|Reviews for Strawberry Princess Panther King|
| flee27 chapter 5 . 10/28/2013
can't wait for the next chapter. i love grimm/ichi fics
| ktigris chapter 5 . 9/11/2012
i hope that you update soon i really want to know what happens next
| Soushite Bouya chapter 1 . 3/22/2012
| UmbraSidus chapter 4 . 6/21/2011
I like this story, it's cute how Grimmjow and Ichi interact _
| cccccCc chapter 4 . 5/14/2011
can't wait for the next chapter loved it please post soon! Are they going to have any problems between them? I wonder what soul city is going to do when or if it finds out?
| CatNtheHat chapter 4 . 4/23/2011
Okay so a few things i have to tell you:
A) Great story idea, i really like it. :D
B) You might want to work on explaining things more because you don't use alot of adhectives, so try to use more of them
C) Though i like your story idea, you might want to add a little more tension or some sort of plot twist because everything is going waaaayy too smoothly for it to be very interesting, I mean i know there is the threat from Soul Society about finding out about Grimm and Ichi but still, at the rate things are going at, people can easily assume that things will be perfect in the end you know? So try to add some sort of suspense or an intense emotion somewhere in the story
D) No offense, but the characters are very 2-D. I feel that you haven't developed them enough yet and sometimes they are a little too OOC. So please try to add some sort of dimension to your characters
E) Your spelling actually isn't that bad, actually, to tell you the truth, i have read fics before where alomost half of the words in the story were misspelled. Though you still need to improve on it because sometimes you wrote 'nite' instead of 'night' and things like that really bother me because this is an actual story so you're sort of not supposed to use text-talk in it.
F) Your grammer also isn't bad but sometimes, you might want to specify exactly who is talking because there were a couple of times where i got confused and had to check back to see who it was talking and to whom.
Now please don't think that this is a flame, because it's not i am just simply suggesting things that you could do to help improve your work, along with a reason why i feel you shoud do it.
I still like your idea though because it sounds like it could be a very interesting story, so please think about my suggestions and i hope to see some of your work soon :D
P.S YAY! I was your first reviewer! :DDD