Reviews for Blurred Axis
Night-Huntress019 chapter 1 . 4/12/2011
This was really good and sad. It points out things that make you stop and think, especially the line "When does a human really open its eyes?"
Malcontent Ash chapter 1 . 4/11/2011
I'm just going to write a really quick review. First of all, I really liked your writing style and loved your descriptions. They were very beautiful and poetic. On the other hand, writers who write in the first and second person have to write extremely carefully in order to show and not tell. Stories are more enjoyable when readers have the chance to draw some conclusions. Instead of saying that someone is in love, show it. Do you know what I mean?

I really liked the idea behind this story as well and I loved the line about Feli breaking into pieces and Ludwig loving them immensely. The only other thing I would say is to consider clarifying the story a bit. It's a little bit confusing what it going on in the story. I need to go. Great story. Bye!