|Reviews for Let the Tears Fall Down|
| emsaduem chapter 1 . 4/30/2014
Wow. Just, wow. Aside from a few grammatical and sentence errors. this story is perfect. It truly touched my heart, and nearly brought me to tears. It was beautiful and well-done.
| Darknessdawns chapter 1 . 8/15/2012
This was such a sad but sweet fic. I think you did a wonderful job with it.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/22/2012
this is so sweet im crying almost as if its my friend it happened to
| Amu52 chapter 1 . 12/20/2011
Awww that was so sad it was a great story though
| Risaku chapter 1 . 8/24/2011
You made me cry..You're not very merciful, you know! Anyway. I commend you for keeping the whole aire of melancholy throughout this piece. I just had to keep reading to make sure that Kyouya kicked his ass in gear and comforted Haruhi! Thank you for writing such a cute story.
| Soaring Keys chapter 1 . 8/14/2011
Well, that was sad... I'm sobbing and mom's wondering what the hell is going on! Oh god, this was just... amazing. Man I can't stop crying! Gaah Love it!
| Erisa Daelyn chapter 1 . 7/11/2011
Sad but sweet. Good little story.
| LittlePleasent chapter 1 . 5/2/2011
You nearly made me cry and thats never good. Lovely story and good luck if you write anymore im sure they will be great.
| Fedski chapter 1 . 4/25/2011
so very sad. and so very well written. congrats on a great story!
| Kannachan27 chapter 1 . 4/8/2011
You're right - it is sad, but there are some cute parts. But... more sad than cute, I have to say. Haruhi lost her mom and near the anniversary, she loses her dad, too! Poor girl..
I have some concrit for you, should you choose to listen:
There are parts of the dialogue that sound a little awkward and kind of forced. Also, the formatting needs a little bit of a change, especially towards the end, where Haruhi and Kyouya were talking with the Chairman. It's all run together and could be a little confusing. Almost like there's too much information all at once.
If you're going to use the honorifics and the Japanese way of things, then stick with that instead of adding in Western nicities. For example, if you say -san and -senpai, don't use "Miss" and make sure that your name ordering is in Surname, Given order (Fujioka Haruhi rather than Haruhi Fujioka) just in case. Not that I saw you do that, but it's still a good thing to remember.
The 'romance' part between Haruhi and Kyouya came off to me as too sudden. There isn't any hinting before-hand, which makes it seem kind of random for me. then again, it's a oneshot, so there isn't much to be said for that since Kyouya doesn't appear much before his confession. And his confession seemed a bit random to me, too, and not so in character (but I'm not claiming to be an expert on Kyouya's character), nor did Haruhi's breakdown and acceptance... or her pleading with him to stay, or the declaration that she would have to leave the school (I think I have an ok grasp on her character, moreso than Kyouya's) - she would have been wary about appearing weak to him, I think. And if he had gotten up, she probably would have accepted it, curled into herself and dealt with the fact he was leaving (at which point, Kyouya would have noticed and sat with her anyway).
Also, your comma usage (or lackthereof) makes it somewhat difficult to read and understand what you're writing. It's not impossible, but there are some places that it was difficult and I had to read more than once. In many places, it would have made much more sense if you had broken it up into multiple sentences instead of just adding commas in.
Near the end, while they were speaking with the Chairman, Haruhi mentioned that she was "...a boy pretending to be a girl..." and I remember that she was outed as a Girl pretending to be a Boy. I've made these kind of mistakes before, and they're hard to catch, so I was thinking that this would likely be one of those. I don't remember anything about the opposite happening, so...
I hope you don't think that I didn't enjoy it! I just thought that it was important for me to bring these things up to you. Despite the storyline being something that I HAVE seen before (A's family member died, B comforts A, confess, etc) it was enjoyable.
| Bella Luna 22 chapter 1 . 4/5/2011
I really liked it, even though it's sad. It was very good. It just made me sad that Ryoji "Ranka" died, he was very funny. Love the pairing at the end, from Ouran it's my second favourite.
| Seera'sTopHat chapter 1 . 4/1/2011
I cannont tell you how lovely this was when I read it. I usually don't like KyoHaru, but this fitted so perfectly. It showed an aspect of Kyoya that is different, his own vulnerability. Love is not so easy for the Shadow King. Everyone was kept well in character, despite the grieving porocess. Poor Ranka, R.I.P
| Shelly chapter 1 . 3/31/2011
(My dad doesn't want me to review but I'm going to anyways!) CRYYYYYYY this is so sad, but romantic! Well written, great content and structure! Beautiful! (I also have an account but can't be bothered to login I'll Fav it later!) Well done!