Reviews for Divine Secrets
Guest chapter 21 . 6/9
Please update soon.
tralalala chapter 16 . 10/31/2016
tralala chapter 11 . 10/31/2016
Intriguing, what's going on.
trajalala chapter 10 . 10/31/2016
Wonder if it's Juugo's bf.
tralalala chapter 9 . 10/31/2016
tralalala chapter 3 . 10/30/2016
Guest chapter 21 . 10/16/2015
This is the best fan fiction of kibanaru that I have ever read in my life
i am a person chapter 3 . 7/31/2015
omg normally i love ino and hate sakura but now its reversed! your awesome because i always try to like sakura but can't!
Guest chapter 19 . 4/2/2015
l sp I don't kwon
Guest chapter 15 . 3/28/2015
joe chapter 7 . 3/25/2015
Wolfie the Edgelord chapter 1 . 3/2/2015
Damn, your description of Naruto is basically me a few years back. 'cept far more social and with more friends, and the tiny fact that I always have all my clothes on unless I'm at the pool, at the beach, or in the shower. I even, sleep completely clothed. Also, I'm bi, but other than that it's pretty accurate.
anon chapter 1 . 2/16/2015
Your chapters are unnecessarily descriptive. It's way too dragging to read, the way you describe every detail of everything. It's good to be descriptive, but too much of it could be the downfall of a good plot. Check your grammar too. It's best to get a good beta.
Joco3899 chapter 1 . 3/7/2014
Hey, I've been writing and roleplaying [different things...] for six years and can already see that you're slightly experienced but not the best[... but you're summary hooked me so I have to give you advice instead of chewing you out for doing nothing. Why do I always have to be the good boy!?]

Repetitiveness bad writing and, after a while, it becomes annoying.

Instead of using "he" so much use things like "Squirting the tooth paste on his toothbrush, as usual, the teen soon enough rose it to his mouth and brushed roughly, ignorant of what he was doing to the poor tool."

Although, if you want it to be shorter you could try an alternative such as "Naruto squirt toothpaste on his orange and black toothbrush, raising it to his teeth and brushing, roughly."

I'm sorry, I'm a stickler for details... but you get the gist! [I have OCD... so... details... many... many... details! ELLIPSES REPLACE ALL ZE THINGS! I WUV YOU! *Snuggles and skitters off to read more.*
Lloyd chapter 17 . 11/23/2013
My other gues is niji or possibly Edward
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