Reviews for The Invisible Line
Judyblue95 chapter 6 . 11/11/2016
Geez Edward is going through a LOT of girls! And we KNEW James was never going to be the one for Bella! Only 5 more chapters to go...you said something about chapter 9? I'll keep reading...
Judyblue95 chapter 5 . 11/11/2016
why do I get the feeling that, although neither is now attached, it won't be them together quite yet. Maybe Carmen and Marcus should get together...
Judyblue95 chapter 4 . 11/11/2016
This is a lovely story, but I bet they each have to explore a bit before they realize what a rare kind of relationship they truly have. I 'll go along for the ride...eagerly!
Judyblue95 chapter 3 . 11/11/2016
oh no. cockblocked by his "best friend". he got over that quickly...
Judyblue95 chapter 2 . 11/11/2016
another wonderful chapter. your writing flows, the storyline is interesting, although I don't read too many teenage stories anymore, this one caught my eye. Sorry for your baby troubles and hope all is ok now...
Judyblue95 chapter 1 . 11/11/2016
wow that was a helluva way to start a story! i guess i didn't read this in the contest, so it's new to me. I love the premise and can't wait to see where you take it!
Guest chapter 11 . 9/12/2016
Sweet, sweet story. Thanks for sharing your talent with us.
CullenPotterEverdeen chapter 11 . 8/3/2016
I absolutely loved this fic! The development of E&B's relationship was beautiful (and hot), and it was so well written. Thanks for this masterpiece LC!
crunchinn x ice chapter 11 . 7/28/2016
great story loved it!
ChristyWIX chapter 11 . 7/15/2016
That was a very non glamorous look into a life with children. Very real. Funny, too. I was surprised they had three children but, not when we learned how fast Mason was conceived. How many years did they have just the two of them, before jumping into pregnancy? You made me so sad for Rose and Emmett. Three years is a long time to wait, when you want to get pregnant. I'm very glad you got them preggers before the story ended. Loved that she stole Mason to let BxE have sexy times. I truly loved this story, from start to finish. It was really good. You definitely kept it true to the characters. You gave them a very happy ending. Thank you so much for sharing of your imagination with us here. ~Christy
ChristyWIX chapter 10 . 7/15/2016
Awww, their first Christmas at home, alone, just the two of them. And, what a memorable one at that. I loved how he started the proposal with, 'I bought a ring.', it was absolutely perfect! Her, 'Yes!', before he even asked anything was adorable. I really loved the whole scene. The moms jumping up and down in excitement, then realizing the kids were right there, jumping up and down with them, too. Such a great little scene. I love that Edward asked Charlie, yay! I loved that Rose and Emmett got married, I really did. However, it felt like Bella got one upped by Rose and took away her fun. Not to mention Rose's best friends weren't even there for the event. I'm glad that Emmett and rose got chewed out by his mom, they deserved it. Especially from her. I saw her losing her job but, I thought it would be her crappy boss being a dick, not cutbacks. And, she's one of seven who now all need work. How is she supposed to compete with that? You had me really freaked out about her going to Albuquerque to seek employment. I'm was elated that Rose yelled at her and said everything I was thinking. Thank you, Rose. She did get it but, she turned it down. I hope she doesn't resent Edward for it later. He can't leave, his is a family business and that is what makes it so much more difficult. My husband and I both have jobs that can be done anywhere. I work from home and he's in heating and air conditioning. I couldn't imagine what he must've been feeling with her going for this job. He finally got her after all those years of waiting. I'm glad she told them no.
ChristyWIX chapter 9 . 7/15/2016
GAH! I flove these two together . . . really together . . . YAY! They were fun to read before, now they're even more fun to read. Edward was so good with her that next morning. The camaraderie didn't leave. It actually got stronger. Loved that they still banter in bed. Loved that they spent the whole weekend in bed. Rose knew right away, just by looking at Bella and that was fantastic! Her making fun of her walking, too funny. I was happy to learn that Rose has stayed with Emmett. And, that she's fallen in love with him. He wants her to move in, yay! It made me laugh that Edward said Emmett needs to learn trial by fire with her. Wish I could be a fly on the wall for the moving in conversation. Quite the expensive place that Emmett owns. So funny that Bella was so overcome by passion on their way home, that she attacked Edward . . . getting caught by the police officer. Loved that they are buying a home together. Her realization that she's been keeping him away, was interesting. And, he was right, they probably weren't ready yet. Nasty first house to look at. Yuck! Esme's reaction to them finally being together, was so funny. I agree with Edward, she probably ran to call Renee. Liked the Bella and Charlie conversation. Sweet and funny. Very good chapter. Filled with love and happiness.
ChristyWIX chapter 8 . 7/15/2016
Wow, Riley came and went. Maggie, as clingy as she was, never seemed to even make it all the way to his bedroom. Loved the part with the masseuse, good play on things there. The stalker was scary. I would've like to have read how Bella and Rose got rid of her. Mexico was fun to read. Graduation happened and now they have to adult. I am forty-nine and still do not much care for adulting everyday, lol. Now, I may have to go back and re-read the first chapter (the o/s), just to piece it together better.
ChristyWIX chapter 7 . 7/15/2016
I really, really liked this chapter. I loved that it was mostly the three of them together. The friendships are stronger than ever. I am enjoying watching them grow into young adults and having so much fun. Still taking school so very seriously. Which is so important. Her questioning how many women he's been with and him not answering, was great. Especially his reasoning for not answering. When they become more, is when he will tell her that. Also, Edward has so very much patience with Bella. I know this is all BPOV but, I would love to be in his head to see how he deals with it all. You can very much tell that he truly loves her. Beyond friendship love. I loved his lottery ticket analogy with her pushing him away. It really fit what they do to each other. I think the anger stems from his being frustrated that he knows they'd be great together and be forever, if she could just get past the hurtle.
ChristyWIX chapter 6 . 7/14/2016
I didn't realize they moved in together that really on. Thinking it must've been difficult if they brought their significant others home. You sort nipped that in the bud though, with them going to their bf/gf homes instead. Then they both were home together the one night, with their others with them and it was super crunchy. It was kind of shitty of Edward to blame Bella for his failed attempts at relationships. He could've tried harder with the women he was interested in. He probably was pushing them away subconsciously, not even realizing it and then found it easier to blame Bella for it. I wasn't surprised that James saw BxE in the kitchen that night, as that was bound to happen at some point. The love BxE have for one another will always override the love they let in from outside temporaries. They'll do it, without even knowing they're doing it.
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