|Reviews for Death is only the beginning|
| Tempest Cain chapter 2 . 5/12/2011
hello! I read your story and it looks very interesting. But i have just one thing to say: You need to proofread your work. If you think it's hard to do it, you can hire a beta reader to beta read your story. Keep writing! Cause that is awesome.
| Hayley Barbossa chapter 1 . 3/30/2011
EMILY! I love your story and all but you seriously need to fix the spelling. SHOUVED? Really emily?
| Daniella Jones chapter 1 . 3/18/2011
HEY HEY HEY :D It's going great so far!
Here's some advice:
Your first line:
I know i haven't been able to stay at a school for more than a year,
i understand my grades are bellow average, but summer school and suspension, why is it always me!
I know I (capital) been able to stay at a school for more than a year. (full stop)
I (capital) understand my grades are bellow average, but summer school and suspension? (end it with a question mark) Why is it always me? (Question mark, not a exclamation mark. remember that that is a question. But for more stress on the phrase - which I suspect you were trying to do - you can put both a question mark and an exclamation (?)).
Just re-read and you'll find more stuff like that.
"come on mate you got to eat something" said percy.
"Come on mate! You've got to eat something!" Percy said.
Work on the capital letters and where your sentences end.
HOPE THAT HELPED! :D You're the best! KEEP WRITING WOMAN. I'M WAITING FOR MORE.
Jeez, this was a long review.
I'll see you Monday! :D