|Reviews for Forbidden Love: The Tale of Nafia and Windalf|
| Mark chapter 1 . 6/7
this is probably very late and honestly I've no idea if you're going to see this but i thought this was absolutely wonderful and i would love if this continued, whatever you're doing i hope you're still writing, be a shame if someone like you stopped
| sapphirekitten chapter 1 . 7/23/2011
To be honest, I've been curious about the story of Nafia and Windalf. It all seemed terribly romantic to me. However, they never really told the full story in the game and I even looked at summaries of the other Arc the Lad games, hoping that one was about them, but no luck. I was rather disappointed. So when I saw this fic I decided to give it a try. It's very well written so far, so I hope you'll continue with it. It may not be the truth of what happened, but it'll still help satisfy my curiosity and romantic heart.
| Pizazz chapter 1 . 7/20/2011
This is well done overall. :) I liked the dialogue, it sounded natural and showed the characters' personalities. It's great to see a story about Nafia and Windalf too - they receive far too little attention.
My main critique is the descriptions of Nafia and Windalf. The wording is very purple and, in the spirit of honesty, I cringed a little. I understand this is about their romance, but it can be romantic without terms like "molten chocolate". The rest of the writing sounds good, so the purple prose also stands out like a sore thumb (if you'll pardon the cliche).
All in all though, I like it and look forward to reading more. If you'd like, I can help help you with future chapters. Keep it up! :D
| Lunarspirit chapter 1 . 4/11/2011
I am very excited to read the rest of this story. There aren't many that focus on these two characters.
| sunder92 chapter 1 . 4/2/2011
i absolutely loved it! _ its a really bold look at a heretofore untold story, and a look into characters that really didn't much screen-time.
your a really talented writer, and i cant wait to hear more! XD
i DID think that nafia was a little quick to cast aside her human teachings, and for some reason when i was reading it in my head windalf had the voice of stewie griffin, but thats probably just because they were presented with information that was completly foreign to them. when someone tries something that no other person has ever done, they progress, more often than not, quickly and very VERY well, much like that one lady... you know, the one who wrote a fan fic of nafia and windalf? lolz.
keep it coming!