Reviews for Intrinsic
BnayyFF chapter 1 . 4/7/2011
really enjoyed this first chapter and I look forward to more. I love reading stories in the second person, really puts the reader right into the story. My only suggestion: at the end I was a little bit confused when you switched from second person to third person. So I would just try to decide which one you want to stick with. Great start though! definitely going on my alerts :)
twilightlover212 chapter 1 . 4/6/2011
i like it, it just reads a little confusing as if someone is reminding jacob about the day and how he feels, 3rd person maybe please
SomethingArbitrary chapter 1 . 4/6/2011
The most disappointing thing about this story was getting to the bottom and realising there wasn't another chapter. I like the second person perspective- it's different, and you've used it so well. I'm also glad to see characters with some depth (you could probably teach Stephanie Meyer something there :P)
Not-Interested19 chapter 1 . 4/6/2011
I loovvveee this fanfic! its one of the best, are you going to add another chapter? ;) hint...hint...
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