|Reviews for Two Bodies|
| Neverknew chapter 4 . 10/31/2014
I almost screamed an 'OMG YES'. The scene was amazing, I love how you compared their battle to a dance, a rhythm that they knew; a dance that was both intense and instinct and all they had to do was surrender themselves to the feel of it. Also, Ami is STRONG. She is graceful and fluid, but also - she is strong, deadly, competent. I feel like non one gives Ami enough credit; simply the 'brains' with no other tactical value. But she picks up Makoto's sword and wields it with grace and fluidity. I absolutely love it - thank you for giving Ami the credit I feel she deserves.
Also, after such a beautiful, strong scene, the other two show up and make this amazing entrance and I was so happy to see them all together. The pieces are falling together!
And again you were flawless with Ami's character - strong and decisive, but once the battle is over; she feels pain, she feels sorrow for the bloodshed and Mako is there for her.
| Neverknew chapter 3 . 10/31/2014
Again you've captured it - how the world has gone silent around them and Mako & Ami are free to simply be. Finally, they're give a chance to relinquish control and duty and just be. So glad you took the time to write it, and finally some quiet for our battered soldiers. They deserve it!
| Neverknew chapter 2 . 10/31/2014
So something I'm still learning myself in my stories is 'less is more'. Sometimes a simple cold statement can carry more weight than all the explanations in the world ('It was enough.). Not only that, but the worlds you weave are breathing, living things - immersive. The writing style is so descriptive that I can just jump in. Kudos!
| Neverknew chapter 1 . 10/31/2014
Sometimes life gets chaotic and it feels like I can't keep up. And then that voice stops me and tells me to breathe. Just breathe. You perfectly capture that peace, that moment in time where the world slows down around and for a moment you can just wait. Love this intro.
| Neverknew chapter 5 . 10/7/2012
This was a great story. I love the alternate timeline, and the way you managed to catch snippets of time, here and there as the world kinda passed by without them. Or rather, as they waited for the world to catch up. There's such a stillness and loneliness to their world, so dark and dreary that seems to seep through the pages and into your pores.
I loved this.
Also, I had to give you kudos for your versed writing style. I read this one and the Roller Coaster story right after. There are... worlds of differences between the two. That takes a lot of talent, to plop yourself in one world, but even more to leave it definitively behind and jump head-first into a new one. The feel, verse, flow, and personality between the two is amazing.
Great, great job. :)
| CelticPhoenixProductions chapter 5 . 5/22/2012
It's good, but I'm still confused as hell as to what's going on in this story...,,
| Angelsheart85 chapter 5 . 5/20/2012
awwwwww soooo gentle and so sailor moon like in its most beautiful spirit
| James Birdsong chapter 5 . 5/19/2012
We could call this a cool story
| Museless Fool chapter 4 . 5/12/2012
After the 'stillness', almost timelessness of the previous chapters this scene comes as a great and not unwelcome surprise. Seamless action fills the page and one can see the transition into each moment incredibly easy played out before our very eyes. I envy your word prowess. :)
| Angelsheart85 chapter 4 . 5/12/2012
wow ! After all this time U keep me purely mesmerized with your words! U are amazing! And thanx a lot for keep writing about one of our favorite couples :) awwwwwwwwwwwwww they are so... adorable? A weak word for the two of them! I love them both in manga/anime and even more in the fans interpretation here at fanfiction :) !
| Angelsheart85 chapter 3 . 10/8/2011
| Crosswood chapter 3 . 9/10/2011
Alas! I have admired this wee chapter several times, smiling at its elegance. But I completely forgot to review! What an idiot I am!
Firstly might I compliment you on the overall atmosphere you've created? That dim coolness of the cave is fair palpable. A reader can almost see the shifting plays of light themselves, so neatly is it painted.
You walk a knife's edge in many ways - this scene is small and sweet and quiet - but underneath it roils with implications. For something which tells us next to nothing about why, how, or when - it tells us *rather a lot* about "what". A very intense thing, almost voyeuristic, to watch Ami in this context.
An interesting thing also, that Mako seeks to live in the future. An admirable quality: as admirable as Ami remembering the past. Balance.
In the end, that seems to be your message, in this third stanza. Balance between two folks. I love this whole thing. Sincere regards.
| Museless Fool chapter 3 . 7/26/2011
Subtle and sensual is all I can say. Words fail me. :) Wonderfully done once again!
| ReaderMarz chapter 3 . 7/24/2011
I really enjoyed picturing this scene! Great details, even as you limited the scences allowed to Ami. Thanks for updating!
| Kenneth Black chapter 2 . 7/3/2011
. . wo-o-ow, I'm feeling a bit chilled. But after reading that soft light that was in Makoto's eyes, the warmth comes! Great way in describing how, when, where, and almost the unsaid why that certain herb grows there.