Reviews for The Fate of the Forgotten
TheFreelancerSeal chapter 1 . 3/23/2011
Very nice. It's an interesting character for your new fic. I think you should go ahead and start Why I Breath. As for the technical aspects of this fic, you're doing quite well. I enjoyed your vivid descriptions and your word choice. I've never done a first-person POV, but I have respect for the people who do them well, and I'd say you're one of them. You paint an excellent picture of Darksaber's mind and his motivations. My one issue is that you always put Death in bold. I'm sure you had your reasons, probably to make us understand that this is an entity, but I just found it breaking the beat of the story you might say. But that's probably just me. I look forward to your story.