|Reviews for The Boys of Dalton|
| Cmhprincess chapter 7 . 10/19/2011
Such a wonderful story! I have fallen in love with some of these character. I can't wait for the next instalment :D keep doing what you do because you do it so well!
| Daltonaddict chapter 7 . 8/10/2011
Very well written. Update please, kthxbai.
| forwhenthedayisgrey chapter 1 . 6/19/2011
Can you write out who is who's son, it's quite confusing. I really like that Alan hates salt because Dwight has it everywhere at home...
| no name i dont have a nem chapter 5 . 5/29/2011
Reviewing again just to spazz out at Let The Rain because AOUEGHA I LOVE THAT SONG. Okay spazzing done. The story just got 1000x better because of the song though.
| no name i dont have a nem chapter 4 . 5/29/2011
I was gonna wait to review when I got finished reading all of the chapters but I guess I just realized that you only got 1 review by the beginning of chapter 4 and that surprised me! I'm really enjoying the story and I think you're doing a wonderful job!
| caroline18227 chapter 6 . 5/29/2011
The ending was so cute :)
I love Brevyn and Pierce. And I hope Winston is okay..
| Jessica Mitch chapter 5 . 5/14/2011
Loving it more and more! :D
I like the new conflicts in the story with Winston and Simon. So curious for Simon though but I have made my theories! Theory one: Anorexia. Theory two: Stalker. Theory three: Bitch actor and was thrown off set? (Unlikely that last one)
Also, intrigue! History repeats itself with Joey and Simon... Interesting (Logan reference, pun intended).
Here are some errors I noticed whilst reading... The corrections are in all caps ()
1. That time with Winston stressing over Winter fest:
"All the parents would come to watch that performance, EVEN if their son was not performing."
2. While Simon was in the car:
"After all, their plane had gotten in AT four, it was five now, and so classes had been out for a while."
3. That time when Pierce was at the fountain:
"The bright light reflected off THE water"
4. Winston again, when he almost fainted:
"However, if he ate, Winston was worried he would feel sick and so he pretty much avoided that all together and just didn't eat."
There's just a comma between "ate" and "Winston".
That will be all.
| vfthp chapter 4 . 5/6/2011
I really like the story line you have going, but I'm honestly still confused about who is whose son and such. Is it something we're supposed to gradually figure out as we go, or could we possibly get a family tree of sorts?
Also, I've noticed a handful of grammar mistakes in each chapter. Watch out for you're/your and apostrophe errors!
I also feel like some of the characters are too similar to their parents - not in the way that they share similar qualities (such as Erik), but that they in essence are (Damien, Joey). For some characters, it works (the Weasley twins), but for others it makes it feel like a repeat. I don't mean to say that you should change your characters necessarily, but I just think it would show more of your creativity if, say, you gave us more background information on specific characters that shows them as more unique. But that's just a recommendation! You know your characters and story best, so go with what you feel is right in the end.
| LittleRedJJ chapter 1 . 5/6/2011
This story is seriously amazing! Thank you so much for writing it because I adore it. Brevyn and Pierce are awesome and I love how you made the boys have parts of they're father's personalities. I'm also hoping you'll write another chapter soon because I'm really interested in finding out who is the boy that cuts himself. :)
| Maiqu20 chapter 4 . 5/5/2011
love this..a bit confused about a few things though are Pierce and Beckett related to any of the original characters?
im guessing there's no jogan in this right?
| Review chapter 1 . 4/24/2011
your story is amazing. I can't wait to see how you continue to built on an already so well developed universe. You had me hooked since the first chapter!
I really like how Alan wan't nothing to do with his father's strange obsession. I was holding my breath in anticipation when Joey started acting like his father so Damien called Julian and Derek. The way you presented your characters as well as showing how they are related to the original characters from Dalton was stunning.
I found myself falling completely in love with Brevyn and Pierce as a couple. They are just so adorable!
So far the story is really good and I look forward to reading the next chapter.
P.S this has been shared with Cp Coulter herself. Hopefully she will like it.