Reviews for Don't Leave Me
hellraiserphoenix chapter 11 . 12/27/2013
please update soon
Sci-fi Girl 102 chapter 1 . 12/15/2013
I love this!

Please update soon. Can't wait x
JoTracy123 chapter 9 . 11/26/2013
This is getting so good update soon xx
JoTracy123 chapter 8 . 11/26/2013
Really good and well done update soon xx
JoTracy123 chapter 7 . 11/13/2012
I really enjoyed that and I know the feeling about college work lol update soon xx
grnfield chapter 6 . 10/25/2012
"Can we start with sex ed?" Oh yeah, Nat's sooo cut up about Virgil leaving and putting himself in danger that she's fooling around on her bed with Andy. Virgil's way better off without her!
Trillianaus chapter 6 . 10/24/2012
She's people deeply "in love" with Virgil that she's pausing another bloke? Yeah.
JoTracy123 chapter 6 . 10/24/2012
Loving this and you seem to be writing Virgil really well update soon xxxxx
grnfield chapter 5 . 10/9/2012
Hmm, if Jeff's security is somewhat lacking if he's left things as obvious as that picture/story book lying around for anyone to find. International Rescue isn't going to stay secret for long at this rate.

International Rescue is a name so should be capitalised and need to have another look at the capitals on Mommy, Dad etc.

Why do I get the feeling that Universal Cruise line is doomed?!
grnfield chapter 3 . 10/9/2012
Is this the very next day? Did Jeff not pre-warn the boys that they would be moving? Has he literally taken Gordon out of hospital and loaded him onto a plane? Is that safe?

I don't think the schools will be too happy about losing their students overnight with no warning...
grnfield chapter 2 . 10/9/2012
Well done in correcting the spelling of Alan!

'Actually, he more so sated it' - this makes no sense, sorry!

There are serious issues with the POV in this chapter. You stated at the top that it's Virgil's POV but "John walked over to the trash can and Virgil and I mindlessly followed and numbly threw our trash away." Who is the third person?

Also the same point in "He doing okay?" Virgil asked walking over to the small couch..."

If you're using Dad as a name then it should have a capital letter, for example "Dad, where's my sports bag?" but if you're describing the person then you don't capitalise it, "My dad went to the moon."
grnfield chapter 1 . 10/9/2012
There are some peculiar capitalisations in this chapter. Particularly glaring is that Virgil doesn't need to be a He with a capital letter, he's Virgil, not God.

I know it's been said in other review but it's 'Alan' not 'Allen'. You need to change them in this chapter because it doesn't match the rest of the story and it makes it seem like there are six Tracy boys rather than five!
Trillianaus chapter 5 . 10/7/2012
Really? That big of a security breech? Virgil's drawings from years ago just happen to be the configurations for the craft in actual use? I can suspend disbelief only so far... This scenario is too far.
JoTracy123 chapter 5 . 10/7/2012
Yeah loving this update and story update soon xxx
Guest chapter 4 . 9/21/2012
Please update I love this!
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