This is the same quality as HP and the MOR. You should try writing an original fanfiction. It'd probably be really funny if this is anything to go by. And harrys proposition in chapter 22 was actually convincing. I'd agree if I was Quirel

great read in the spirit of MoR.

I thoroughly enjoyed the thought you put into it. At times I forgot it was not part of the original MoR (plots, explanations etc. made me cackle almost as gleefully as in Less Wrong's writings).

I do agree with some of the other reviewers though. The character of dumbledore seemed a bit exaggerated and the formatting could be improved.

anyways, awesome job. 'tis a pity you've only written 1 story as i would have loved to read more of your writings

This story is amazing! As good as the original Methods of Rationality. The whole Quidditch match is a gem.

Overall, quite good.

There were issues with the formating, the most egregious being the lines in which a character talking was space over multiple lines, it should only have a new line after they finish talking.

I enjoyed this fic, and found it did fit well with Less Wrong's fic. I would love to see the inter-years wars carried out since the Ender's Game feeling to both your work and Less Wrong's is fun. Harry does give off an Ender Wiggen vib, and exploring that further could very interesting.

It always hurts to find that we are not as noble as we think, and we are never as noble as we think. I try to keep that in mind. It helps me be a little humble so that I can take criticism well.

Wow. This was the funniest Quidditch game I've ever read! breaking the goal posts? best strategy ever.

Thanks.

The exploration of aspects of the Harry Potter universe, games, ambition and other things were very interesting. There were some moments that felt cheesy and unrealistic, but not too many. I found the fourth-wall breaking unnecessary. I agree with the other reviewers that the bad grammar and formatting seriously hurt the story. I think the story is worth reading, but could be much better.

Very nice story. Hooked me in all the way to the end. I also liked your theorising about the ways that the quidditch balls work - it does make sense that they wouldn't be able to do anything too complex with them! The only part that stretched my imagination a bit was the spell that Harry uses to force the snitch to a location, because it seems odd that a spell would be able to do physics like that.

That said, I must complain about some things. The formatting is awful; All the line-breaks in spoken text are relly distracting. Furthermore, the grammar could be better.

One last thing, which is more of a personal gripe: the latter half of Harry's chat with Quirrel seems unrealistic for the characters of the MoR universe - Quirrel getting visibly angry? Blasphemy!

3/5

You have a great imagination and this was very thought-provoking, though you have a lot of grammar issues that sometimes make it harder to understand. You also have problems with the subjunctive mood (would...) when it should just be future tense. Great story anyway, and as English doesn't seem to be your first language, really good vocabulary. Keep writing!

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Thank you, nice story. I agree with other reviewers, the punctuation and grammar errors are a little distracting, but it's worth sticking with it for the content.

Absolutely gorgeous.

Worthy of Less wrong himself and one of the best pieces of work I have ever read. Very informative too.

I hope Less wrong make your solution to the snitch problem canon, for I can't find a better, more direct yet subtle way to end it.

Hope you continue writting.

This was an awsome read! Almost as good as MoRcanon.

Good story

Are u going to do the interyear war

To paraphrase one of your lines, this story may not be perfect, but it is redeemed by its desire to be Less Wrong