Reviews for Jacked
lauraxxx chapter 21 . 2/17/2014
I really REALLY REALLY LOVED THIS!

Glad Helen didnt die.

On to the sequel. :)

As always awesome job.
lauraxxx chapter 18 . 2/17/2014
Sexy as a skid mark lol that's going in the bank!
lauraxxx chapter 17 . 2/17/2014
The twist with Billy setting Jim up was epic! Loved it, and how you linked Wallace getting her detective badge into it! Awesome
lauraxxx chapter 13 . 2/17/2014
Whooo Helen's back! Yay!

Ahhh this Jim guy really won't leave shit alone will he?! I wonder if Billy knows he's the center of some serious investigations in to him.

As always good job!
lauraxxx chapter 12 . 2/17/2014
So I know Billy's a bad guy, like a real bad guy but I can't help but love that man!

You write Billy, Joe and the whole gang really well, I don't think i've once cringed and though ' oh no this is awful, they would never behave like that'! Excellently done. You've really created a brotherhood between them all.
lauraxxx chapter 4 . 2/16/2014
Why you would of been worried about this chapter is beyond me. Loved the billy joey bondig, it was so believable.

I hope Danny comes round, good on her though for smacking Joe when he was being a dick!
lauraxxx chapter 2 . 2/16/2014
I really enjoyed this chapter :D They are all exactly how i'd imagine them!

Nice spin with Danny working at the diner, I was wondering how they were going to meet again.

The banter between the guys was great, really flowed nicely and effortlessly.

I did chuckle at the end with Billy entering the room standing to attention haha! Great chapter!
lauraxxx chapter 1 . 2/16/2014
So I won't lie, I was a little shocked that all of a sudden she wanted to bang him, but i'm intrigued and gonna continue because the writing was great!
zombiemoonbeam chapter 1 . 6/22/2011
Uhm, sequel please? I don't think I've loved a story like I loved this one! :)

you're a fantastic writer!
BYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE chapter 1 . 6/1/2011
Hahaha, I just started reading this, I had added it to my faves, but I had been really busy I didn't actually get to sit down and read it. I loved this chapter, and I know I'll love all the others since Joey is in it. I'll be back reading more in a bit! :)
xThexFightingxIrishx chapter 21 . 5/31/2011
AHA! well, i'm back, my dear, and you SURE as shit didn't disappoint me while i was gone. i saw that you did several updates and now i'm trying to get to them all. and of course, this was the first one that i saw was posted, so i read it. and the first things i can say are these quotes "holy fuckin' blond cheerleader batman that was epic!" and "okay? where'd my brain go? i had it, then i read this and i lost it. either that or it exploded due to greatness!" either way, i thought you'd enjoy those quotes and i find that i just LOVED the hell out of this! i found the billy and hell matchup everthing i'd thought it would be fucking hot as hell, can't get enough crazy, rough as a jackhammer, and leaving me dying for more. so i just have ONE more thing to say, dear: "I CAN'T WAIT TO READ YOUR NEW SEQUAL AND I'M GONNA GET TO IT JUST AS SOON AS I CAN!"
BloodiedAngel2362 chapter 21 . 5/29/2011
-Dances around.- AWESOME CHAPTER!

Oh man those boys. What are we going to do with those boys?

I was seriously in love with this chapter as soon as I started reading the competition they were having. I really love the way you write them. True to all their characters, brining them even more to life and just writing these amazing conversations between them. You got real talent!

-"Those two were my scraps." He turned his finger on Bodie. "Those two were my rejects." And he finally turned a finger on Tommy. "And your girlfriend doesn't count." He groaned and the rest of the men laughed.- Oh. My. God. Of course Billy was going to win but for some reason that response of his... put me in serious need of a Billy fix and of course what comes next doesn't help any.

-"What's your name?" He murmured. His voice was low and gravelly, rumbling through his chest. Billy knew the sound would chill her skin; he'd been told how delicious his voice felt and what it could do.

"Regina." She whispered, eyeing him nervously. Her pulse was visible against her neck and Billy wanted to laugh. He'd barely been standing there five seconds and he'd probably slickened her plenty.- Practically need a cold shower from that. Sheesh are you trying to kill me? lol.

-"Go fetch." Bodie shook his head and Baggy smiled in surprise.

"For real?" Billy threw him an irritated glare.

"Get goin', she aint gonna purr like that for long." Baggy shot from his seat and walked up to the bar.-

"Do I look like a fuckin' menu?" The men laughed as he lit the tip, exhaling with a grin. "Fuckin' do one nice thing…"

Those two bits right there, had me laughing so hard and smiling so big. Oh man. Really love the way you write the guys.

Here we go, another .God moment. I gotta admit I had a feeling she was alive but reading it and knowing for sure. Oh man. You just worded everything perfectly, gave Helen the perfect re-introduction.

-"Helen." He whispered, closing his eyes and panting for air. This was the best reception yet.

"Hey, Darley." His blue eyes flashed up at her and he shook his head.

"No. Not tonight." She frowned, confused.

"What—" He crushed his mouth to hers again.

"Tonight, I'm Billy." He moaned, pulling her away from the table and standing her in front of him. "And you're Helen." LONG LIVE BILLY DARLEY.

Thank you so much for giving me the Billy Darley fix you put me in need of. Don't know what I would've done without it.

"I want a Darley." Her and me both. )

Honestly this smut scene... I'm speechless. You've done amazing ones from the start but this one just... can you say lifelong need of cold showers? Damn. I wanted Billy and you certainly gave him to me, wrapped in a pretty bow and everything lol.

"Billy." She whispered. He shivered and growled, covering her throat with his lips. "Billy." She said, louder. If they were breaking rules, she might as well break this one too. "BILLY!" Helen screamed, climaxing with an arching back, writhing beneath him. He grunted and complied to his aching spine, releasing with a cry.- WOWIE you really are trying to kill me.

This chapter is going to read by me over and over and over and... you get the idea. It's just too i irresistible. Between this one and the bathroom one with Joe. -fans self to stop from getting overheated-

Okay I have taken up way to much review space but you more than earned it. I'm thrilled for the sequel. I honestly can't wait. Jacked has become, by far one of my favorite stories I have ever read on here and it will always be one of my favorites no matter what else is written. Of course I'm going to continue reading, I would be crazy not to.

-zips mouth shut before I keep ranting.- Awesome Work. Awesome Chapter. Awesome Story.

-H
BloodiedAngel2362 chapter 20 . 5/28/2011
I got one thing to say: Spoiled and loving it!

This starting paragraph: -Information was something the drug world thrived on. Without it, you could wind up dead. With it, you could run the city. Intelligence was key in making wise moves. Gang life was like a chess game but pieces would change the rules and you needed to be quick. One false move and you'd lose. Checkmate. Like a game, running a territory required allies and it brought enemies. Billy had known that long before he'd taken any leadership in Stokely. Friends kept you alive and competition kept you alert. You needed both to be successful. But he never thought he depended on Helen.- was BRILLIANT. That was a long quote but it was just so awesome. Detailed the ins and outs of gang life perfectly and gave a added view into Billy's life.

You wrote his feelings over Helen being gone managed to convey that he cared in his own way and her death took a toll on him all while keeping true to his character.

LOVE LOVE LOVE the scene between Joe and Bodie. I'm always happy when those two get some time together since they are obviously close, just like brothers.

-"Wait, Billy and Hells Gate? Fucked?" He said in surprise. Bodie laughed again, shaking his head at Joey's phrasing.

"In the back of a car. Like the horny fuckin' fourteen-year-olds they was." Joey grinned excessively, lying back on the car's hood.- Big smile on my face after reading that, got me laughing too. Gotta love Joe!

This bit right here: "Bein' in a room with Bill and Hell, shit. It was like sittin' in a dog ring." Joey smirked, envisioning his brother as a dog. A big pit bull. Bodie took another drag. "Never knew if they were gonna kill each other or start humpin'." Joey laughed and Bodie grinned up at him. "Fuckin' snarlin' at each other like animals. CLASSIC. LOVE IT! Seriously gave me a big shit eating grin. Gave me vivid images, got me smiling and laughing and gave me a bit of a Joe fix and Billy fix in one. Perfection.

It was very nice of Bodie to let Joe go early, back to his girl. That was a good moment between them.

Of course I loved the scene with Danny and Joe. You did a really wonderful job of incorporating what happened with Helen and Joe's brother and at the same time giving Danny and Joe some good ole smut.

-"Don't ever leave me." She whispered against his mouth. Again, her words shocked him and he pulled his head back, looking down at her face.

"No." He said. "I bent down and kissed her lips, meeting her tongue- Melts. I wouldn't want Joe to leave me either )

Great stuff girl. Heading to the next chapter now. XD

-H
Sparkly Blue Eyes chapter 21 . 5/28/2011
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YOU FUCKING ROCK MY FRIEND :) You hope we'd continue reading? Are you insane? Who would stop? Really? Best first chapter to a sequel EVER! :D

I loved the interactions between the boys! As always you nailed each one of them, their characters PERFECT. Your writing always makes me smile and i love that. They just have perfect chemistry and you clearly show that in your writing. This bit 'Her pulse was visible against her neck and Billy wanted to laugh. He'd barely been standing there five seconds and he'd probably slickened her plenty.' If Billy Darley was purring and mumuring like that in from of me...well :P

Oh my, you built it perfectly 'She was practically fucking him with her eyes, swooping up and down his body like he was a feast to be eaten. He charged down the hall as she disappeared in the lone room.

"We playin' tag?" He growled, turning into the entrance.

A figure was sitting on the table in the middle of the room, lit horribly by the small bulb above. Billy squinted, realizing it wasn't his prey, but another person entirely. Scorched blonde hair, long slender arms, hooded face, and dark eyes.' I did sit there and wonder who it could be? Had my hopefully suspicions and was like could it really be? HAHA Billy thought he was going to get an easy fuck beforehand...certainly wasn't expecting what happened next was he?

If i had to say all of the bits i loved, i'd have to paste the whole fucking thing - this was truly amazing and gripping! I have to say this scene was my favourite '"Helen." He whispered, closing his eyes and panting for air. This was the best reception yet.

"Hey, Darley." His blue eyes flashed up at her and he shook his head.

"No. Not tonight." She frowned, confused.

"What—" He crushed his mouth to hers again.

"Tonight, I'm Billy." He moaned, pulling her away from the table and standing her in front of him. "And you're Helen." With a quick tug, he brought her against his body, pressing every inch of her against his hard frame.' LOVE LOVE LOVE! Another side to Billy but as always you rocked it and kept him completely in character! Of course he'd act like that, he cared for her and your writing makes it so much more believable! Truly brilliant :)

Ah SMUT my favourite thing in the whole wide world LOL Girl? How awesome was that freaking scene? I was hooked on every word - wishing that Billy Darley would do me right! Do you see what you are doing to me? :P HAHA

OMG girl this made me smile so much '"Don't you fuckin' dare." She hissed, roughly pumping his cock between her legs. Billy snarled and laid his head back. "I will kill you if you're gentle." He looked up and dug his hands into her hips, flipping her yet again.

"Fine." He growled, ripping her shirt over her head.' As always Helen is freaking awesome and I LOVE her whole attitude! They just have it - and you write them perfectly together!

'"Helen." He purred, lapping at her mouth. She looked into his eyes and they went silent, staring. She'd been dead. Gone forever. He needed this from her.

"Billy." She whispered. He shivered and growled, covering her throat with his lips. "Billy." She said, louder. If they were breaking rules, she might as well break this one too. "BILLY!" Helen screamed, climaxing with an arching back, writhing beneath him.' Okay you officially have the 'queen of smut title' I'm so handing it over...LOL :P Amazing, require four cold showers after that :P haha! Please update soon girl, this story is fucking awesome and you my girl can't put a foot wrong!

HUGS

TTYS

-S xoxo
sunstar234 chapter 21 . 5/27/2011
grrrrrr such an amazing billy fix

hell is alive yeah

looking forward to THE SEQUEL :)))))
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