|Reviews for The Sender and the Reciever|
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/12
| zuzuthezombie chapter 1 . 4/16/2012
'Twas good Steampunk, my friend! I likey!
| Anonymous chapter 1 . 1/6/2012
Very nicely done! Not bad steampunk!
| ka has moved chapter 1 . 3/24/2011
Oh, Defender, I love this.
Admittedly I'm incredibly partial to steampunk, but for someone who's new to the genre you did an excellent job. I have to admit, I was a bit unsure of all the gears and clockwork devices you put Mr. Benedict in, but by the time you got to the end it made sense. ;)
The brilliance of steampunk is that there really isn't anything I can correct you on, except to say that the dialogue should be /slightly/ more formal and Rhonda and Number Two would probably be in dresses. The reason I can't correct you on the second count is because this is your interpretation of the genre, therefore what you say goes.
As for CC~
"A child's voice filled the room, slow and droning[;]" A colon would be better [here], simply because you're stating that the child is droning and then you type what the child drones.
"She [to] wore boots" An easy-to-make mistake, I've done this one more than I can count. [Too], meaning that she's also wearing boots.
Anyway, I did think that Number Two's armor was pretty clever. Simply saying.
Thanks for your contribution, Defender!