Reviews for The Great Lion Aslan
Frodo's sister chapter 1 . 3/7
A well written and very descriptive poem.
Jesusfollower97 chapter 1 . 8/16/2014
Very good! Awesome poem!
Misty Blue chapter 1 . 8/30/2012
Ah, don't we all, my friend? I believe we all have that desire in our heart; for The Great Lion to visit us so that we can truly feel Him, even if we don't know it. But I also believe that he abides here in our world, too. Not only in Narnia. Well, unliss you mean the Real Narnia. Where His country lies.

Lovely, lovely poem! Just wonderful! God bless you, and keep writing.
Rosebud5 chapter 1 . 1/16/2012
I loved this! I was recently cast as Aslan in a local theater company production of Narnia, and this poem helped me develop my character! I loved this so much... Brava!

Much love and God bless,

Rosey "Aslan" ;-)
Swanwhite of narnia chapter 1 . 3/29/2011
that was a good poem, though if I may, I would like to make a suggestion...the last word 'abides' dosent really fit the context of the last stanza, I think the word would be 'resides' means to live in or to be in. But overall, a very descriptive and wonderful poem about Aslan.
FFww2reviewerJC chapter 1 . 2/21/2011
Good! But, since Aslan is based on Jesus, He should love everyone ;)
TaintedAngel26 chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
Nicely done...I completely agree with Dearheart's review, though. I think you should redo the last line, because He DOES exist in our world-He's Jesus (although he has a different name, He's the same) It's nice to see that there are still some believer's out there-kudos to you by the Lion's mane! Keep it up...and may the Lion be with you... :)
penspot chapter 1 . 5/22/2009
I did like your poem, but I think the rythym in some parts didn't flow.

1st Stanza

You can always see love, in his golden eyes

2nd stanza:

But to creatures He likes, Only love pass those gates

3rd stanza:

When he wish (it sounds more old english) them to be, But engage Him in battle, And they're terrible to see

4th:

His mane shines like gold, in the bright morning sun

5th:

I wish with my heart, that he'd visit me

6th: Yes is not needed. It sounds cool just to repeat it the same way in the 1st stanza.

That's my opinion. I thought it described Aslan very well and I really enjoyed your poem. :)

Cheers in our Lord

Jaden G.
Aravir Morningstar chapter 1 . 7/31/2007
Beautiful poetry! I did notice that the last verse is wrong. Aslan is in our world. Remember...'I am known by another name[Jesus]'. The CrON also hints that Aslan made other worlds besides ours and Narnia.

Otherwise:

ABSOLUTLY FABULOUS POETRY!
Dearheart chapter 1 . 7/1/2007
Praise be to the Lion! Another believer! Yipe! (Okay, shutting up...)

Hmm... First of all, the words are beautiful, but the rhyme sceme is rather stretched out; and your choices in rhymes are rather, um, obvious (which isn't nessesarily BAD, just kinda...uncreative? Oh, never mind...) _ Secondly, "But to creatures He likes, only love passes those gates"...the word "likes" seems rather weak and shallow for describing how Aslan feels about us. I dunno...what do you think? Thirdly, "But only in Narnia, is where he abides"...that is incorrect. The Lion of Judah also abides in our world, but here He has another name, remember? I'm sure you know what it is. _ Other than those little nitpicky details, it was wonderful! I'm glad your using your gifts to glorify God! Keep it up, ignore the flames and pray for the flamers. With the Shield of Faith, you are able to "extinguish all the firey darts of the Evil One" (Ephesians 6:10-17). May "Aslan keep you in His mighty paws".

Happy Writing!

Dearheart
titan616 chapter 1 . 5/4/2007
I absolutly love it. It captured everything perfectly.

(regarding the flamers) There was no reason to dislike it at all, it was perfectly written. It's to bad people hate god and good so much they'll actually flame this poem. I pray these flamers don't end up where they will end up if they continue down this road. Whether your christain or not depends on whether you agree with all of my post,but anyone can tell Aslan is all good and deserves to be loved. Anyone who hates him or this poem simply can't be good.
xSlytherclaWx chapter 1 . 2/12/2006
I loved that!
xXxWhereWillYouGoxXx chapter 1 . 1/27/2006
I have ventured back from current Narnia fics to find this WONDERFUL peice of poetry. "Aslan is strong,

As strong as can be,

I wish with all my heart,

He would come visit me!"

I think everyone that ever read any of the Narnia books feels the same here. Who wouldn't want to see Aslan. ((even though people (LIKE ME) might burst into tears upon seeing him))

Ignore the flamers, they're jealous of your obvious talent.

Mage
Marchioness of Blackadder chapter 1 . 12/29/2005
Loved it. I saved it and printed it and am putting it on the front of a binder for school so I'll see it every day. I try to write or make things that will help remind me that our Lion of Judah is by my side every day. This is another step.

Thank you.
98327432nnnnnnn chapter 1 . 12/21/2005
This is uber corny. Go find a new calling, k?
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