|Reviews for Wonderland|
| MatchesMassa chapter 1 . 6/18/2013
I LOVE the tone of this story, as well as your other stories. I am a huge fan!
| Heracelio chapter 2 . 5/10/2012
What a mystic story!
I'm sure to read more later, so keep up with it!
| DarkSideOfTheMoon19 chapter 24 . 5/6/2012
My jaw is currently on the floor, I just can't believe that this story could be so existing and brilliant yet not have as much recognition as it deserves. The story is very creative and incredibly intelligent although it seems to be a story that doesn't really belong in a FanFic, it should be in a bookshop, under 'AMAZING', your writing is really set at a much higher caliber than any other FanFiction I've read.
As a reviewer mentioned earlier, this is one of the best Fanfics I have read this year! I love the fact that the story focuses mainly on Sonic, fighting his own personal demons whilst dealing with the multiple issues the present themselves in the story. This is a work of art, one that makes my efforts at Fanfiction look like horse manure ( I would be eternally grateful if you could check out the trilogy I have written, beginning with Messiah, just so you can cast your much valued opinion). Thanks so much for making this story!
| Consuelo chapter 15 . 3/29/2012
I honestly believe that the best decision I have made this year was reading this story, especially right after the sun set. I was up reading this story in pitch blackness with all my lights turned off for four hours straight, and I don't want to keep reading any of it until it gets dark again. This is probably the only story I've ever read that almost made me have a nightmare if it weren't for me constantly willing myself not to have one.
I am especially moved by your portrayal of Tails and what he's going through. While I do feel that his dialogue is far too sophisticated for his age, you acknowledged it in the story and so you get kudos in my book. His backstory is so breaking and tragic, it actually reminds me very much of the situation Rorschach had gone through in Watchmen, particularly the point where he ceased being Walter Kovaks and truly became his mask. Tails's development and his budding relationship with Sonic really helps pull the both of them out of their stupors and as the story goes on they morph more and more into their game counterparts, which is spectacular writing.
There are a couple of times when your choice of words isn't particularly grammatically correct. Occasionally you use "been" instead of "being", and there's a dropped article once or twice throughout each chapter. However, they never detract from the story and actually give a sense of dialect to the narrative, like these are all being told from an eloquent yet somewhat disconnected voice watching everyone from afar, which really adds to the tone and feeling of this story. I'm not certain if they were intentional or not, but if it wasn't then I suggest you should change them as you see fit, because a few of those instances I would be glad to consider happy accidents.
I'm eager to continue reading the rest of the story and I must encourage you to continue to write, because stories like these for a fandom-related subject are few, far between, and extremely valuable. So keep going.
| SoNiCrOxMaIsOx chapter 17 . 1/14/2012
Your writing style is so amazing *0*
| Doc. Dump chapter 1 . 12/11/2011
Such a pathetic story! This fic really sucks! WHAT A WASTE OF TIME! This was the worst fic I've ever read in my life! You need to update your skills pronto!
Read my fics and you'll improve!
| Plata-Azul Firebird chapter 11 . 8/23/2011
... Whoa... Mcgee much?
Not bad, demented mad and dark. Not really bad.
Although, it reminds me of Alice Madness Return (Spoiler: The doctor is the real meanie!), but there are differences.
Hope you update soon.
| CoraRoz chapter 1 . 8/5/2011
This story oddly reminds me of American McGee's Alice and Alice: Madness Returns, LOL. I'm not saying that like it's a bad thing; the games are cool!
| Captain Combat Beard chapter 11 . 7/30/2011
Oh, and one thing I've noticed, but I just have to play the most fitting tracks while reading. Like when I began reading the end of this chapter, I played "Trust" by Megadeth. And when reading Bean's story, "More Gun" from the Team Fortress 2 sound track fit the light-hearted beginning, slowly changing to eeriness of the forest scene. And Blackbird was also a nice choice for Big's chapter.
Great work so far. It's easily one of the better stories on this site in general.
| Captain Combat Beard chapter 7 . 7/27/2011
I picked this story at midnight due to the interesting, surreal premise it promised, the amount of words/chapter ratio, and because I'm having some trouble writing the ending to the story I'm working on.
At the time of writing this, it's 5:52, and I have to say: Oh boy did I make the right choice.
This is an amazing amount of effort and pride you put into this story. I love the level of massive amount of detail you write. I read your profile, and I'm somewhat afraid to point out as it seems like it would sound like an insult or whatever reason, but I think that your being in a medical hospital probably aided your writing ability. I mean, you were in there, you should know. I swore for a moment there I was reading some crazy mashup of Alice in Wonderland and Sonic directed by American McGee.
There are a couple things that wouldn't be so grand, if it weren't executed so well, being essentially inserting yourself into the story in the main character's shoes (your father was a rough Christian, and apparently, so is Sonic's), and stories that have similarities to one another. But, as I said, those were executed fairly well and because of that are merely pebbles in a parking lot.
And about your thriving to become an author. I would wish you good luck about producing a fine story, but you seemed to have evolved beyond pity things like luck when it comes to writing. From reading only seven chapters of your work, I can say that by the time you are done with college, you will definitely have the skill to produce a good story. What I say "Good Luck" is hoping it sells well.
And to think I said all that about a Sonic the Hedgehog fanfiction with ten chapters, having only read seven, and my current story being in the thirties.
tl;dr You are awesome. Keep being awesome.
| Hakimu chapter 9 . 7/3/2011
This is so creepy, I love it. Amy's chapter is my favorite, and Blaze's is the scariest so far.
| mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm chapter 5 . 5/3/2011
Oo, this is getting good! Cant wait to read some more!
| pupLaura chapter 1 . 5/3/2011
Beautifly done. I may not be a lover of nasty stories, but this isn't too bad so far. The fact that Sonic sang songs to pass the time turned around the fact he was chained up. But why make it so long, his time at Wonderland? What could possibly happen when Sonic arrives at Wonderland?
Better read more.
| Heart the Wolf chapter 2 . 4/2/2011
This is written beatutifully. It's so trippy XD love it
| WybiE'z KidNapPer chapter 2 . 3/31/2011
ooooooow this is so interesting :D