Reviews for My Little Pony Chronicles: Book 1
Starbuck821 chapter 14 . 1/25
As for the A/N, on the show I always sounded like Mushnick to me.
Starbuck821 chapter 8 . 1/23
Ugh, well written but typos everywhere. I don't feel you got Wind Whistler's dialog right, but she tends to be a hard pony to write lines for.
MTBY chapter 29 . 4/6/2014
Reminded me a lot of Lord of the Rings
Shadow Cloud 5283 chapter 29 . 1/23/2013
Having just finished reading the story, over a week of reading, I have found the story to be quite entertaining. You have great character development. Though you have a ton of spelling errors. Go back and read out loud your story. You will find the errors. Please fix the question mark issue. You are losing meaning to your writing. I am moving on to your next story, and I wish you good luck for future stories.
Julia Lucrezia Hanazono chapter 13 . 9/2/2012
Noooo! Ember! How dare Tirac hurt her like that! I can't wait for the ponies to kick his butt!
Julia Lucrezia Hanazono chapter 10 . 5/31/2012
Okay. This has to be the best G1 pony fan fic I've ever read! You've really outdone yourself here! I did notice a few spelling errors, but you've definitely remedied the lack of question marks. Awesome work! I can't wait to see where all of this goes from here. Keep it up!
Julia Lucrezia Hanazono chapter 4 . 5/30/2012
This is wonderful! I love where this is going! But I've noticed a few errors. I notice that with questions you put in commas instead of question marks. Example:

"You're sure they're not coming back," Medley asked.

It should be: "You're sure they're not coming back?" Medley asked.

You kind of do this a lot. But I love the detailed explanations on how the ponies came to be. Awesome work!
Drew L chapter 1 . 5/13/2012
Whoa! I'm loving this! I can't believe I never saw this fanfic before! Oh man, I wish I could write like this.
Julia Lucrezia Hanazono chapter 3 . 3/18/2012
Wow. This is amazing! I can already tell you're giving the ponies some personalities and character development! Nice! Though, I did find some errors: Jerry Jubile is supposed to be Cherries Jubilee, and Lickitysplit is supposed to be Lickety Split. Also...

"Perhaps your son was fight, milord. A young, strong commander would be a good for morale. After all, he spearheaded the previous Northern campaign just fine," said David's advisor.

It should be right, not fight. Just letting you know!
Julia Lucrezia Hanazono chapter 2 . 3/18/2012
Wow. You really put a lot of thought into the history of Eoland. I can tell right away this story's not going to disappoint!
I am done here 727184 chapter 1 . 9/7/2011
I MEANT SCORPAN! XD
I am done here 727184 chapter 29 . 9/7/2011
I FINALLY FINISHED REEEAADIING.

This story was EPIIIC. Loved it! And the fact that Tirac was good... THAT was a nice touch! THE PART WHERE SPIKE AND TIRAC SEPERATED MADE ME CRYYY.

Amazing story! LOVE IT.
WyldClaw chapter 29 . 9/7/2011
What an incredible , incredible powerful ending! I wonder if they will be able to permanently stop Beezen the next time they cross his paths

I hope that they can restore the transformed pastels to their original state.

Poor Bernhard. Seeing megan and daniel reunite must have been very hard for him after learning about frederick’s brave sacrifice.

I hope that we get to see the specialists again.

I got choked up at scorpan’s and spike’s departure. The part where spike called him dad really got me

This was a totally amazing awe-inspiring stupendous fanfic! Even if I tried I could never make write like this! You can definitely count me in for book 2

thanks for the shout out!
WyldClaw chapter 7 . 9/4/2011
I liked megan’s idea of disguising firefly with mud so that no one would see she was the pony the lords were after. I wonder if Frederick will listen to what firefly has to tell him

I wonder where they will find the element of light or even a human with blood of the Light Continent.

you got the Moochic down pat!

Every time I read about tirac telling Scorpan his true plan for the pastels it gives me a shiver:

"Yes, these Pastels were altered by magicks long ago, and they are charged with raw magical energy. Combined with my power on the day of the Summer Solstice, which will be amplified tenfold, I will be able to transform them into creatures of darkness. They will pull my chariot skyward into the heavens. There, I will bring in the night that never ends! My power will sweep the land. You know the phrase, you can run, but can't hide? There won't even be a place to run anymore when my work is done. All will be mine, Scorpan. It is for that moment, which everything we have done works towards."

Scorpan stood, mouth agape. "I know you wanted control of the entire continent…master, but the whole world…"

"Yes, Scorpan. The entire world. Everything is now in place. All the nearby kingdoms which might have been able to halt my plans had they ever learned of them will fall or be subjugated before the Solstice, mooting the issue. I have all the components collected to complete the spell. Seventy years of hard work will finally pay off. You see, Scorpan, what separates me from conquerors of the past is that I now have what I need to take the entire world without biting off more than I can chew. All good things to those who wait."

"Wait? Wait for what? Couldn't you have taken the ponies before and completed this on another Solstice?"

"No, it has to be on a Summer Solstice on each hundredth year anniversary of the day the Light and Dark Continents fell. The fabled Myrrh Star will shine only on that day, granting enough added energy to any elemental spell caster to cast the most powerful spells from their body of magic. In my case, the element of darkness, and I know the spell that will grant the Eternal Night!"

"A star…shining in the day?"

"Yes, Scorpan. A star shining in the day, it goes without saying that it's not an ordinary heavenly body. It shines once every hundred years. It shined on the day of the Cataclysm that ended both the continents, as they attempted to use it as I do. They were careless with it and it destroyed them, forcing the peoples who weren't killed in the ensuing chaos to flee and scatter to the four winds."

"It sounds…as if you truly play with fire…master…"

Tirac chuckled. "Indeed. Put your mind at ease, Scorpan. I did not wait and plan all this time to be undone at my moment of triumph." Scorpan was suddenly very sorry he had asked. He didn't ask anymore, but he mentally slapped his himself for not considering what darker purposes Scorpan would have in ordering him to take the ponies. He did, however, find it odd that Tirac could know of such things, since this was never found in any history he had ever read on the old Light and Dark Continents.

That is way too evil for words!
WyldClaw chapter 21 . 8/26/2011
I think it's great that Cully was convinced to let the humans and ponies join his group with megan's demonstration of the vessel of light's power
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