|Reviews for A Kitty in Heat and a Confused Bat|
| Diction-sama chapter 1 . 6/8/2013
It wasn't as shitty as you two seem to think. A little 'cookie-cutter,' but many one shots tend to end up that way. I also seem to remember quite a few stories that have the same plot of one/both/all characters are in heat and MUST have sex with each other. Of course, I do read nearly all of the M rated GrimmjowxUlquiorra fanfiction on here that catches my interest in the summary. You two may not have noticed all the people who have written about Grimmjow/Ulquiorra/All the arrancars in heat.
And on a side note:
"Do you want it, Ulquiorra?" Grimmjow asked, seductively.
Ulquiorra stared at him.
Did anyone else just picture grumpy cat when they read Ulquiorra's response? I did, and it made me happier than is probably normal xD.
| XxXSoManyFandoms-.-'XxX chapter 1 . 1/16/2013
BWADKCU! That was hawt! I love it! *.* *nosebleed* it was amazing even though you guys thought it was crappy. I just love this couple so much! :3 .3. THANK YOU! SEE YA LATERZ!
| YaoiCandy chapter 1 . 10/19/2011
This was down right SEXY! loved it made me soo hawt .
| kyo4 chapter 1 . 8/18/2011
aww Ulquiorra doesn't know about sex :) lol he sure does now!
| NightOfAThousandDreams chapter 1 . 4/23/2011
Okay. So, I made it this weird resolve of mine, after reading countless rated M fics with the same monotonous errors and cliches, to be extremely blunt.
The first half was very well written.
I liked it. Having Grimmjow "in heat" is a very interesting idea indeed. I couldn't help but chuckle that Ulquiorra just followed Grimmjow without knowing that which was to come. The concept itself was really good. Unique.
However, during the second half, some cliches began to emerge.
I'm not saying that it was horribly written. What I am saying is that yes, the sex scene was yummy, but it followed the same 1, 2, 3 pattern that most stories do. I'm not just talking about the physical acts, I am talking about the emotions and reactions.
Ulquiorra is NOT innocent. I can very well understand him not knowing what sex is, but describing him as innocent is a no-no. Remember to keep the character canon, even during the smut.
Well, this itself is a pet peeve of mine, but be aware that the Japanese do not use the words "seme" and "uke" the way we do. It is very unlikely that any character from any anime would refer to their lover as their "uke". It is a common misconception spawned by the millions of fangirls who roam the internet. Also, think this way- would Ulquiorra REALLY like to have the mark of "submissive". I doubt it.
Again, like I said, it's a pet peeve. I've grown to have a twitch every time I see a fanfiction have a character call his lover "uke". So, maybe it's just me.
Also, remember, in canon, Grimmjow and Ulquiorra DO NOT GET ALONG. The sex should have more power struggle in it, more fighting. Just saying.
Anyways, I wrote all this to help you with your writing in the future. People tend to give short reviews, and though it's tempting for me most of the time, I want to help people with their writing as much as I can.
I hope this helps!
| nicci'weezy chapter 1 . 4/18/2011
Yeah... I read this in public. Not a good idea(;
Nice work. This is definetly a shitty one-shot!
| Deck of cards chapter 1 . 4/12/2011
Shitty? No way. this was Awesome. with a capitol "A" so that makes it official. haha i like Seme Grimmjow. somehow, i just think it would be very out of character for him to be uke, so well done. loved it!
| Saix's and Xemnas's heart chapter 1 . 4/12/2011
That was amazing! :3 I love this story I'm going to favorite it.
Though, I wonder, what happened after that. With Aizen and the others, I wonder what they would say afterwords.
Anyways I loved it. WRITE MORE, please.
| Olympos chapter 1 . 4/12/2011
Could the almighty Fourth Espada be really this retarded? Grimmjow thought. - hahahahhahaha loool :P
it was so cute how Ulqui didn't know about sex xDDD and yeahhh! Ulqui is Grimm's uke, woot Anywho, yep yep i love this fic and i am faving it now :D
| IdaMustang chapter 1 . 4/6/2011
oh...my...god...loved it 33
| Jules Mordecai chapter 1 . 4/4/2011
Mmmmmmmmmmm...absolutely delicious! Sometimes I'm in the mood for a story with a great plot, and other times this is exactly what I'm craving...yummy Grimmjow and Ulquiorra hot sex! Mmmmmm, they are both so freakin' HOT and the way you write them, it only makes them HOTTER! I am seriously so in love with the way you write! I have now read all of your stories and I'm looking forward to more! So, PLEASE keep on writing, and I will keep on reading!
| Maru de Kusanagi chapter 1 . 3/31/2011
nice an yummy fic!