|Reviews for Haigeki|
| Guest chapter 13 . 10/21
(Pushed the wrong button, so continuing): not planetary tenki focal points. The fanfic matches the tone of neither side of the crossover. Combined with it mainly involving oc’s, it honestly reads more like an original story than a crossover fanfic.
| Guest chapter 13 . 10/21
Why didn’t pluto bring sailor moon in? I was able to buy the explanation of artemis possibly usurping the silver crystal, but with her out of the way, why not bring usagi in to cure the institute’s girl’s mental damage? She’s done that with the mass victoms of the dark kingdom and others before, so why not that time? That ties in to a broader criticism i have of this fic, which is that it has only a few ranma characters and a couple sailor moon characters that have even minor roles. The worldbuilding on the sailor moon side is largely author invention (the senshi are the incarnations of their planet’s souls, not
| SeaExplorer chapter 13 . 7/22
Thanks author, for these experience
Her pop and mom reaction, made me intrigued
| Guest chapter 9 . 7/22
Thinking, Ranma really had (extreme) high lucky, made a new spell in combat is very lucky. if her doesn't have it, imagine what happen in her confinement and brain washing periode. people willn't given her easy time, only feel constantly agony.
| Rory O'Kane chapter 8 . 4/24/2021
In the chapters since the invasion of the Institute, you’ve done an excellent job of toeing the line between hope and despair. I keep reading this story and thinking it’s getting too dark and depressing for me. I start reading the next scene, looking for another horror, an excuse to finally put this story down and save myself. But at that point I always find that Ranma has another plan, and it sounds like a good one. I get excited that it might actually work. You’ve paced the story just right to drag the reader through Ranma’s torment without losing them.
| Y2Ranma chapter 13 . 9/4/2020
I think a follow up is in order to show the aftermath
Is Ranma back to being a cursed man or is Ranma still a woman?
What is Ranma doing with the institute, Is it shut down or is it still running?
Does Ranma give the girls a choice to follow or go there own way?
What are Ranma’s relationships now with Genma & Nodoka, The Tendos, The Amazons, Ukyo, Ryoga & The Kunos?
What’s Ranma’s relationship with the Senshi?
Will someone else try to continue making the girls, girly slaves or Is there a new threat?
| nobodyreallyimportant chapter 13 . 3/4/2020
And so it ends with the immortal word "Neaarrowwoom." I cant think of a more fitting way to end a story.
| PasiveNox chapter 13 . 2/28/2019
| Ozzallos chapter 13 . 11/18/2018
Whew. I finally came back to this after a few years, mainly having lost track of it while waiting for the story to build sufficient material. So, sorry for the late review.
As with my prior review, I'm horribly conflicted. On on hand you are an excellent technical writer. The level of detail you bring to the table should be the standard by which fanfiction is judged. On the other, it's one of this fic's biggest weaknesses, bringing so much narrative to the table that it drags it down in many places.
In terms of plot and aside from the above issues, it's thrilling. There are times Ranma doesn't get a saving throw, something you don't see happen all too often in fanfiction. The torture/behavior modification sections were the hardest for me to work through, causing my stomach to churn at times. I teetered on the edge of fic!quit, but soldiered through. I think the ability to create such a mixture of emotions is the mark of a good plot, though that is a double-edged sword itself.
The battle sequence toward the end was exceptional, though I would be remiss in mentioning how Ranma's canon is all but gutted shorted of a handful of key characters. Beyond them, Nerima simply didn't exist.
Okay, so the gripes are out of the way. I'm still jealous of your ability to flesh out a coherant, sensible magic system and the myraid of other details that went into the plots creation. As I said, excellent job.
| Mr.Destructo chapter 1 . 11/11/2018
was a good story over all the midfuck/rape chapters kinda dragged on too long and seriously was looking forward to seeing the government officials put in their place killed or enslaved for their crimes but otherwise a good story
| Mr.Destructo chapter 13 . 11/11/2018
so wait what happened to all those government officials taking underage kidnapped little girls as sexual bribes? why the hell did ranma not just enslave them with his magic cause i think they deserve either that or death and it would give him better footing within the government to make them loyal to him and its a strange thing to ignore in an epilogue after including it in your story a few times before hand i mean how many of those girls are still out there being raped
| Mr.Destructo chapter 7 . 11/11/2018
honestly seems more like horror/tragedy than an adventure/drama even if its well written there seems to be way too much mindfuck going on that's largely a whole lot of nothing but the same thing over and over
| Forum Explorer chapter 13 . 10/26/2018
A good story overall, even if I don't 100% approve of how Ranma developed. But there were no issues in how it was done, so yeah good job.
My only criticism is that it dragged on too long. Chapter 12 in particular.
| Jack chapter 13 . 10/24/2018
Yeah no. I mentioned this in the last chapter review but while the rest of this story has been great, this aftermath section seems kind of stupid.
Why does ranma have an obligation to the institute? She should be destroying it.
Why does she care about the prime minister or the diet? They were complicit in artemis's crimes and have no real power to effect anything she does since she has an effective monopoly on magic, strength and mind control.
Why is ranma accepting people as 'military assets' when she should be freeing them, and why on earth is she allowing one of the other girls to continue to brainwash her? If she's allowing her mind and judgement to be compromised like that then what was even the point of taking over?
No, dismantle the institute, drag all the politicians through the mud, free all the girls and find a way to erase any databases with their id's in it. Use the position and authority of director as a tool in that dismantlement, not as a real duty that actually needs to be fulfilled.
The world is better off without the pretty princess institute, and the fact that that even needs to be said is kind of shocking.
| Jack chapter 12 . 10/24/2018
Not really sure what the big deal is about becoming director. Just free everyone to the best of your ability then shut the place down. If the politicians complain then beat the shit out of them and reveal that they accepted sex slaves in exchange for covering up artemis's crimes. Then get on with your life.
Looks like a real simple solution to me.
Accepting any further alterations is obviously stupid and should not be done.