|Reviews for Obesessed|
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/9/2014
| Er what chapter 1 . 4/15/2014
First of all I don't understand why you made Edward a rapist, it wasn't necessary for the plot and personally it just made me uncomfortable.
By the way I think you mean Vagina not 'Virgina', if you are going to use a vile, sexist plot that glorifies rape the least you could do is is use spellcheck.
| kk chapter 1 . 8/1/2013
| Sunny chapter 1 . 7/29/2012
Wow that was all kinds on terrible!
| tiffyboocullenjonas chapter 1 . 1/31/2012
wow that was great loved
| jus tryin to help chapter 1 . 12/21/2011
no one ever loves some one as family da second they meet them and that was soooo fake nothin of that would happen to someone in jus 2 days...complete miss if u fix alooooot of things it might be a good story but i dout it and also vamps got super hearin everyone wud have known edward had raped bella wen they were in his room
| Guest chapter 1 . 6/15/2011
| SweetiePieSaysHi chapter 1 . 4/1/2011
I think it was to rushed. Everything happened at the same time in a very short time.
Besides, I don't think Charlie would have let her stay there like that.
| angel04une chapter 1 . 4/1/2011
| Princess Mishawaka chapter 1 . 3/31/2011
Very good for a first time Twilight writer. You don't have to worry about the semi colon etc. just use spell checker BUT you do need an editor as you spell some words wrong and the spell checker won't find them if they are indeed a word. Such as crowed (crowd). Other than that you have it down pat.
I love the story line and Edward is a rapist. WOW. I can't wait to read the next chapter so I can find out what happens next. Keep writing just like telling someone to keep singing each story will get easier and better. If you only write for me then do it as I will be hear reading. Thank you Joan
| NO chapter 1 . 3/31/2011
This story was kind of weird. With the Edward thing even the rape was awkward..practice practice practice