|Reviews for Someone to Watch Over Me Part 2|
| Peanut Gallery chapter 1 . 4/23/2013
You must be a good writer you made me almost like Deadboy. Your style works well, not going into the BANG, POW, WHAM that most fan writers do leaving the action to the reader imagination. The only Flaw I saw, (Alert, Alert Stealth Critic Detected) was the trap on planet PX2-302 with a trip wire destroying a city. Someone living in the city or an animal like a rat would have set it off Jess action need to be a little more complicated than that, entering a wrong code, removal of an ancient artifact, doing a bad touch to the God's Statue, something other than a trip wire.
Thanks for a good read,
| mendenbar chapter 1 . 9/8/2011
Sometimes Jack is so clueless.
Would it be possible to indicate some sort of break when you change scenes? I got a little lost bouncing from current events to past events to work with AI to work with SGC.