|Reviews for Happy Birthday|
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/26/2013
so wait, are they brother and sister or couples?
| Angel Peach Blossom chapter 1 . 3/26/2011
Well, I'm not a huge fan of this sort of thing, but I'm not going to let that get in the way.
Thing is, this story is short and rushed in my opinion. Most of this is quotes, with barely any description at all. I wasn't convinced of the supposed feelings that Cesar had for Claire and vice versa.
Spelling and grammar are okay, but there could be more description to help paint a picture in our heads.
Cesar barely talks about his sister in the game, but you can tell how much he meant to her. Yet, in all honesty, I don't think this is the way he felt. Just my opinion of course.
I'm not saying the story is a bad idea. It just could have used a bit more work is all.