Reviews for A Day At Magicland
Guest chapter 1 . 1/18
janelle.singleton2 chapter 1 . 10/16/2013
That was CUTE!
ijnfleetadmiral chapter 1 . 9/21/2013
Great story!

Another way to ID the song is it's also the entrance theme to WWE's The Undertaker, when he was in his "American Badass" phase. Great song.
MoonlitSorrows chapter 1 . 6/6/2013
Awww. That's so cute!
Pixie's Mama chapter 1 . 4/6/2013
Reading this was like watching a short movie, following Bella around while she tried to make a hellish date work out, observing her through the eyes of Edward posing as Larry Lion. Your description enabled me to feel the temperature, the sights and sounds around Bella and the pulsing electricity between her and the beautiful young man in the lion costume, so unsure of himself. Wow!
Lilydukes chapter 1 . 1/18/2013
sillybella46 chapter 1 . 5/16/2012
do you know were i could find This Picture?
Molly Dooker chapter 1 . 3/9/2012
I couldn't stop smiling the entire time I read this story.
my1edward chapter 1 . 10/10/2011
What a sweet, funny story! I really liked it. I love the mental picture of Bella thinking some real creeper is inside the lion suit and then having it turn out to be Edward, *swoon*, who was just so taken with Bella he couldn't stop himself from following her around on her date from hell. Sorry about yours, btw.

Random fact here, strangely enough last week I had lunch with a guy who used to be the Princeton Tiger mascot, and he was a weird dude to say the least. Among other things, he said, "I really like to high five people, a lot!", and proceeded to demonstrate to all within reach. He is now a lawyer and works for a federal appellate judge and thinks he's God's gift to pretty much everything. He's young enough to be my son, but I'd sure as hell hate to go on a date with him if I was his age!
Lillie Cullen chapter 1 . 10/3/2011
This cracked me up - mostly because this actually happened to me! When my fiancee (now hubby) and I went to Walt Disney World for the first time, we went to Disney-MGM Studios and when you got off the Star Tours ride, Chewbacca was there to get your picture taken with. He actually grabbed my ass while my date was taking our picture! I wasn't sure whether to be flattered or creeped the heck out, and just prayed it was a guy in that costume.
FellowsheepOfThePeen chapter 1 . 10/2/2011
Edward'sChipper recommended your story at :

The official end of summer was about a month ago, but here in the Midwest we’re still holding on to some nice days. For my rec this week, I really wanted to find something a little…lighter, maybe even fluffy. *cringes* My lovely pal, AlexisDanaan, had sent me a few o/s to read after I sent out a homing beacon, and well…what do you know…it’s like she can read my freakin’ mind. I sooo flove her.

Summary: Poor college student Bella is on the worst date of her life with Mike at Magicland amusement park. On top of that, a creepy costumed character is stalking her around the park. A semi-sweet, sorta crackfic. AU AH Rated M for a few F-bombs.

Now, I think we all can identify with shittastic dates, and AC notes at the bottom that she based this on one of her own. It reminded me of one of mine, but substitute Great America, a soccer player, and no wandering-pawed Larry the Lion and…well, yeah. Speaking from a grade-A, Wordy-Bitch pov, I thought the brevity of this was perfect. I could imagine a few spots where it could’ve been drawn out, and for this type of semi-crackfic, wholly unnecessary.

Michael “call me Mike” Newton was her date today. Not two weeks ago, her college roommate Jessica had excitedly informed her that the “totally hot” super jock Newton had been asking around about her, and had even approached Jessica to ask if Bella was currently seeing anyone. Jessica had been that certain Mike was on the verge of asking Bella out, and eight days later, he did.

Bella had seen Mike around campus. He seemed to be popular (as local sports figures usually were) and he was also really good-looking in a blonde, blue-eyed, “I drink milk” sort of way. He also seemed jovial and polite when they spoke, so she decided to give dating him a try.

Now here they were, on their official first date, going to spend the day at Magicland theme park. When Mike had asked Bella where she would like to go, the idea instantly popped in her head.

The other thing I loved was the spot-on depiction of Mike Newton, and Bella’s inner-dialogue. Ones that caught me:

As Mike snapped the first pic, Bella felt Larry’s huge, furry palm creep down her back until it was cupping her left ass cheek! Just as Bella gasped and turned to look up into Larry’s face with an expression of shocked indignity, Larry turned his big head, frozen in a plastic grin, towards hers. Mike snapped the photo, and the moment was captured on Bella’s phone for posterity.

It looked like they were about to kiss.

It looked like a demented prom photo.

It kinda looked like bestiality porn.


“You!” she yelled. “What is your damn problem, CREEPER!”

He stood there in leonine shock, his large, blank, plastic eyes goggling at her unblinkingly.

“I seriously doubt that Magicland pays you to lurk around, molesting and stalking park visitors!” she continued heatedly.

He raised his faux-fur covered paws in some sort of pleading gesture, but Bella was on a roll. The remembered stench of Mike’s hot vomit was still stinging her sinus passages and making her bitchy.

“Look, buddy…I am currently on the date from hell with some douchebag that I never want to see again as long as I live. The last thing I need is some psycho in a lion costume breathing down my neck and trying to put his dirty paws all over my ass!” she fumed.

“So, if you would kindly take a hike, I can get back to trying to salvage whatever fun I can out of the crappiest date of my young life.” she finished.

You tell him, girrrrlfriend.

He placed his other hand on her, now holding her by both arms as he leaned in. Bella guessed that his expression was meant to be sultry, but he just looked really constipated.

I think we’ve all seen that look. *laughs hard*

I think what I found most…satisfying was the end, where Bella takes things into her own hands, or foot if you will. Oh, if I’d only had that opportunity.

If you’re looking for a cute quickie, and a spunky Bella, I highly recommend you jump on this one. Just remember to look out for Larry the Lion. *winks* Remember to leave AbruptlyChagrined some love and tell her the WordyBitches sent ya.
runway101 chapter 1 . 9/27/2011
Lmao i love this little story! And your right about people ib those costumes. They creep me out! When i was little i went to Universal with my family and Chuckie from thr Rugrats pulled my hair. Apparently the costume got stuck on my hair but since then i REFUSE to go near people in those costumes. But i guess if i knew a really hot guy was in the costume then i would go near him!
savannavansmutsmut chapter 1 . 9/21/2011
Loved it, sorry your date sucked but I am thrilled it inspired this awesome work of fic!
tone death chapter 1 . 8/15/2011
Oh just the image of Edward following her through the park dressed as Larry the Lion. Priceless.

Also him beating up Mike with his furry fists of fury. Made my day.
gabelle chapter 1 . 8/7/2011
Awesome story...laughed my ass off the whole time I was reading.
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