Reviews for Death is only the beginning |
---|
![]() ![]() ![]() hello! I read your story and it looks very interesting. But i have just one thing to say: You need to proofread your work. If you think it's hard to do it, you can hire a beta reader to beta read your story. Keep writing! Cause that is awesome. |
![]() ![]() ![]() EMILY! I love your story and all but you seriously need to fix the spelling. SHOUVED? Really emily? |
![]() ![]() ![]() HEY HEY HEY :D It's going great so far! Here's some advice: PROOFREAD! Your first line: I know i haven't been able to stay at a school for more than a year, i understand my grades are bellow average, but summer school and suspension, why is it always me! Correction: I know I (capital) been able to stay at a school for more than a year. (full stop) I (capital) understand my grades are bellow average, but summer school and suspension? (end it with a question mark) Why is it always me? (Question mark, not a exclamation mark. remember that that is a question. But for more stress on the phrase - which I suspect you were trying to do - you can put both a question mark and an exclamation (?)). Just re-read and you'll find more stuff like that. Other problems: "come on mate you got to eat something" said percy. Correction: "Come on mate! You've got to eat something!" Percy said. Work on the capital letters and where your sentences end. HOPE THAT HELPED! :D You're the best! KEEP WRITING WOMAN. I'M WAITING FOR MORE. Jeez, this was a long review. I'll see you Monday! :D ~Daniella Jones |