|Reviews for Through the Glass|
| Afatcat101 chapter 1 . 11/4/2011
Okay. Good storyline. It has potential. I want to give some advice on how to improve you're skills.
First of all, its a good story. I like it. The sentences become run-on's. You need you add periods, commas, colons, semi-colons, ellipses. Believe me, if you learn the rules of those punctuation marks (and yes, they all have more than one rule. Specific rules) then you'll add SO much life to your story and keep so Many people's attentions. Right now, seeing only commas and periods, and having uber long sentences that have no pauses in them whatsoever, makes it very difficult to read. And If you can't read or understand the story, you're going to lose focus and lose interest, and you'll stop reading the story. So look in to that; learn how to use punctuation.
Also, and I use this with everyone, use a thesaurus. You can bring your stories to life with synonyms.
All in all, good story. Keep it up.