Loving this story!

Elizabeth in this story was an utter idiot.I love Darcy reasoning , hated Lizzy

yeah do write a new fic i'd love to read it!

I don't think that I would easily accept a claim of seeing the future...but I hope that I would take time to challenge the person to give some evidence of it before I declared it to be a lie. Fantastic claims, as a rule, require fantastic evidence; by all means, reject such claims if the evidence is not forthcoming, but it's important to at least give the claimant a chance. If only so that you can dismiss their claims with full confidence in what you're doing.

The chapter does a nice job of tugging at the heartstrings, though, even if I don't think Lizzy's actions were perfect :).

Oh, this chapter was definitely good stuff. Elizabeth deciding that Charles is perfect for her sister because he can put up with their family cracked me up.

The comparison of leaders who aren't leading is a bit sad, but worth contemplating.

In any other circumstances this might have been disastrous, but it occurs to me that Charles is currently in the unenviable position of feeling that he has grievously wronged Jane and must make amends. Therefore, this is perhaps the best possible time for him to encounter her family, when he has the greatest motivation to be patient with their failings.

Oh, so *that's* what Bingley was on about. I was thinking that perhaps his sister was dropping poison in his ear regarding Jane. But he thought that Darcy was chasing her? It seems an odd notion when Charles and Jane were thick as thieves on their double date and Darcy barely spoke to her - and I'm not sure why it would make Charles treat her coldly, if he thought that the chasing was on Darcy's end? - but at least there's an explanation.

(Seriously, it is a bit odd. If Charles thought that Jane and Mr Darcy were mutually interested in each other, then why would there be any need for them to use him as a go-between? And if he instead thought, based on those delirious words, that Darcy was just using him to get to Jane, then why be angry at Jane? I think I'm still missing something.)

Well, Elizabeth wouldn't appreciate his machinations if she knew about them...but they don't seem entirely unreasonable. Unless, of course, she leaves Blue Line in the near future.

I'm not quite sure I'd describe him as *adorable*, but his cluelessness can be cute.

I'm curious now about whether Elizabeth really would have been in danger if Mr Darcy hadn't turned up and given her a ride home.

At least he's started to realise how thoroughly he's put his foot in things, before he gets as far as proposing :D.

I like your spin on Mr Darcy's character here. You've managed to make him at once outwardly even worse behaved toward Elizabeth, yet inwardly improved from "haughty and proud" to "didn't think this through." It's a bit cute and amusing.

Loving your story.

Oh my. I'm reading this after completed obviously,an so glad I don't to wait for the rest of the story.

I really liked the story and writing.
But some parts of the story left me a bit dissatisfied. Firstly, it seemed like lizzy was wrong on most accounts, she was really rude to Mr. Darcy. While mr. Darcy seemed like a saint, he only has committed 2 mistakes, firing lizzy withouth any concern and the words he said to her when he saw wickham with her. But for both those things he apologised and those actions also felt sort of justified (like it wasnt the terrible sort of mistake just a momentarily lapse in judgement) . While lizzy seemed extremely shallow and rude because she blamed most things on mr. Darcy, her actions and words did have reasons behind them but those reasons seem to felt short. I kept thinking that she was terribly wrong in her behaviour to mr. Darcy. Lizzy was certainly prejudiced but darcy didmt feel prideful.
Secondly I think jane forgave charles very easily. He accussed her of trying to get with dracy based on something darcy said in his delirious state. It was a serious and heavy accusations and charles got off rather easily. He basically called jane a gold digger and social climber and jane readily forgave him. Another reason why lizzy blaming dracy for charles and janes separation felt so wrong.

Rereading again, and enjoyed so much! Liked the slight fantasy element and also the setting. Thank you!

An interesting, if emotionally difficult, idea. I've seen it done before, but not often; I think most JAFF authors concentrate primarily on the"happily" portion of the "happily ever afterno judgement there since I do the same, admittedly). I think it's worth exploring in depth, though, since it's something many people can relate to and I can see the impact the lack of an heir could have on them as a couple. Even if it takes three years, I'll read itOne suggestion, however. I don't think that enough writers consider miscarriages as potentially traumatic enough to cause reader anxiety and so don't issue warnings beforehand when a plot contains one (or several) like when a rape/sexual assault is used. If your story does feature the loss of a child in any form, I just recommend a heads up for potentially sensitive readers. I've never experienced one myself (thank God), but I did suffer some pregnancy and post-partum anxiety which, in part, focused on this topic and I'm sure that I'm not the only one. I've accidentally read things that upset me before and I felt later that a warning might have at least prepared me for it if I'd wanted to continue. This is in no way meant to discourage you from writing your story the way you want (or even an assumption that miscarriages/child loss will be a factor), just a friendly request to not let sensitive readers run headlong into something that might disturb them.

either way, I'm excited to read it if you post. you're just as talented writing in the regency style as you are the modern