friendless, lonely individual back in high school. Part of what helped me through was just reading, and fanfiction was one of my greatest pleasures. This is one of the few stories that I actually remember by name - because I loved it. I'm still kind of trying to figure life out, but I'm in a better place than before. I have friends that brighten my days and better relationships with my family.

I'm sure you don't want to hear me wax eloquent on my life story, and I don't blame you. But all this is to explain why I'm here to say thanks, even as I talk crap about your story. I hope that you're doing well and that your writing's improved since 2013. Thanks for putting so much dedication into creating one of the stories that sustained me back when I was younger and craved it. It really meant something.

Honestly? I cried, and I don't get sentimental easily. Good God I love this story, I can't find the words to describe it, and I know it's been years since it finished, but I feel obligated to say how much I enjoyed reading this. I started playing Pokemon Black a week ago and I immediately loved N and the whole Ferriswheelshipping dynamic, and this story made me love the ship even more.

If an attitude does a 360, it'll be the same.

Best story ever
I commend you deeply.

I hate writing about battle scenes as well. I don't like reading them if they're too long. There's too much of a setup. But, in the games on the other hand...

Believable, yes.
Uncalled for, yes.
Comment: At least it wasn't to the head and/or neck.

Me when people try to add dramatics by killing off an awesome character in books:
:(
WHY